Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct tense and collocation (e.g., "I've been working for nearly a year"), and limit to 2–3 sentences. Add one specific detail about your job to enrich the answer.

Exemplo: I'm currently working and I've been in my first job for nearly a year. It's been rewarding but challenging; for example, I manage administrative tasks that have helped me develop organization skills.

Sugestão: Give a direct location statement, avoid filler phrases and repetition (remove "you know", "all overall"). Use one linking phrase to add a specific reason why the location is convenient and one concrete example (e.g., time or money saved). Keep it to 2 sentences.

Exemplo: I work at a small administrative office just a ten-minute walk from my home. Because it's so close, I save around an hour each day on commuting and spend less on transport.

Sugestão: Answer directly and avoid hesitation (remove "uh"). Use clear linking words (e.g., "because" then "for example") and be specific about what you learned and how it helps your future. Keep to 2–3 sentences and correct grammar (e.g., "weaknesses", "rules that are").

Exemplo: Yes, it's a good place to work because I've been able to improve my strengths and address my weaknesses. For example, I've learned various administrative procedures that will be essential for my future career in office management.

Sugestão: Provide a concise affirmative statement followed by a specific reason and one detail (time or money saved). Correct grammar ("lessens" -> "reduces", or "lessens my travel expenses"). Avoid repeating earlier content exactly; add a small new detail to enrich the answer.

Exemplo: Yes, I like it because it's very close to home, which reduces my commute to about 15 minutes. As a result, I save both time and money on transport and have more free time in the evenings.

Sugestão: State your plans clearly with correct grammar and sequencing words (first, second). Avoid fillers like "umm" and repetitions. Be specific about which skills you want to improve and what kind of job matches your interests. Two to three sentences are enough.

Exemplo: First, I plan to improve my administrative and computer skills through online courses. Second, I hope to find a job that matches my interest in office management, ideally with more responsibility in coordination or HR.

× I am now working and I am proud that I am almost one year working on my first job.

✓ I am now working, and I am proud that I have been working at my first job for almost one year.

The sentence mixes present simple and a time duration that requires the present perfect continuous or present perfect. Use 'have been working' to indicate an action that started in the past and continues to the present; also use 'for almost one year' to express duration.

× I think it is happy and at the same time hard and fulfilling working today.

✓ I think it is enjoyable, and at the same time hard and fulfilling to work here.

The original uses 'it is happy' which is unnatural; 'enjoyable' fits better. The gerund phrase 'working today' is awkward with 'today'; use 'to work here' or 'to work' to describe the job in general. Ensure adjective choice and infinitive/gerund structure match the intended meaning.

× Well, I'm currently working here near our home, it is really convenient for me as I save a lot of money and you know lessen my all overall hassle in commuting.

✓ Well, I'm currently working near our home; it is really convenient for me because I save a lot of money and reduce my overall hassle in commuting.

'Working here near our home' is acceptable but redundant 'here' can be omitted. 'As' is okay but 'because' is clearer. 'Lessen my all overall hassle' is ungrammatical; use 'reduce my overall hassle' or 'reduce the hassle of commuting.' Use correct verb 'reduce' and correct noun phrase order.

× I really have love how it is convenient for me as.

✓ I really love how convenient it is for me.

'Have love' is incorrect; use the verb 'love'. The clause 'how it is convenient for me' should be 'how convenient it is for me.' Remove the trailing 'as.'

× Well, for me, it is a good place to work because I really, uh, learned to hone my skills, to improve my strengths, and of course, to emphasize my weakness.

✓ Well, for me, it is a good place to work because I have learned to hone my skills, improve my strengths, and, of course, address my weaknesses.

The speaker is referring to learning up to now, so present perfect 'have learned' is appropriate. Parallelism requires consistent verb forms: 'hone,' 'improve,' 'address.' 'Emphasize my weakness' is wrong meaning; 'address' or 'work on my weaknesses' is correct. Use plural 'weaknesses.'

× As of today, I have learned so many things such as different kinds of administrative rules that is very essential for my future work.

✓ As of today, I have learned many things, such as different kinds of administrative rules that are very essential for my future work.

'That is' must agree with the plural noun 'rules,' so use 'that are.' Also 'so many things' can be simplified to 'many things.' Ensure subject-verb agreement between noun and relative clause verb.

× Yes, I like the place where I'm working right now because it is very near our home.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I am working right now because it is very near our home.

Contraction 'I'm' is acceptable in speech; expanded form is equally correct. No major grammar error—this suggestion keeps tense consistent. (Minor suggestion: 'where I work' is also natural.)

× This work is really giving me convenience as it lessens my time in commuting and lessen my budget for traveling.

✓ This job is really convenient because it reduces my commuting time and lowers my travel budget.

'Giving me convenience' is awkward; 'is convenient' is natural. Use verbs that agree with singular subject: 'reduces' and 'lowers.' Parallel structure: 'reduces my commuting time and lowers my travel budget.'

× Today, as of today, my future work plans is to first of all umm improve my overall skills, second is to have a job that is what I really want are near to my interest.

✓ As of today, my future work plans are, first of all, to improve my overall skills; secondly, to have a job that matches my interests.

Subject 'plans' is plural, so use 'are' not 'is.' Use infinitives 'to improve' and 'to have' for parallelism. The clause 'a job that is what I really want are near to my interest' is ungrammatical; use 'a job that matches my interests' or 'a job that is close to my interests.' Ensure subject-verb agreement and clearer, parallel phrasing.