Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and use present simple for current status; avoid mixing past and present without clear reason. Start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly explain the reason for resigning using a linking word (e.g., because/so) and one specific detail. Keep to under five sentences.

Exemplo: I am a registered nurse. I recently resigned from my job because I am preparing for the UK licensing computer-based test, which requires focused study and exam booking. I hope to retake clinical practice after I obtain the license.

Sugestão: Use present or past consistently and give one specific detail about your role to enrich the answer. Use a linking word like "and" or "during" to connect duration and experience. Keep it concise and natural.

Exemplo: I worked at Malibu Polymedic General Hospital, a private hospital in Malibui City. I was a staff nurse there for one year and three months, and during that time I gained hands-on experience in patient care and medication administration.

Sugestão: Avoid repetition and make the explanation specific. Start with a clear opinion, then give one or two concrete reasons linked with connectors such as "because" or "for example." Limit to three sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, MPGHI is a great place to work because it provides strong mentorship for newly registered nurses. For example, senior staff regularly guide juniors during rounds, which helped me improve clinical decision-making.

Sugestão: Use present tense for general feelings and be specific about opportunities. Combine similar ideas to avoid redundancy and use linking words like "and" or "in particular."

Exemplo: Yes, I liked the hospital because it gave me many opportunities to learn and grow. In particular, training sessions and hands-on mentorship helped me improve practical skills and professional attitude.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence about your plan, then add a specific reason or a short plan using linking words like "so" or "because." Correct small grammar issues (e.g., "who are in need" → "who need care").

Exemplo: I plan to work in a large hospital, ideally in a medical-surgical ward, because I want to care for a wide variety of patients. This will allow me to develop advanced clinical skills and contribute to high-quality patient care.

× I am a registered nurse and I worked as a staff nurse in a private hospital here in our city.

✓ I am a registered nurse and I worked as a staff nurse in a private hospital here in our city.

No correction needed for tense here because the speaker states current status ('I am a registered nurse') and then refers to a past job ('I worked as a staff nurse'). This sentence is grammatically acceptable; retain past tense for the previous employment.

× However, I resigned as I am preparing for my computer based test for United Kingdom license.

✓ However, I resigned because I am preparing for my computer-based test for a United Kingdom license.

The problem is not tense but word choice and linking. Use 'because' for cause rather than 'as' (which can be ambiguous). Add a hyphen in 'computer-based' and include the article 'a' before 'United Kingdom license'. The present continuous 'am preparing' correctly shows ongoing action.

× I worked in Malibu I Polymedic General Hospital Incorporated, which is a private hospital in Malibui City.

✓ I worked at Malibu Polymedic General Hospital Incorporated, which is a private hospital in Malibui City.

Use the preposition 'at' for places of work rather than 'in' when naming an institution. Also remove stray 'I' after 'Malibu' and ensure consistent spelling of 'Malibui' if needed. The past tense 'worked' is correct for previous employment.

× I was a staff nurse for one year and three months and it was a good learning experience for me.

✓ I was a staff nurse for one year and three months, and it was a good learning experience for me.

No tense change required; sentence is grammatically acceptable. Add a comma before 'and' to improve clarity when joining two independent clauses.

× For example, you are a newly registered nurse or any healthcare professional.

✓ For example, if you are a newly registered nurse or any healthcare professional,

The original fragment is abrupt and uses 'you' in a general explanatory example. Add 'if' and restructure as a subordinating clause to connect it to the next idea; the sentence as given was a sentence fragment. Also ensure the clause is completed in the following text.

× It is a very good environment for learning to foster collaboration with healthcare professionals.

✓ It is a very good environment for learning and for fostering collaboration among healthcare professionals.

The original mixes infinitive forms awkwardly. Use parallel structure: 'for learning' and 'for fostering'. Use 'among' to indicate collaboration between multiple professionals. This improves clarity and grammatical parallelism.

× Overall a very good place.

✓ Overall, it is a very good place.

Original is a sentence fragment missing a verb. Add 'it is' and a comma after 'Overall' to form a complete sentence.

× I would say I liked the hospital.

✓ I would say I liked the hospital.

This sentence can be acceptable depending on nuance: 'would say' is a present conditional about a past opinion; keeping past 'liked' is fine. No grammatical correction required.

× It gave me plenty of opportunities to learn, grow and be a better nurse.

✓ It gave me plenty of opportunities to learn, grow, and become a better nurse.

Add a comma in a list (serial comma) for clarity and use 'become' instead of 'be' for more natural collocation in this context. Tense remains past, which is appropriate.

× It taught me to be skillful, and it also helped me hone my knowledge and attitude as a registered nurse.

✓ It taught me to be skillful, and it also helped me hone my knowledge and attitudes as a registered nurse.

'Attitude' should be plural 'attitudes' when referring to multiple aspects of professional behavior. The rest of the sentence is fine; maintain past tense.

× I envision myself to work in a big hospital.

✓ I envision myself working in a big hospital.

After 'envision myself' we use the -ing form (gerund) rather than 'to' + infinitive. Use 'working' to express a future plan or aspiration. This corrects verb form usage.

× I want to provide care to patients in the medical surgical ward and to be able to provide quality care to everyone who are in need.

✓ I want to provide care to patients in the medical-surgical ward and to be able to provide quality care to everyone who is in need.

Use a hyphen in 'medical-surgical' and 'patients in the medical-surgical ward' is correct. Change 'who are in need' to 'who is in need' when referring back to 'everyone' (singular indefinite pronoun), so use singular verb 'is'. Alternatively, rephrase as 'who are in need' and change 'everyone' to 'people' for plural agreement. Maintain infinitive 'to provide' for parallel structure.