Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, correct small grammar issues, avoid fillers (uh), and keep within 2–4 sentences. Use linking words briefly to show sequence (e.g., initially, however). Also correct verb forms and countable nouns (three years' experience, my mum suggested).

Exemplo: I’m currently working as an auditor with three years’ experience. Initially I didn’t plan to become an auditor because it sounded a bit boring; however, my mother suggested it would give me a solid foundation in finance, so I chose this career.

Sugestão: Give a direct topic sentence, fix grammar (singular/plural, verb forms), reduce fillers, and break into two sentences for clarity. Add a linking phrase to connect ideas (and now, because). Provide a specific detail about responsibilities or challenges to enrich content.

Exemplo: I work as an auditor at an accounting firm; our department has about 50 people. I was recently promoted to senior, so I now have more responsibilities and I’m facing new challenges such as supervising junior staff and managing tighter deadlines.

Sugestão: Answer directly and naturally. Remove fillers and awkward phrasing; use clearer adjectives and combine related points with linking words (for example, because, and). Be specific about what makes the environment good and avoid vague statements like "part of my dream."

Exemplo: Yes, it’s a good place to work. The office is in a central, modern building with pleasant facilities, and my colleagues are friendly and supportive, which makes the daily work environment enjoyable.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear topic sentence and avoid unclear phrasing ("a place where I walk"). Use linking words (for example, because, so) and correct countable/uncountable grammar (much/ many advice → much advice / a lot of helpful advice). Give one specific example of support to strengthen the answer.

Exemplo: Yes, I like working there because my colleagues are friendly and very approachable. For example, when I have questions I can ask a senior directly and they patiently explain procedures and give me helpful advice.

Sugestão: Give a clear, specific plan: start with a topic sentence stating your plan, use linking words (because, so), avoid fillers and vague phrasing ("handle it like in the past"). Mention concrete goals or steps (e.g., obtain a certification, lead a team) to make the answer more informative.

Exemplo: In five years I plan to still be with this company and to have established myself in my senior role. Specifically, I aim to lead a small audit team and complete a professional qualification such as ACCA to improve my technical skills.

× Uh, I'm working now.

✓ Uh, I am working now.

Use of contraction 'I'm' is acceptable in speech but ensure consistency; this sentence is grammatically correct in present continuous to describe a current job. No change required except writing out 'I am' for formality. (Category 6: Present tense issue)

× I'm an auditor with three years experience.

✓ I'm an auditor with three years' experience.

When expressing a period of time as a noun modifier, use the possessive apostrophe: 'three years' experience'. Also 'an auditor' is correct. (Category 22: Article errors)

× in the beginning, I don't want to become an auditor because I found it might be a little boring.

✓ In the beginning, I didn't want to become an auditor because I thought it might be a little boring.

The time reference is past, so use past tense 'didn't want' and 'thought' rather than present 'don't want' and 'found'. 'Found' is awkward; 'thought' better conveys opinion. (Category 5: Past tense issue)

× However, my mom suggest that I should become an auditor because it gives you a solid foundation of the whole finance world.

✓ However, my mom suggested that I should become an auditor because it gives you a solid foundation in the whole finance world.

The reporting verb should be past 'suggested' to match the past narrative. Also change preposition 'of' to 'in' for 'foundation in the whole finance world'. (Category 5: Past tense issue and 11: Incorrect use of prepositions)

× That's a story how I become an auditor.

✓ That's the story of how I became an auditor.

Use 'the story of how' and past tense 'became' to describe a past event. The original word order and tense were incorrect. (Category 26: Sentence structure errors and 5: Past tense issue)

× I work in an accounting firms as an auditor umm there are around 50 peoples in our department and as I just promote to senior I need to have more responsibility this year and I'm facing a lot of challenges now.

✓ I work in an accounting firm as an auditor. There are around 50 people in our department, and as I was just promoted to senior, I have more responsibilities this year and I am facing a lot of challenges now.

Use singular 'firm' with 'an accounting firm'. 'People' is the correct plural (not 'peoples'). Use past passive 'was just promoted' for the change of role, and plural 'responsibilities'. Split run-on sentence into shorter sentences for clarity. (Category 11: Incorrect use of prepositions, 1: Singular and plural issue, 5: Past tense issue, 27: Subject-verb agreement errors)

× Uh, yes, it is a good place, uh, to work.

✓ Uh, yes, it is a good place to work.

The original is acceptable in spoken English; removing the extra comma improves fluency. Tense is appropriate present. (Category 6: Present tense issue)

× First, the environment of the company is really good.

✓ First, the company's environment is really good.

Use the possessive form 'the company's environment' or 'the work environment' for natural phrasing. 'Environment of the company' is grammatical but less natural. (Category 11: Incorrect use of prepositions)

× Uh, I mean, it is in central and it is in a fancy building.

✓ Uh, I mean, it is in the central area and it is in a fancy building.

Use 'the central area' or 'central location' rather than 'in central'. Add 'the' for specificity. (Category 11: Incorrect use of prepositions and 17: Incorrect use of the definite article)

× So, uh, I achieved part of my dream if we speak into that.

✓ So, uh, I have achieved part of my dream if we speak in those terms.

Use present perfect 'have achieved' to link past achievement to the present. 'Speak into that' is incorrect; use 'speak in those terms'. (Category 5: Past tense issue and 11: Incorrect use of prepositions)

× The other thing is people there are nice as well.

✓ The other thing is that the people there are nice as well.

Insert 'that' for a noun clause and include 'the' before 'people' for specificity. Subject-verb agreement is fine but the sentence needs 'that' to be smooth. (Category 27: Subject-verb agreement errors and 17: Incorrect use of the definite article)

× Yes, I like, it's a place where I walk because I feel like all of my colleagues are very nice and they are very approachable.

✓ Yes, I like it; it's a place where I fit in because I feel all of my colleagues are very nice and approachable.

'I like, it's' is ungrammatical; separate clauses and use 'I like it'. 'Where I walk' is wrong—likely 'where I fit in' or 'where I feel comfortable'. Streamline 'they are very approachable' to 'approachable'. (Category 12: Incorrect use of pronouns and 26: Sentence structure errors)

× Uh, sometimes I have questions I can just ask them directly.

✓ Uh, sometimes I have questions I can just ask them directly.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; optionally add a comma: 'Sometimes, I have questions, and I can just ask them directly.' No core errors matching list. (Category 22: Article errors)

× They are always very patient and they provide me many helpful, uh, advice.

✓ They are always very patient and they provide me with a lot of helpful advice.

'Advice' is uncountable, so use 'a lot of helpful advice' or 'many helpful tips'. Add 'with' after 'provide me'. (Category 13: Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs and 14: Incorrect use of quantifiers)

× Well, uh, in five years I plan to stay in the company as I'm just about to start my senior role this year and I feel like I have more responsibilities now.

✓ Well, in five years I plan to still be with the company, as I'm just about to start my senior role this year and I feel like I have more responsibilities now.

Use 'plan to still be with' or 'plan to stay with' for future intention. Tense consistency: 'I'm just about to start' (present continuous for near future) is fine. Minor wording improvements for natural phrasing. (Category 7: Future tense issue and 6: Present tense issue)

× I hope I can handle it like in the past, uh, in the following five years.

✓ I hope I can handle it as I have in the past, over the next five years.

Use 'as I have in the past' for comparison to past performance and 'over the next five years' for the upcoming period. 'Following five years' is less natural. (Category 7: Future tense issue and 26: Sentence structure errors)