Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 文法と発音の重複や冠詞の欠落を直し、構文を簡潔にまとめましょう。また同じ語（analyze）が重複している点や不要な語（I also I）が入っている点を修正してください。具体的には主題文で職業を明確に述べ、その後に仕事内容を2つまでの短い支援文で述べると良いです。

Exemplo: I'm a consultant at an e-commerce company. I mainly develop sales strategies and analyze customer data. I also give presentations to clients when needed.

Sugestão: 定冠詞の使い方（at the office, I have my own desk）と関係代名詞の自然な使い方を直しましょう。場所の説明は一文で要点を述べ、補足で理由を短く述べると流れが良くなります。具体的には場所の名前と利点を明確に分けて話してください。

Exemplo: I usually work at the office near Takotama gas station. The office suits me because I have my own desk, which helps me concentrate.

Sugestão: 非常に自然で理由も述べられていますが、冠詞（a good place）や接続の簡潔化を意識しましょう。リンクワード（for example, so）を使い、文を2〜3文以内にまとめるとより効果的です。具体的には効果（refreshed）→結果（concentrate）という順で繋げてください。

Exemplo: Yes, it's a good place for me because I can see beautiful scenery from my desk. That view refreshes me, so I can concentrate better at work.

Sugestão: まず質問の時制と意味を確認（Would you like the place where you work? は好みの確認）し、現在の好みを述べる際は'working at home'ではなく 'work from home' や 'work at home' の自然な表現を使い、'the workplace' の前に冠詞を入れてください。理由は一文で簡潔に。

Exemplo: Yes, I prefer working from home because I don't have to take a train to get to the workplace.

Sugestão: 'workout' は誤用で 'work at' または 'work for' を使います。目的と現在の準備（studying English）を論理的に繋げるために、まず将来の職業目標を明確に述べ、その理由と現在の準備を続けて述べてください。文は2〜3文に分け、具体性（どのように貢献したいか）を加えるとさらに良くなります。

Exemplo: I want to work for an entertainment company in the future because I'd like to help Japanese entertainment reach international audiences. That's why I'm studying English now to communicate better and build overseas partnerships.

× I'm working as a consultant at e-commerce company.

✓ I'm working as a consultant at an e-commerce company.

The noun phrase 'e-commerce company' requires an article. Because 'e-commerce company' begins with a vowel sound, use the indefinite article 'an'. Use 'a' or 'an' with singular, countable nouns when introducing them for the first time: 'an e-commerce company'.

× I usually make sales strategies and analyze analyze the data.

✓ I usually create sales strategies and analyze the data.

'Make sales strategies' is not the most natural collocation in English; 'create' or 'develop' is better. Also there was a repeated word 'analyze'. Keep a single verb 'analyze the data'. This sentence uses present simple to describe habitual actions, so 'usually create' and 'analyze' are appropriate.

× I also I sometimes make presentations for my clients.

✓ I also sometimes make presentations for my clients.

There is an extra 'I' causing redundancy. Adverb placement: 'also' and 'sometimes' can both appear; 'I also sometimes make' or 'I sometimes also make' are possible, but 'I also sometimes make' is natural. Remove the duplicated pronoun.

× I usually work at office which is located at Takotama gas station.

✓ I usually work at the office which is located at Takotama Gas Station.

When referring to a specific workplace, use the definite article 'the office'. Place names like 'Gas Station' are capitalized in English. Alternatively, 'work in the office' is also possible: 'I usually work in the office located at Takotama Gas Station.' Using 'at office' without an article is incorrect.

× Its place helps me focus on working because I have own desk.

✓ That place helps me focus on my work because I have my own desk.

'Its place' is awkward; use 'That place' or 'The place'. 'Focus on working' is acceptable but 'focus on my work' is more natural. Missing possessive 'my' before 'own desk'—use 'my own desk'.

× Yes, it's good place for me because I can see beautiful scenery from my desk.

✓ Yes, it's a good place for me because I can see beautiful scenery from my desk.

'Good place' is a singular, countable noun and needs the indefinite article 'a'. Without the article the noun phrase is ungrammatical.

× It helps me feel refreshed and also I can concentrate better.

✓ It helps me feel refreshed, and I can also concentrate better.

The sentence is understandable but the conjunction and adverb order is off. Place the comma before 'and' when joining independent clauses. 'I can also concentrate better' flows more naturally than 'also I can'.

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Do you like the place where you work?

This example is from the examiner; the student's reply later uses 'I like working at my home...' No correction required for the question itself. If treated as student's production, 'Would you like...' asks about preference for being at that place; 'Do you like...' more directly asks about current feelings. Choice depends on intended meaning.

× I like working at my home because I don't need to take a train to go to workplace.

✓ I like working at home because I don't need to take a train to go to the workplace.

Use 'work at home' or simply 'working at home' (omit 'my'). 'Go to workplace' needs an article: 'the workplace'. Alternatively, 'go to work' is the natural phrase: 'I don't need to take a train to go to work.' Use of 'my home' is not wrong but 'working at home' is more common.

× I want to workout entertainment company in the future because I want to help Japanese entertainment become more popular overseas, so now I'm studying English.

✓ I want to work for an entertainment company in the future because I want to help Japanese entertainment become more popular overseas, so I'm studying English now.

Multiple issues: 'workout' is a single word meaning exercise; correct verb is 'work for' or 'work at'. 'an entertainment company' needs the indefinite article. Word order: 'I'm studying English now' is a more natural placement. Also keep tenses consistent: present simple for future plans ('I want to') and present continuous for current action ('I'm studying').