Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Shorten and clarify your answer: begin with a clear topic sentence stating your current status, then give 1–2 brief supporting details (where you work and your qualification). Avoid unnecessary repetition and long compound clauses.

Exemplo: I am currently working as a teacher at the Philippine Science High School, Ilocos Region campus. I studied here in high school and recently graduated in 2024 with a Bachelor of Science in Chemistry.

Sugestão: Start with a direct topic sentence naming the workplace, then add one clear reason for choosing that role. Correct small grammar errors and use linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so') to connect ideas smoothly.

Exemplo: I work at the Philippine Science High School, Ilocos Region campus. I teach chemistry because I want to inspire students to pursue science and problem-solving careers.

Sugestão: Keep the answer concise: give one or two supporting points and link them logically. Use slightly more formal phrasing (e.g., 'government-funded' and 'stipend') and avoid vague phrases like 'really great' — replace with specific benefits.

Exemplo: Yes, it is a good place to work. It is government-funded, so students can study for free and receive a monthly stipend, and as a teacher I have the opportunity to mentor future scientists.

Sugestão: Begin with a direct statement ('Yes, I like it') then provide one specific reason connected to personal experience. Avoid repeating similar ideas; combine related points into one concise sentence.

Exemplo: Yes, I like working there because I attended the same school in high school, and it played a key role in shaping my academic goals and career path.

Sugestão: Use correct grammar for subject-verb agreement and keep the structure compact: state your plan first, then briefly explain the reason or how it relates to your career. This shows clarity and coherence.

Exemplo: At the moment my plans do not focus on work; instead, I plan to pursue a Master's degree in Chemistry to deepen my knowledge and improve my teaching and research opportunities.

× I am on my second year of working as a teacher in a Philippine Science High School Ilocos Region campus where I studied high school and I graduated last 2024 with a degree in Bachelor of Science in Chemistry.

✓ I am in my second year of working as a teacher at the Philippine Science High School Ilocos Region campus, where I studied in high school, and I graduated in 2024 with a Bachelor of Science degree in Chemistry.

Use 'in my second year' not 'on my second year'; use 'at' for institutions or locations; 'where I studied in high school' should be 'where I studied in high school' repositioned and commas used for clarity; 'last 2024' is incorrect — say 'in 2024'; 'a degree in Bachelor of Science in Chemistry' should be 'a Bachelor of Science degree in Chemistry' for correct noun order and article usage.

× I am currently working as a teacher at the Philippine Science High School Ilocos Region campus, where I studied high school in. I am teaching chemistry because I am trying to inspire students into leaning more towards science.

✓ I am currently working as a teacher at the Philippine Science High School Ilocos Region campus, where I studied high school. I teach chemistry because I am trying to inspire students to lean more towards science.

Remove the stranded preposition 'in' at the end of the clause and end the sentence after 'high school'. Use simple present 'I teach' for habitual job duties instead of 'I am teaching' here; use the correct verb pattern 'inspire someone to do something' not 'inspire students into leaning'; use 'lean' not 'leaning' after 'to'.

× The Philippine Science High School is a government funded agency where students get to learn for free and receive a stipend monthly.

✓ The Philippine Science High School is a government-funded institution where students get to learn for free and receive a monthly stipend.

Use a hyphen in the compound modifier 'government-funded'. 'Agency' is less appropriate than 'institution' for a school. 'Stipend monthly' should be 'monthly stipend' (adjective before noun) for natural word order.

× It is a really great place to work because as a teacher you're able to mold students into scientists that will serve the country in the future.

✓ It is a really great place to work because, as a teacher, you are able to mold students into scientists who will serve the country in the future.

Add commas around the parenthetical phrase 'as a teacher'. Avoid contraction in formal speech if desired, but 'you're' is acceptable; expanded to 'you are' for neutrality. Use 'who' for people rather than 'that'.

× I like the place where I work because I studied here back when I was in high school.

✓ I like the place where I work because I studied here when I was in high school.

'Back when' is informal and redundant with 'when'; removing 'back' yields a clearer sentence. Tense usage is correct (past for studied, present for like).

× This place holds a place in my heart because it helped mold me into the person that I am today.

✓ This place holds a special place in my heart because it helped mold me into the person I am today.

Avoid repetition 'This place holds a place' — add adjective 'special'. Use 'who' or omit relative pronoun: 'the person I am today' is more natural than 'the person that I am today' though 'that' is not strictly wrong.

× It helped me reach my goals and achieve my dreams.

✓ It helped me reach my goals and achieve my dreams.

Sentence is correct; past tense 'helped' is appropriate because it refers to past influence on current state. No change required.

× My future plans does not involve work as of the moment.

✓ My future plans do not involve work at the moment.

Subject 'plans' is plural so verb must be 'do' not 'does'; use negative 'do not involve'. Use 'at the moment' (more natural than 'as of the moment').

× Instead I am planning to further enhance my studies and pursue a Masters in Chemistry.

✓ Instead, I am planning to further my studies and pursue a Master’s in Chemistry.

Add comma after 'Instead'. Use 'further my studies' or 'enhance my studies' — 'further my studies' is more natural. 'Masters' should be 'Master's' (possessive) or 'a master's degree in Chemistry'. Use consistent capitalization and article.