Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise and grammatically accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms, and avoid irrelevant or incomplete details. Use one or two supporting details (e.g., study level and schedule) connected with a linking word.

Exemplo: I am a high school student at Yulan High School. I study from Monday to Saturday, and most of my classes focus on literature and science, so I spend a lot of time on reading and homework.

Sugestão: Answer directly and avoid repetition. Correct article and noun forms, and keep it brief: state the place and one supporting detail about it. Use a linking word if adding information.

Exemplo: I study at Elang High School, which is one of the most popular schools in my neighborhood. Because it has a strong reputation, many students choose to study there.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence and explain reasons in a coherent way. Avoid filler words and repetitions. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' and correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles). Limit to two to three sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, it is a good place to work because there are few distractions, so I can concentrate on my tasks. As a result, I can finish homework more quickly and study more effectively.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer and clear reasons. Use correct tense and adjective forms, and avoid hesitations. Add one specific example of why the place suits you, using linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like to work in my bedroom because it is warm and comfortable, so I can relax when I am tired. For example, I can study on my bed with soft lighting, which helps me focus better.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence about your plans (or lack of them). If uncertain, say you are exploring options and mention specific interests or short-term goals. Use coherent supporting details and correct word order and vocabulary.

Exemplo: I don't have a fixed career plan yet; I am still exploring my interests. For now, I want to work part-time in a café to earn money and gain experience in customer service while I decide on my future studies.

× While I currently a high school student at Yulan High School in my hometown, I study from Monday to Saturday.

✓ While I am currently a high school student at Yulan High School in my hometown, I study from Monday to Saturday.

Missing verb 'am' causes a sentence structure error; the clause beginning with 'While' needs a linking verb to be complete. Suggestion: include the correct form of 'to be' (am) after 'I' in present continuous/state descriptions.

× I have lesson about Mars literature and.

✓ I have lessons about modern literature.

Sentence is incomplete and contains incorrect noun form and likely a typo ('Mars' -> 'modern'). 'Lesson' should be plural 'lessons' if recurring; the trailing 'and' creates an incomplete sentence. Suggestion: use plural for repeated classes and finish the thought without trailing conjunctions.

× Actually, I am a high school student so I study at Elang High School which is one of the most popular school in my neighborhood neighborhood.

✓ Actually, I am a high school student, so I study at Elang High School, which is one of the most popular schools in my neighborhood.

Errors: missing commas for clauses, singular 'school' should be plural 'schools' to match 'one of the', and repeated word 'neighborhood' is redundant. Suggestion: add commas around the relative clause, change 'school' to 'schools', and remove duplicated word.

× Yes. This is because in here, uh, don't have many distractions, so you can concentrate, you can fully concentrate on the on your task and work.

✓ Yes. This is because here we don't have many distractions, so you can fully concentrate on your tasks and work.

Problems: 'in here' is unnatural; use 'here'. Subject 'we' is missing for 'don't'. 'the on your task' has extraneous articles and words; 'tasks' should be plural for general meaning. Suggestion: include subject, remove redundant words, and use plural for general statements.

× This start weekly where I am very like this place.

✓ I started coming here weekly because I really like this place.

Original is ungrammatical and unclear. Likely intended past action 'started' and causal explanation. Suggestion: use past tense 'started' if referring to when attendance began and 'because' to connect reason; use 'really like' instead of 'very like'.

× To be honest, I want to work in my bedroom because my bedroom is very warm and very suitable for me to relax when I tired or umm, feel sad when the heavy habitat.

✓ To be honest, I would like to work in my bedroom because it is very warm and suitable for me to relax when I am tired or feel sad after a stressful day.

Errors: tense and modal choice ('want' vs 'would like' for preference), missing 'am' in 'I am tired', awkward phrase 'heavy habitat' likely meant 'stressful day'. Suggestion: use 'would like' for polite preference, include auxiliary verbs, and replace unclear idiom with standard expression.

× Actually I don't have future work plan, I just work in favorite space and try to earn money and and provide the quality good, the food, the quality.

✓ Actually, I don't have a future work plan; I just work in my favorite place and try to earn money and provide good quality food.

Problems: missing articles ('a future work plan'), punctuation (run-on sentence), missing possessive 'my favorite place', duplicated 'and', incorrect word order 'the quality good', and repetitive fragments. Suggestion: add articles, fix word order to 'good quality food', remove duplicates, and separate clauses properly with punctuation.