Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Good clear topic sentence and relevant supporting details. To improve: reduce slight redundancy and vary vocabulary (e.g., use 'conduct mock interviews' or 'coach clients'), and keep answer within 3–4 sentences. Add one specific brief example or result to strengthen credibility.

Exemplo: I work as an interview trainer at my city's immigration office, where I conduct mock interviews and coach clients on body language and answers. For example, I recently helped a client refine their responses and they passed their interview after two sessions.

Sugestão: Clear, direct response with supporting details. Improve by removing repetition (e.g., 'help clients' and 'help build') and using linking words for flow. Replace general claims with a brief specific detail or statistic to make it more convincing.

Exemplo: I work at an immigration institute in my city where I run mock interviews and coach clients on communication and body language. As a result, about 70% of my clients report feeling much more confident after two sessions.

Sugestão: Good direct answer and supporting reason. Improve grammar (correct awkward phrase 'That such sense'), and combine sentences for conciseness. Add a brief specific example of what makes it rewarding.

Exemplo: Yes, it's a great place to work because I interact with many students daily and can build rapport while helping them improve. For example, seeing a shy client become confident after a few sessions makes the job very rewarding.

Sugestão: Content is good but multiple repetitions and small errors harm clarity (repeated phrases, 'connection of with', 'with with', 'motivating enjoyable'). Improve by removing repetitions, fixing prepositions, and using one clear example. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy working there. My colleagues are supportive, and I have a strong connection with students from daily interaction; for example, we regularly collaborate on workshops and give each other feedback, which makes the workplace enjoyable and motivating.

Sugestão: Clear goal and logical plan. Improve by tightening language (avoid filler 'To be honest') and adding a brief timeline or specific first step to make it more concrete. Use linking words to show sequence.

Exemplo: I haven't planned every detail yet, but I intend to start an immigration consultancy using my knowledge of information law and language skills. First I'll launch online consulting, and within two years I hope to open a small office to offer more personal services.

× That such sense of connection makes a job very rewarding.

✓ That sense of connection makes the job very rewarding.

The original has an extra word 'such' which makes the sentence ungrammatical and awkward. Removing 'such' and adding the definite article 'the' before 'job' clarifies the noun and produces a natural sentence. Suggestion: use 'that' + noun phrase correctly, or 'such a sense of connection makes a job very rewarding.'

× Yes, it's a great place to great place to work.

✓ Yes, it's a great place to work.

The phrase 'great place' is accidentally repeated. This is a duplication error rather than a tense or agreement issue. Removing the duplicate words yields a grammatical sentence. Suggestion: read aloud to catch repeated phrases.

× I feel a strong connection of with my students because I interact with with them every day.

✓ I feel a strong connection with my students because I interact with them every day.

The original contains two issues: incorrect preposition 'of' combined with 'with' and a duplicated 'with'. The correct preposition for relationships is 'connection with'. Removing 'of' and the duplicate 'with' fixes the sentence. Suggestion: use 'connection with' and avoid duplicating words.

× which makes the workplace motivating enjoyable.

✓ which makes the workplace motivating and enjoyable.

Two adjectives 'motivating' and 'enjoyable' are run together without a conjunction or punctuation. Insert 'and' to connect coordinate adjectives. Alternatively, use a comma if adjectives are equal in status. Suggestion: join adjectives with 'and' or use a comma when listing qualities.

× I want to use my knowledge of information law and language skills to offer consultancy services, starting online and later opening a small office so I can help clients more personally.

✓ I want to use my knowledge of information law and language skills to offer consultancy services, starting online and later opening a small office so that I can help clients more personally.

The sentence is mostly correct but adding 'that' after 'so' clarifies purpose and is more formal/natural in this context. This addresses a sentence structure/purpose clarification within present tense. Suggestion: use 'so that' to express purpose more clearly.