Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be slightly more concise and correct small grammar points. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid redundancy like “currently…in fact”.

Exemplo: I work as an accountant and I’ve been in the profession for almost ten years. I started in audit, which gave me solid experience in financial controls and client auditing.

Sugestão: Good direct answer. Improve by adding a specific detail to sound more natural and by hyphenating or rephrasing ‘Singapore based’. Keep it to one or two concise sentences.

Exemplo: I work from home for a Singapore-based accounting firm that provides bookkeeping and tax services to small businesses.

Sugestão: Correct grammar and structure, and make supporting details coherent. Use linking words and avoid sentence fragments. Replace vague or broken phrases with specific examples and keep sentences complete.

Exemplo: Yes, definitely. Working from home lets me spend more time with my family and plan personal activities more easily. For example, I can take my son to the park in the afternoons without disrupting my work schedule.

Sugestão: Make your position clearer and correct small grammar issues. Use a topic sentence stating preference or neutrality, then give a clear reason with linking words (e.g., however, because). Avoid filler words like ‘yeah’.

Exemplo: I don’t have a strong preference; both options work for me. However, I sometimes concentrate better in the office because there are fewer distractions, whereas working from home helps with family time.

Sugestão: Structure the answer with a clear topic sentence and one or two specific plans. Correct phrasing (remove ‘considering about’) and clarify priorities using linking words like ‘however’ or ‘so’.

Exemplo: I’m still deciding whether to stay with my current employer or start my own accounting firm. My priority is to balance work and family life, so if I start my own business I would aim for flexible hours while doing work I enjoy.

× I'm working currently as an accountant and in fact I have been in this industry for almost 10 years, starting off with audit.

✓ I'm currently working as an accountant, and in fact I have been in this industry for almost 10 years, starting off in audit.

Word order and preposition: 'currently' is commonly placed before 'working' for natural flow. Use the preposition 'in' with 'audit' (starting off in audit). Also add a comma before 'and' to join two independent clauses.

× I'm currently working from home for a Singapore based accounting firm.

✓ I'm currently working from home for a Singapore-based accounting firm.

Use a hyphen in compound adjectives before a noun: 'Singapore-based' describes the firm. Otherwise sentence tense and structure are correct.

× Working from home allows me to spend more time with my family as well as I will be able to planned a lot of personal stuff.

✓ Working from home allows me to spend more time with my family, and I am able to plan a lot of personal things.

Mixed tense and incorrect verb form: 'will be able to planned' mixes future auxiliary with past participle. Use present ability 'am able to' + base verb 'plan'. Also 'stuff' is informal; 'things' is clearer. Add comma before 'and' to join clauses.

× For instance bringing my son out.

✓ For instance, I can take my son out.

Sentence fragment: original lacks subject and auxiliary. Provide complete clause 'I can take my son out.' Add comma after 'For instance'.

× Go for joke.

✓ We can go to the park for fun.

Fragment and unclear phrase: 'Go for joke' is ungrammatical. Provide a clear, complete expression such as 'We can go to the park for fun' or 'We can go out for fun'. Ensure subject and verb are present.

× Yes, actually, it doesn't matter for me whether to work from home or to work from other places.

✓ Yes, actually, it doesn't matter to me whether I work from home or work in other places.

Preposition: use 'to me' not 'for me'. Also use consistent verb form after 'whether' — use 'whether I work... or work...' and 'in other places' is more natural than 'from other places'.

× In fact, sometimes I feel more relaxed or have more focus if I work from office.

✓ In fact, sometimes I feel more relaxed and more focused if I work from the office.

Collocation and adjective/adverb form: use 'more focused' (adjective) rather than 'have more focus'. Use 'the office' as the usual reference to one's workplace. Use 'and' rather than 'or' to combine related effects.

× Yeah, as I'm not that distracted by my son.

✓ Yes, because I'm not as distracted by my son.

Fragment: original begins with 'Yeah, as...' creating a fragment. Use 'Yes, because...' to form a full sentence. Use comparative 'not as distracted' for natural phrasing.

× I'm still considering about it, whether to continue working with the current boss or to open up a new accounting firm, as my ultimate goal is to spend more time with my family, but at the same time I would also like to do something that I like.

✓ I'm still considering it: whether to continue working with my current boss or to open a new accounting firm, since my ultimate goal is to spend more time with my family, but at the same time I would like to do something I enjoy.

Preposition and word choice: remove unnecessary 'about' after 'considering' — 'considering it' or 'considering whether...' is correct. Use 'my current boss' for possession. 'Open up' is informal; 'open' is sufficient. Replace 'as' with 'since' for clearer causal link. 'Do something that I like' is more natural as 'do something I enjoy'. Also simplify punctuation: a colon and commas make sentence clearer.