Work— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Cevap kısa ve doğrudan olmalı; gereksiz tekrarlar ve dilbilgisi hataları azaltılmalı. Konuyu tanımlayan net bir ana cümle verin, ardından kısa bir neden veya ayrıntı ekleyin. Örneğin 'I am a student at Pelicans University' diyip sonra 'I work part-time to support my studies' gibi net bir açıklama ekleyin. Ayrıca 'because money is not enough to pay' ifadesi yerine daha doğal ifadeler kullanın.

Exemplo: I am currently a student at Pelicans University. I also work part-time at a café to help pay for my tuition and living expenses.

Sugestão: Cümleler daha doğal ve dilbilgisi açısından doğru olmalı; tekrar eden kelimeler ve eksik fiiller düzeltilmeli. Önce iş yerinizi belirtin, sonra kısa nedenler verin (aile bağlantısı, ilgi). 'Give lots of money' yerine 'pays well' veya 'is flexible with hours' gibi ifadeler kullanın.

Exemplo: I work at a café called Arabica, which is owned by my uncle. He pays me well and I enjoy the job because I love coffee and learning about how it's made.

Sugestão: İfade daha doğal olmalı; 'cute' kişileri tanımlamak için uygun değildir. Kısa ve açık bir ana fikir verin (evet/ hayır), sonra iki destekleyici neden kullanın. 'Companionships' yerine 'colleagues' veya 'team' kullanın ve dilbilgisi hatalarını düzeltin.

Exemplo: Yes, it's a good place to work because my colleagues are friendly and helpful. The team atmosphere makes shifts enjoyable and I feel supported while learning new skills.

Sugestão: Soru yanlış anlaşılıyor; sınav sorusu 'Would you like the place where you work?' iş yeriniz hakkında memnuniyetinizi sorar. Cevapta önce evet/ hayır ile başlayın ve neden belirtin. Ayrıca 'when I free' yerine 'when I'm free' ve 'swim in Pool' yerine 'swim in the pool' kullanılmalı. Eğer kariyer tercihinden bahsedecekseniz onu ayrı bir cümlede netleştirin.

Exemplo: Yes, I like my workplace overall because it has flexible hours and friendly staff. However, I would also be interested in working at a hotel in the future because it would give me opportunities to swim in the pool during breaks and gain hospitality experience.

Sugestão: Cevap daha yapılandırılmış ve akıcı olmalı. Önce mesleki hedefinizi kısaca söyleyin, sonra neden yurtdışı düşündüğünüzü spesifik nedenlerle açıklayın (daha fazla fırsat, deneyim, araştırma imkanları). Dilbilgisi: 'work abroad' doğru kullanım, 'in abroad' yanlış. 'I want to have a good career' gibi doğal ifadeler tercih edin.

Exemplo: I studied economics, and in the future I hope to work abroad to gain international experience. I believe this will give me better career opportunities and exposure to different markets and practices.

× I am a student at Pelicans University but sometimes I work because I need to earn money because money is not enough to pay.

✓ I am a student at Pelicans University, but sometimes I work because I need to earn money since my allowance is not enough to cover my expenses.

The sentence is repetitive and has unclear structure. Use a comma before but to join clauses. Replace the second 'because' with 'since' and clarify 'money is not enough to pay' to 'my allowance is not enough to cover my expenses' for correctness and clarity.

× I work in Arabica because the owner of Arabica is my uncle and my uncle give. Lots of money and I also love coffees so I want to work in there.

✓ I work at Arabica because the owner is my uncle and he pays me well, and I also love coffee so I want to work there.

Use the preposition 'at' for workplaces and 'there' without 'in'. 'Coffees' should be 'coffee' (uncountable). 'Give lots of money' is incorrect; use 'pays me well'. Also combine clauses and use pronoun 'he' instead of repeating 'my uncle'.

× Yes, because the people are really cute and helpful person in Arabica and I also love my companionships, so I want to love work.

✓ Yes, because the people at Arabica are really friendly and helpful, and I also enjoy working with my colleagues, so I love my job.

'Cute' is inappropriate for people in a workplace; use 'friendly'. 'Helpful person' mismatches plural; use 'helpful' as adjective for people. 'Companionships' is wrong; use 'colleagues' or 'company of my colleagues'. 'I want to love work' is ungrammatical; use 'I love my job' or 'I enjoy working'.

× I would like to work in hotels because when I free I want to swim in Pool because swimming is very important for me. If I don't swim in hotel, I go to the swim after.

✓ I would like to work in hotels because when I am free I want to swim in the pool, since swimming is very important to me. If I can't swim at the hotel, I go to a public pool afterwards.

Use 'am free' for present state. 'Pool' needs the definite article 'the pool' or 'a pool'. 'Important for me' should be 'important to me'. 'If I don't swim in hotel' should be 'If I can't swim at the hotel' or 'If I can't swim at the hotel, I go to a public pool afterwards' for clarity and correct modal usage.

× My department is economics, so I want to go abroad because if I want to good career I have to work in abroad because economics is significant in there.

✓ My department is economics, so I want to go abroad because if I want a good career, I have to work abroad since economics opportunities are better there.

Remove unnecessary 'in' before 'abroad' ('go abroad' and 'work abroad' are correct). Use the article 'a' before 'good career'. 'Significant in there' is incorrect; 'opportunities are better there' is clearer. Also add commas for clause separation.