Shopping— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons or an example. Reduce hesitations and grammar errors (use correct verb forms and prepositions), and avoid redundancy.

예시: Yes, I enjoy shopping. I particularly like going with my family or friends because it’s a social activity as well as a practical one. For example, last weekend I went shopping with my sister and we spent the afternoon trying on clothes and having coffee together.

제안: Give a direct answer first, then explain briefly with a specific reason or example. Remove filler words and correct phrasing (e.g., 'we do window shopping' or 'we compare prices to find the best value'). Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' correctly.

예시: Yes, I often compare prices when I shop because I want to get the best value. For instance, I usually check two or three stores online or in person to see which one offers the same item at a lower price or with better quality.

제안: Answer directly and clearly, then give a specific condition or example. Correct grammar (use 'sometimes', 'decide in advance', 'what I want') and use linking words like 'however' to contrast ideas.

예시: Sometimes it can be difficult to choose, especially if I’m unsure what I want. However, I usually decide in advance what I need, and if I’m uncertain I visit a few shops to compare options before making a final decision.

제안: Give a clear opinion first (yes or no), then support it with a concise, specific reason and an example. Avoid unclear statements and hesitations; use correct grammar and vocabulary (e.g., 'not always', 'quality depends on brand or materials').

예시: No, expensive products are not always better than cheaper ones. Price can reflect brand or materials, but sometimes a cheaper item offers similar quality. For example, I once bought a mid-price jacket whose fabric and stitching were better than a much more expensive brand.

× I like the way shopping to go with my parents, siblings and sometime with my friends.

✓ I like going shopping with my parents, siblings and sometimes with my friends.

The verb phrase 'like' should be followed by a gerund when describing preferences (verb + -ing). 'The way shopping to go' is ungrammatical; use 'going shopping'. Also 'sometime' should be the adverb 'sometimes' to mean 'occasionally'. Suggestion: Use 'like' + gerund (e.g., 'I like going shopping') and 'sometimes' for frequency.

× Because shopping gave is not, is not only a thing that you're going to buy, but shopping is the, uh, is the purpose out to outing with someone.

✓ Shopping is not only about buying things; it is also an opportunity to go out with someone.

Original sentence is disfluent and ungrammatical. 'Because' is unnecessary at the start; 'gave is not' is meaningless. The intended idea is that shopping is not only buying but also a social outing. Restructure into a clear independent sentence using 'not only... but also' and correct nouns/phrases. Suggestion: Simplify and use the fixed correlative 'not only... but also' and clear nouns ('buying things', 'go out with someone').

× Yeah, uh, sometime, uh, we are, we, me and my friend or my family go, uh, shopping.

✓ Sometimes my friend, my family and I go shopping.

Problems: 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' (adverb of frequency). Pronoun order and case: use subject form 'I' instead of 'me' when combined as the subject ('my friend and I'). Remove extraneous 'we are, we'. Suggestion: Use correct subject pronoun order and form and place adverb at sentence start or before verb.

× We usually, uh, do our window shopping and compare the different prices because by comparing we analyze which and thing is good for us.

✓ We usually do window shopping and compare different prices because by comparing we analyze which things are good for us.

Remove unnecessary article 'the' before 'different prices' (plural with adjective usually takes no 'the'). 'Which and thing' is incorrect; use 'which things' or 'which item'. Also 'window shopping' does not need 'our' unless emphasizing possession. Suggestion: Use 'different prices' and 'which things' or 'which item' for clarity.

× Sometime it is going to be difficult because when I am not sure what I'm going to buy, then I go different shops to find out my niche over there.

✓ Sometimes it is difficult because when I am not sure what I will buy, I go to different shops to find what I want there.

Use 'sometimes' (adverb) and place it correctly. 'Is going to be difficult' is future-oriented; the general habit requires present simple 'is difficult'. Replace 'what I'm going to buy' with 'what I will buy' or better 'what I will buy' fits future intent; 'I go to different shops' needs preposition 'to'. 'Find out my niche' is unnatural; use 'find what I want'. Suggestion: Use present simple for general statements ('is difficult'), 'to' with 'shops', and natural phrases like 'find what I want'.

× But overall I finalize priorly that what is the thing that I'm wanted.

✓ But overall I decide beforehand what I want.

'Finalize priorly' is nonstandard. Use 'decide beforehand' or 'finalize in advance'. 'What is the thing that I'm wanted' mixes tenses and incorrect passive/relative structure; use active 'what I want'. Suggestion: Use natural collocations: 'decide beforehand' or 'finalize in advance' and keep verb tense consistent.

× So it's not always that we, uh, we consider it that expensive things are always better with the cheapest one.

✓ It's not always the case that we consider expensive things better than cheaper ones.

Use correct comparative structure: 'better than' not 'better with'. 'The cheapest one' conflicts with plural 'expensive things'; use 'cheaper ones'. Also remove repetition 'we, uh, we consider it that'. Suggestion: Use 'the case that' and comparative 'better than cheaper ones'.

× But I would say as expensive things are because due to the economy of particular country or sometime the cloth that use in it.

✓ But I would say expensive items can be more expensive because of a country's economy or sometimes because of the materials used in them.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'As expensive things are because due to' is redundant. Use clear reasons with correct noun phrases: 'a country's economy' and 'materials used in them' ('cloth that use in it' is incorrect). Suggestion: State causes simply: 'because of a country's economy' and 'because of the materials used'.

× So yes, it's expensive things.

✓ So yes, some expensive things can be better.

'It's expensive things' is ungrammatical: 'it's' (it is) cannot take a plural noun. Use 'some expensive things can be better' to express the idea that sometimes expensive items are better. Suggestion: Match subject and verb number and clarify the intended meaning (e.g., 'some expensive items are better').