Traffic— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating phrases (e.g., 'a lot of') and keep within 3–4 sentences. Use more precise vocabulary such as 'heavy traffic', 'busy roads', or 'high-speed vehicles.'

예시: Yes. There are many crosswalks near my home because the neighbourhood has several busy roads and heavy traffic. As a result, pedestrian crossings are frequent, which helps people move around safely. However, drivers often travel at high speeds, so pedestrians still need to be careful.

제안: Organize your response with a clear proposal and two specific reasons. Avoid unclear phrases like 'increase the crowd' or repeated words. Use linking words (e.g., 'because', 'so', 'therefore') and precise vocabulary such as 'reroute high-speed roads', 'residential zones', 'noise pollution', and 'safety'. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes. I would reroute high-speed roads away from residential areas to reduce noise pollution and improve safety for local residents. This change would make streets quieter and safer, especially for children and elderly people, and would help create a more pleasant living environment.

× There are many crosswalks around the place where I live because we are surrounded by many roads and a lot of traffic and a lot of cars.

✓ There are many crosswalks around the place where I live because we are surrounded by many roads and a lot of traffic and many cars.

The original repeats 'a lot of' and mixes plural reference; changing the second 'a lot of cars' to 'many cars' keeps consistent plural usage and more natural parallelism. Use 'many' with countable plural nouns for variety and clarity.

× So a lot of crosswalks are available around the area where I live, and it's very important to pay attention because the cars are pretty much very fast most of the time.

✓ So many crosswalks are available around the area where I live, and it's very important to pay attention because the cars are usually very fast.

Replace 'a lot of' with 'many' for plural consistency and use 'usually' instead of 'pretty much very' to avoid redundant adverbs; 'usually' correctly expresses frequency in present tense. Also 'many crosswalks' is more natural than 'a lot of crosswalks are available'.

× Yes, I would like to make the fast Rd. just far away from urban areas or areas that are full of blocks of full of population.

✓ Yes, I would like fast roads to be located farther away from urban areas or densely populated neighborhoods.

The original has awkward structure and repetition ('full of blocks of full of population'). Use passive infinitive 'to be located' to express desire about placement; use 'farther' for physical distance and 'densely populated neighborhoods' for clarity and correctness.

× I would like these to be more private to to decrease the noise that's coming from the cars, to increase the crowd, to make people living peacefully in these places because fast roads are.

✓ I would like these areas to be more isolated to decrease the noise from cars, reduce crowding, and allow people to live peacefully, because fast roads are disruptive.

The original repeats 'to' and uses incorrect conjunctions and phrase order ('to increase the crowd' contradicts intent). Use parallel verbs 'decrease', 'reduce', 'allow' for clarity; replace 'more private' with 'more isolated' and finish the clause with an adjective ('disruptive') to complete the thought. This corrects coordination and logical meaning.