Gifts— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer, correct grammar, avoid redundancy and use specific vocabulary. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one concise example with linking words. Fix pronouns and unclear words (e.g. “fragment” likely meant “accessories” or “jewelry”), and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes. I’m good at choosing gifts because I pay attention to people’s interests and needs. For example, a friend loves wearing accessories, so I bought her a floral necklace that matched her style, and she was very happy. I try to pick thoughtful presents rather than expensive ones.

제안: Respond directly, correct grammar and structure, and use linking words to connect ideas. Be specific about occasions and explain briefly why, using clear vocabulary (e.g. “express appreciation” not “express our appreciate”). Avoid filler words and unclear phrases.

예시: I usually give gifts on birthdays and at holidays like Christmas. I do this because gifts are a simple way to express appreciation and to show people that I care about them. Giving presents helps share my feelings directly.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, then list 2–3 specific factors with linking words and examples. Correct grammar (e.g. “appropriate price” → “a price I can afford”) and avoid repetition. Use precise vocabulary like “appearance”, “practicality”, or “personal taste”.

예시: I consider price and the recipient’s preferences when choosing a gift. Because I’m on a budget, I look for good value that I can afford. I also focus on the gift’s appearance and usefulness so it suits the person’s style and needs.

제안: Be concise and clear: state whether you give handmade gifts, then give a short, coherent example. Fix grammar (e.g. “I am very appreciative about them” → “I appreciate them”) and remove disfluent fragments. Use linking words like “for example” to structure the answer.

예시: Yes, I often give handmade cards to express my feelings. For example, I write a personal message and decorate the card so the recipient knows I appreciate them. I rarely make larger handmade items, so I usually buy gifts and add a handmade card.

제안: Answer directly with a clear opinion, then support it with a concise reason and an example. Improve grammar and word order (e.g. “I don’t think expensive gifts express feelings better”). Use linking words like “because” and “rather”.

예시: No, I don’t think expensive gifts show feelings better. Because a costly present might not match the recipient’s needs, a thoughtful gift that suits their tastes is more meaningful. For instance, a simple book for a reader is often more appreciated than an expensive but irrelevant item.

× I think I'm quite good at giving gifts because I'm very attentive to other person's needs and interests, so I always can choose thoughtful present that suits other people.

✓ I think I'm quite good at giving gifts because I'm very attentive to other people's needs and interests, so I can always choose thoughtful presents that suit them.

Use plural possessive 'other people's' for general reference; modal placement: 'can always' is natural; 'present' should be plural 'presents' or match noun; 'suit other people' is awkward—use 'suit them'. Suggestion: Use 'other people's needs' and 'can always choose thoughtful presents that suit them.'

× For example, one of my friend really likes putting fragment wearing fragment on them and so I once gave a fragment that with the flower tone.

✓ For example, one of my friends really likes wearing accessories with floral patterns, so I once gave a floral accessory.

Use plural 'friends' with 'one of'; 'fragment' is incorrect word choice—replace with 'accessory' or specific item; 'flower tone' should be 'floral' or 'floral pattern'. Suggestion: Say 'one of my friends' and use clear nouns like 'accessory' and adjective 'floral.'

× And give it to him as a gift and she really appreciated.

✓ I gave it to him as a gift and he really appreciated it.

Tense and pronoun mismatch: use past tense 'gave' and consistent gender pronoun 'him' with 'he.' Add object 'it' after 'appreciated.' Suggestion: Maintain consistent pronouns and complete verb objects.

× I usually give gifts to others when their birthday or in some special events such as Christmas and I think that these holidays which we need to gift gifts to others is that we can express our appreciate and also.

✓ I usually give gifts to others on their birthdays or at special events such as Christmas, because these occasions let us express our appreciation to others.

Use 'on their birthdays' and 'at special events'; 'there is/are' not needed but original structure was ungrammatical; 'express our appreciate' should be 'express our appreciation.' Suggestion: Use correct prepositions 'on' for days and 'at' for events and the noun 'appreciation.'

× Press R fielding to them in a directly way through the gifts so that these people can feel what we feel.

✓ We give gifts to them directly so that they can feel what we feel.

Original contains unintelligible fragment 'Press R fielding'; simplified to clear subject-verb structure; use 'directly' appropriately and consistent pronouns. Suggestion: Keep sentences concise and avoid unclear fragments.

× There are many reasons that I consider to choose to be as a gift and one of them is the price.

✓ There are many reasons I consider when choosing a gift, and one of them is the price.

Awkward clause 'consider to choose to be as a gift'—replace with 'consider when choosing a gift.' Suggestion: Use 'consider when choosing' to express decision criteria.

× Since I don't have that much budget so I need to choose a appropriate price that I can afford it and the other reason is that the other thing is that.

✓ Since I don't have a large budget, I need to choose an affordable price, and another reason is...

Remove redundant conjunction 'so' after 'since'; use 'a large budget' or 'much of a budget'; article 'a' before 'appropriate' should be 'an' but 'affordable' fits better; avoid redundant 'it.' Suggestion: Use 'Since I don't have a large budget, I need to choose something affordable.'

× How the gifts appearance is? I prefer to choose gift that has a good appearance so that the receiver will be in a good.

✓ What does the gift's appearance look like? I prefer to choose a gift that looks nice so that the receiver will feel pleased.

Question form incorrect—use 'What does ... look like?'; possessive 'gift's'; 'a good appearance' more naturally 'looks nice'; 'will be in a good' incomplete—use 'will feel pleased.' Suggestion: Use natural phrasing: 'I prefer to choose a gift that looks nice so the receiver will feel pleased.'

× Yeah, I often give others handmade gifts, and among those gift my I usually give others handmade cards so that others can read my letters inside and feel that I am very appreciative about them.

✓ Yeah, I often give others handmade gifts, and among those gifts I usually give handmade cards so that people can read my letters inside and feel that I appreciate them.

Plural agreement 'gifts'; remove stray 'my'; 'appreciative about them' should be 'I appreciate them.' Suggestion: Keep pronouns consistent and use 'I appreciate them.'

× As for the gift, I seldom made the gifts by myself, but to choose.

✓ As for other gifts, I seldom make them myself; I usually buy them.

Tense and form errors: use present 'make' for habitual action; 'but to choose' unclear—clarify as 'I usually buy them.' Suggestion: Use clear contrast: 'I seldom make gifts myself; I usually buy them.'

× To buy those, uh, well, they signed one.

✓ I usually buy those instead.

Original fragment 'they signed one' is unintelligible; simplify to clear statement 'I usually buy those.' Suggestion: Avoid filler words and unclear phrases.

× In my opinion, I don't think that uh, expensive gift can express our feeling more since that expensive gifts would not really match the recipient need, so that I think the gifts characteristic and the recipient.

✓ In my opinion, I don't think expensive gifts express our feelings better, since expensive gifts may not match the recipient's needs; gift characteristics and the recipient are more important.

Remove redundant 'I don't think' and 'uh'; use comparative 'better' not 'more'; 'recipient need' needs possessive 'recipient's needs'; sentence incomplete—finished with full clause. Suggestion: Say 'I don't think expensive gifts express our feelings better; matching the recipient matters more.'

× Rather, match is the more important one.

✓ Rather, matching is more important.

Awkward word order 'match is the more important one'—use gerund 'matching' and simple comparative 'more important.' Suggestion: Use 'matching is more important.'