Plants— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition (e.g., "fresh air" and "oxygen" said twice) and correct word choice ("plants" not "plans"). Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I keep several plants at home. I find them relaxing because they improve the air quality and create a pleasant atmosphere for my family.

제안: Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence and specific supporting details. Use correct plural forms and simple past tense consistently. Include a linking word to connect the family involvement and the market detail (e.g., "because" or "and").

예시: When I was young, I grew tomatoes and bitter melons in our backyard. My grandmother would sell them at the market, so my aunts and uncles taught me how to plant and care for the vegetables.

제안: Clarify and correct sentences, use precise vocabulary and linking words. Begin with a direct statement about your knowledge, then give two specific, correctly phrased tips. Avoid unclear phrases like "growing up land" and incorrect cause-effect (fertilizer repels insects is inaccurate).

예시: Yes, I know a few basic things about growing plants. First, use healthy, well-draining soil and water regularly; second, provide fertilizer occasionally and place sun-loving plants where they get direct sunlight.

제안: Give a clear opinion and support it with a brief reason and an example. Avoid repeating words and incorrect pluralization. Use linking words like "because" or "for example." If unsure, hedge with phrases like "some people" or "in some regions."

예시: Yes, some Chinese people give plants as gifts because many enjoy gardening. For example, friends often bring potted flowers or succulents when visiting someone's home.

× Yes, actually it fills me really relieved and relaxed whenever I see plans on my home.

✓ Yes, actually it really makes me feel relieved and relaxed whenever I see plants in my home.

The original sentence misuses 'fills me really relieved' and has adjective/adverb order problems. 'Relieved' and 'relaxed' are states that follow verbs like 'feel' or 'make me feel.' Use 'really' to modify 'makes' or 'feel.' Also 'plans' is a spelling error corrected to 'plants' and the preposition 'on' should be 'in' for being inside the home. Suggestion: use 'it really makes me feel relieved and relaxed' or 'I feel really relieved and relaxed.'

× It gives me fresh air and the oxygen that we breathe in a fresh air in a good environment for my home and for my family.

✓ It gives me fresh air and oxygen, creating a healthier environment for my home and family.

The sentence is wordy and repeats 'fresh air.' 'The oxygen that we breathe in a fresh air' is ungrammatical and redundant. Combine ideas: 'gives me fresh air and oxygen' and 'creating a healthier environment.' Use nouns without unnecessary articles and avoid repetition. Suggestion: simplify to a clear coordinated clause as corrected.

× When I was young, I remember growing a tomato plants and a bitter melon on our backyard and my lala or my grandmother would use to sell it in the market.

✓ When I was young, I remember growing a tomato plant and a bitter melon in our backyard, and my lala, or my grandmother, used to sell them at the market.

Mixes singular/plural and tense/forms: 'growing a tomato plants' should be singular 'a tomato plant' or plural without 'a.' 'On our backyard' uses wrong preposition; 'in our backyard' is correct. 'Would use to sell it' is incorrect; use 'used to sell them' to indicate a past habitual action and correct pronoun plurality for 'plant and melon.' Suggestion: use 'used to' for past habits and match singular/plural pronouns.

× So my aunties and my uncles taught me how to plant vegetables like tomatoes.

✓ So my aunts and uncles taught me how to plant vegetables like tomatoes.

Informal plural forms 'aunties' and 'uncles' are acceptable in speech but 'aunties' is nonstandard in this context. Use 'aunts' and 'uncles' for standard English. This is a quantifier/word-choice correction to match conventional usage. Suggestion: use 'aunts and uncles' in formal responses.

× Yeah, growing up land, it should have a healthy soil.

✓ Yes, for growing plants, the land should have healthy soil.

'Growing up land' is an incorrect phrase and sentence structure is awkward. 'It should have a healthy soil' is ungrammatical: 'soil' is uncountable so omit 'a.' Rephrase to clearly state condition for growing plants: 'the land should have healthy soil.' Suggestion: start with 'for growing plants' or 'to grow plants'.

× Water them regularly or sometimes we can put fertilizer so that insects could avoid them.

✓ Water them regularly, and sometimes we can add fertilizer to help the plants; this can also help deter insects.

'Put fertilizer' is less natural than 'add fertilizer.' 'So that insects could avoid them' is unclear and uses wrong modal nuance; use 'deter insects' or 'help keep insects away.' Also use conjunctions to connect clauses. Suggestion: use 'add fertilizer' and 'help keep insects away.'

× And you should just put it under the sun for, uh, plants that needs a direct sun.

✓ And you should put them in direct sunlight for plants that need direct sun.

Agreement and word choice errors: 'it' should refer to 'plants' so use 'them' or rephrase. 'Plants that needs' has subject-verb agreement error—'plants need' not 'needs.' 'Under the sun' is less natural than 'in direct sunlight.' Also 'direct sun' better as 'direct sunlight.' Suggestion: use plural pronouns and correct verb agreement.

× Yeah, I think Chinese people send plans as a gift because I can see some Chinese love to grow plants on their home and I think they just give it as a gift.

✓ Yes, I think Chinese people send plants as gifts because some Chinese people like to grow plants at home, so they give them as gifts.

Multiple issues: 'plans' should be 'plants.' 'Send plans as a gift' needs plural agreement 'plants as gifts.' 'Grow plants on their home' uses wrong preposition; 'at home' or 'in their homes' is correct. Pronoun agreement: 'they give them as gifts.' Suggestion: correct spelling, pluralize consistently, use 'at/in home' and match pronouns.