Plants— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and accurate, correct word choice, and add a clear topic sentence followed by one supporting detail. Avoid repetition and keep within 3–4 sentences. Use linking words like 'however' or 'so'.

예시: No, I don’t keep plants at home now. When I moved to another city I left the ones I had with my mother, so I don’t have time to water or look after them. However, I would like to keep a few low-maintenance plants in the future.

제안: Good structure and content. Improve by using more precise vocabulary and linking phrases to explain feelings and lesson. Keep sentences varied and avoid small grammatical slips.

예시: When I was young I planted an apple tree in our backyard, and it looked beautiful at first. However, I didn’t water or care for it properly, so it died after about a week. I was disappointed, but I learned that gardening requires consistent attention and patience.

제안: Clarify ideas and correct vocabulary mistakes (e.g. 'oil' → 'soil'). Use a clear topic sentence then list specific areas you want to learn, using linking words. Keep sentences shorter and more grammatical.

예시: I know some basic things about growing plants, such as the importance of soil, sunlight and a regular watering schedule. However, after my tree died I realized I need to learn more about soil types, sunlight requirements and how often different plants should be watered.

제안: Start with a direct topic sentence and then give specific reasons with correct collocations (e.g. 'popular gifts', 'make people feel calmer'). Fix grammar and article use ('many countries'). Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example'.

예시: I’m not Chinese, so I can’t be certain, but I think plants are popular gifts in many countries. For example, people give plants because they brighten a home, are long-lasting, and can make people feel calmer and healthier.

× When I lived in my hometown, I had several plans, but I left them with my mother when I moved to another city.

✓ When I lived in my hometown, I had several plants, but I left them with my mother when I moved to another city.

The student wrote 'plans' but context is about plants. This is a wrong word choice rather than strict grammar; however it caused a singular/plural confusion with meaning. Replace 'plans' with 'plants' to match intended plural noun meaning. Suggestion: proofread for homophones and context to ensure correct word choice.

× I don't give any here because I don't have time to water or look after them.

✓ I don't have any here because I don't have time to water or look after them.

The phrase 'I don't give any here' is ungrammatical. The student likely meant 'I don't have any here'. This fixes verb usage and makes the sentence coherent. Suggestion: use present simple 'have' to state possession, not 'give'.

× It looked beautiful at first, but I wasn't careful about watering and looking after it, so it died after about a week.

✓ It looked beautiful at first, but I wasn't careful about watering and looking after it, so it died after about a week.

This sentence is grammatically correct in past tense; no change needed. Explanation: past simple and past continuous/past participle forms are used appropriately to describe a past event and the consequence.

× I feel disappointed and learned that gardening needs regular care.

✓ I felt disappointed and learned that gardening needs regular care.

The first verb 'feel' should match the past context 'learned', so use past 'felt'. The clause 'gardening needs regular care' correctly uses present simple to state a general truth. Suggestion: keep tense consistency within the same time frame.

× I think basically like watering oil and protecting plants is important but after I planted a tree when I was young and it died I feel I didn't know how to grow plants properly.

✓ I think basically watering and protecting plants is important, but after I planted a tree when I was young and it died, I felt I didn't know how to grow plants properly.

Remove the incorrect word 'oil' which seems accidental. Use noun phrase 'watering and protecting plants' (gerunds) as the subject. Change 'feel' to past 'felt' to match the past context. Add commas for clarity. Suggestion: use gerunds to list activities and keep tense consistent.

× That is pre that's experiences made me realize I need to learn more about things like soil, sunlight and watering schedule.

✓ Those previous experiences made me realize I needed to learn more about things like soil, sunlight, and watering schedules.

The original is ungrammatical and confusing. Replace 'That is pre that's experiences' with 'Those previous experiences' and change 'need' to past 'needed' to match past realization. Use plural 'watering schedules' for generality and add Oxford comma for clarity. Suggestion: simplify and reorder the sentence to a clear subject + verb + object structure and maintain consistent tense.

× I think plants are popular gift in many country.

✓ I think plants are a popular gift in many countries.

Missing articles and incorrect singular/plural. Use the indefinite article 'a' with 'popular gift' and pluralize 'country' to 'countries' when referring generally. Suggestion: check noun phrases for appropriate articles and plural forms when speaking generally.

× People often give them because they are thoughtful, they brighten a home and they need you feel calmer and healthier.

✓ People often give them because they are thoughtful, they brighten a home, and they help you feel calmer and healthier.

The clause 'they need you feel calmer' is incorrect. Replace with 'they help you feel calmer' to show purpose. Also add commas for list clarity and keep pronoun 'they' referring to plants. Suggestion: use verbs like 'help' or 'make' followed by an object and adjective (help you feel calmer) to express effect.