Plants— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid fillers (uh). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail and a brief example. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct minor grammar (e.g., “a money plant that grows”).

예시: Yes. I keep several indoor plants because they brighten my home and improve the air quality. For example, I have a money plant that grows like a creeper around the doorframe, and it requires little care but adds a lot of green to the room.

제안: Reduce hesitation and repetition. Give a clear topic sentence then specific examples with brief descriptions. Use linking words (for example, such as) and correct grammar (e.g., “plants that gave flowers”). Keep to 2–4 sentences.

예시: When I was young I grew several flowering plants in our backyard. For example, we had jasmine and roses in red, yellow and white, which filled the garden with fragrance. I loved watching them bloom each season because they made the yard look bright and cheerful.

제안: Organise your answer: start with a concise general statement, then give two specific care tips with examples. Avoid incorrect or vague claims (e.g., fertilizers always make plants grow faster) and finish the sentence. Use linking words like 'however' or 'for example'.

예시: Yes. Generally, plants need regular water, sunlight and balanced fertilizer to grow well. However, different plants have different needs; for example, my money plant prefers indirect light and moderate watering rather than heavy fertilizer.

제안: Avoid uncertainty by qualifying your knowledge and then give a reasoned opinion or general observation. Remove fillers and repetition. Use linking words like 'however' and provide a brief cultural reason or example if possible.

예시: I’m not an expert on Chinese customs, but I believe many people in China do give plants as gifts. For instance, indoor plants are popular because they symbolize growth and good luck, so they can be appropriate presents for housewarmings or celebrations.

× Yes, I do have a lot of indoor plants in my home and I feel like it adds a lot of positivity and also gives a touch of nature in your living space.

✓ Yes, I do have a lot of indoor plants in my home and I feel like they add a lot of positivity and also give a touch of nature to my living space.

Subject-verb agreement and pronoun reference: 'plants' is plural, so the verb should be 'add' and the pronoun referring back to 'plants' should be 'they' and possessive context should match the speaker ('my living space'). Use 'to' with 'give a touch' for correct preposition. Suggestion: Replace 'it adds' with 'they add', 'gives' with 'give', 'your' with 'my'.

× For example, I have a money plant which uh, grows really well as a creeper around the doors of.

✓ For example, I have a money plant which grows really well as a creeper around the doors.

Sentence fragment/end punctuation: the original ends with an extra preposition 'of' creating an incomplete phrase. Remove the trailing 'of' to complete the sentence. Also remove filler 'uh' for clarity. Suggestion: Omit unnecessary fillers and ensure the sentence ends with a complete phrase ('around the doors').

× As a kid, I grew many plants in my backyard.

✓ As a kid, I grew many plants in my backyard.

This sentence is correct. Past action 'grew' matches the past time reference 'As a kid'. No correction needed. Suggestion: No change required.

× Uh, back in India, I remember we had lots of uh, uh, plants especially that had that gives flowers, for example, Jasmine, red roses, yellow roses, and also white roses.

✓ Back in India, I remember we had lots of plants, especially those that produce flowers, for example jasmine, red roses, yellow roses, and white roses.

Incorrect relative clause and article use: 'that had that gives flowers' is ungrammatical. Use 'those that produce flowers' or 'that give flowers'. Also avoid capitalization of common nouns like 'jasmine' and remove redundant fillers. Use commas to separate items. Suggestion: Replace the phrase with 'those that produce flowers' and list examples cleanly.

× And these, uh, these plants when bloomed, look really beautiful and, uh.

✓ And these plants, when they bloom, look really beautiful.

Incorrect verb form and redundancy: 'when bloomed' is incorrect; use present simple 'when they bloom' for general truth. Remove redundant 'these' and filler 'uh'. Also avoid trailing comma and filler. Suggestion: Use 'when they bloom' to express habitual/general condition.

× Yes, I know that plants need water to grow and also some fertilizers like urea and help them have a really faster growth and when you have and also different plan.

✓ Yes, I know that plants need water to grow and also some fertilizers like urea to help them grow faster, and different plants require different care.

Multiple issues: incorrect infinitive/verb forms and sentence fragmentation. 'and help them have a really faster growth' is ungrammatical — use 'to help them grow faster'. 'and when you have and also different plan' is a fragmented clause; clarify to 'different plants require different care'. Suggestion: Use infinitive 'to help' and comparative 'grow faster'; restructure the sentence into two clear clauses.

× I also know that different plants need different care.

✓ I also know that different plants need different care.

This sentence is correct and clear. No grammatical change required. Suggestion: No change required.

× For example the money plan which I have needs lots of.

✓ For example, the money plant that I have needs a lot of care.

Spelling and article errors: 'plan' should be 'plant'. The phrase 'needs lots of.' is incomplete; specify 'a lot of care' or similar. Include comma after 'For example' and use 'the money plant that I have' or 'my money plant'. Suggestion: Replace with 'the money plant that I have needs a lot of care.'

× I am not familiar with Chinese culture but I think they umm, yes they might like any other uh, people on the on in this world.

✓ I am not familiar with Chinese culture, but I think people there, like people elsewhere in the world, might also enjoy giving plants as gifts.

Pronoun reference and word order issues: 'they... any other people on the on in this world' is awkward and unclear. Use 'people there' to refer to Chinese people and 'people elsewhere in the world' for comparison. Remove fillers and correct word order. Suggestion: Rephrase to 'people there... like people elsewhere in the world' and state the action clearly ('enjoy giving plants as gifts').

× I think they love gifting plants.

✓ I think they love gifting plants.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable in present simple to express habitual action. No correction needed. Suggestion: No change required.