Friends— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly at the beginning, and divide the long sentence into shorter sentences. Use clearer linking words such as “whereas,” “because,” and “as a result.” Also, avoid repeating “before” and “unlike before.”

예시: Yes, there is a big difference. In the past, we worked at the same place, so it was easy to have dinner together after work. Now that we are in our thirties and have families, especially because I have a baby, we need to schedule our meet-ups in advance.

제안: The answer has a clear opinion and a relevant explanation, but it repeats “if you’re planning to catch up.” Replace the repeated wording with a pronoun or a shorter expression, and provide a more natural contrast between suitable and unsuitable places.

예시: It depends on the purpose of the meeting. For example, a quiet café is suitable for catching up because we can hear each other and talk comfortably. In contrast, a noisy bar may not be ideal because it is difficult to have a meaningful conversation there.

제안: The main preference is clear, but the final sentence is grammatically unclear, especially “more a serious use.” Explain the comparison more accurately: one-to-one meetings can be more serious or personal, while groups are often livelier. Avoid fillers such as “like.”

예시: I prefer spending time with a group of friends because it is both meaningful and fun. We can share different opinions and enjoy a lively conversation. One-to-one meetings are usually more serious and personal, whereas group gatherings tend to be more relaxed.

제안: Give a direct “No” and then explain the current situation in two or three shorter sentences. Use the natural phrase “at the moment” instead of “as of the moment,” and say “socialize with other people,” not “socialize to other people.”

예시: Not at the moment. Since I have a young baby, I am not very comfortable having guests over because my home can become quite hectic. However, I may invite my friends in the future when my child is older and can interact with them.

제안: The answer expresses a strong feeling, but “very important to me like a family” needs a verb, and “spent a lot of hardships” is not natural. Say “we have been through many difficult and happy times together.” Avoid comparing the time spent with friends and family in a way that may sound unclear.

예시: My friends are extremely important to me because they are like family. We have been through many difficult and happy times together, so I trust them deeply. I can turn to them for emotional support whenever I have a problem.

제안: The contrast between the past and present is effective, but use past tense consistently: “I could go out” rather than “I can go out.” The final sentence repeats “schedule”; replace it with “make arrangements” or “arrange a meeting.”

예시: Not very often these days. When I was single, I could meet my friends spontaneously, but now that I am married and have a child, I need to plan ahead. We usually make arrangements at least a week in advance because everyone has busy schedules.

제안: The answer is relevant and gives several locations, but improve the opening with “If we don’t meet at a mall.” Use a clearer sequence and avoid repeating “usually.” Also, “spend it with our own family” is less natural than “spend the weekends with our families.”

예시: We usually meet at cafés or restaurants, especially after work. Sometimes we also meet at a shopping mall. Weekends are more difficult because we normally spend them with our families, so dinner after work is the most convenient option.

제안: The main idea is understandable, but “outside the hungry” appears to be an incorrect or unclear phrase, and “life happens” is too vague here. Explain specifically what limits your activities, such as work, childcare, and family responsibilities. Use shorter sentences and more natural wording such as “we mostly catch up.”

예시: We mostly catch up over dinner or coffee. We would love to go on trips or outdoor adventures, but our jobs and family responsibilities leave us with very little free time. Therefore, we usually choose simple activities that fit into our busy schedules.

제안: The answer starts well and includes specific details, but it is incomplete and contains a repeated phrase: “live in Bullakan lives in Bulakan.” Complete the final idea and use correct subject-verb agreement, such as “one lives” and “the other is.” Explain how you maintain the friendships despite the distance.

예시: Yes, I have two close friends whom I have known since kindergarten, so we have been friends for about twenty-five years. We rarely meet now because we live in different places. One friend lives in Bulacan, while the other is a flight attendant, so her schedule is often unpredictable. However, we stay in touch through messaging and occasional video calls.

× There's a huge difference because we are already in our thirties and living our own lives unlike before we used to work at the same place so it's just easy for us to have dinner out but now we have to schedule because I already have my baby so it's not easy for me to go out anytime unlike before.

✓ There's a huge difference because we are already in our thirties and living our own lives, unlike before, when we used to work at the same place. It was easy for us to have dinner together then, but now we have to schedule our meetings because I already have a baby, so it is not easy for me to go out at any time.

The original sentence joins too many clauses without appropriate conjunctions or punctuation. Use when to introduce the time clause about the past, and use but to clearly contrast the past situation with the present one.

× There's a huge difference because we are already in our thirties and living our own lives unlike before we used to work at the same place so it's just easy for us to have dinner out but now we have to schedule because I already have my baby so it's not easy for me to go out anytime unlike before.

✓ There's a huge difference because we are already in our thirties and living our own lives, unlike before, when we used to work at the same place. It was easy for us to have dinner together then, but now we have to schedule our meetings because I already have a baby, so it is not easy for me to go out at any time.

The phrase unlike before refers to a past situation, so was is needed instead of is when describing what was easy in the past.

× I prefer spending time with a group of friends because I believe it can still be meaningful, yet fun. So we have a lot of things to talk about and like when you meet with a friend maybe it's more a serious use when you get a one on one meet up with a friend.

✓ I prefer spending time with a group of friends because I believe it can still be meaningful yet fun. We have a lot of things to talk about, whereas meeting one-on-one with a friend can be a more serious experience.

The original sentence contains an unclear and incomplete structure, especially in more a serious use and when you get a one on one meet up. Use a clear contrast with whereas and organize the comparison into two complete clauses.

× Honestly no, right now I have my baby and I'm not really comfortable sharing my space as of the moment but maybe eventually when my baby is a bit bigger and can communicate and socialize to other people and my friends can also enjoy spending time with my baby.

✓ Honestly, no. Right now, I have a baby, and I am not really comfortable sharing my space. However, eventually, when my baby is a bit bigger and can communicate and socialize with other people, my friends can also enjoy spending time with my baby.

The verb socialize is followed by the preposition with when referring to interaction with people. Socialize to other people is therefore incorrect; use socialize with other people.

× My friends are very important to me like a family. I treat them like my sisters because we spent a lot of hardships and happy moments together more than I spent with my family.

✓ My friends are very important to me, like family. I treat them like my sisters because we have gone through many hardships and shared many happy moments together. I have spent more time with them than I have with my family.

The original comparison is incomplete because more than I spent does not clearly identify what is being compared. The corrected sentence compares the amount of time spent with friends and family using the same grammatical structure.

× When I was single, I can go out with them spontaneously, but now that I'm married and I have a child, I can't just go out anytime they asked me to.

✓ When I was single, I could go out with them spontaneously, but now that I am married and have a child, I cannot just go out whenever they ask me to.

Could is the past form of can and is needed because the first clause describes a past period. The phrase they ask refers to a current or repeated situation, so ask should be in the present tense rather than the past tense asked.

× When I was single, I can go out with them spontaneously, but now that I'm married and I have a child, I can't just go out anytime they asked me to.

✓ When I was single, I could go out with them spontaneously, but now that I am married and have a child, I cannot just go out whenever they ask me to.

The situation is a current, repeated one, so the present-tense verb ask is required after whenever. Asked would incorrectly place this current situation in the past.

× If not inside the malls we usually hang out in cafes or restaurants, usually dinner out because we schedule right after work and sometimes we can't go out on the weekends because we spend it with our own family.

✓ If we are not in malls, we usually hang out in cafés or restaurants, usually having dinner, because we schedule our meetings right after work. Sometimes we cannot go out on weekends because we spend that time with our own families.

Malls is used in a general plural sense, so it does not need the definite article the. The sentence also needs a clearer structure so that usually having dinner functions correctly within the sentence.

× The most I can do with my friends is actually just catch up nothing more than that. We can't go out on adventures or maybe trips outside the hungry or even local travels because we don't have the luxury or time anymore because life happens.

✓ The most I can do with my friends is actually just catch up, nothing more than that. We cannot go on adventures or take trips outside the country, or even travel locally, because we do not have the luxury of time anymore.

The noun luxury is followed by the preposition of in the expression the luxury of time. The corrected phrase is therefore the luxury of time, not the luxury or time.

× The other one live in Bullakan lives in Bulakan and the other one is a flight attendant who frequently

✓ One lives in Bulakan, and the other one is a flight attendant who frequently travels.

One is a singular third-person subject, so the verb must be lives, not live. The original text also repeats lives in Bulakan and ends before the final clause is complete; the correction presents the available information as a complete sentence.