Friends— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 過去と現在の違いには触れていますが、「used to meet」に対して、過去は家の近く、現在は遠い場所という対比を明確に述べましょう。「in near my house」「my current friend is living in the place as far from my house」は不自然なので、「near my house」「one of my friends lives far away」と言います。また、「far」が繰り返されているため、具体的な場所や移動方法を加えると、より効果的です。

예시: Yes, there is a difference. I used to meet my friends at cafés near my house, but now one of my closest friends lives far away. As a result, I usually go downtown to meet him.

제안: 回答が途中で終わっており、質問への理由が十分に伝わっていません。「suitable」の理由として、静かさ、座る場所、会話のしやすさなどを topic sentence で示しましょう。「a dead of people」は不自然なので、「a large crowd」または「too many people」と表現します。理由と具体例を1つ加えると、内容が明確になります。

예시: Some places are suitable because they are quiet and have comfortable seats. For example, a small café is a good place to meet because we can talk without being disturbed by a large crowd.

제안: グループを好む理由は述べられていますが、同じ表現や言い直しが多く、文法的な誤りもあります。「I am not good at communicating」と動名詞を使い、「I feel less pressure in a group」のように自然に説明しましょう。「So I'm doing the group」は「That is why I prefer spending time in a group」と言い換えられます。

예시: I prefer spending time with a group of friends. I am not very good at having long conversations one-to-one, so I feel less pressure in a group. Also, different people can keep the conversation interesting.

제안: 過去と現在の違いは答えられていますが、現在の理由がないため、回答が短く終わっています。「When I was in elementary school, I used to...」の前後に適切な句読点を置き、現在招待しない理由を追加しましょう。例えば、家が狭い、外で会う方が便利という具体的な理由を述べられます。

예시: I used to invite my friends to my home when I was in elementary school. However, I do not do that very often now because my home is quite small. We usually meet at a café or a restaurant instead.

제안: 友達が大切だという意見は明確ですが、「the friends」は通常「friends」、「make/spell out of enjoyable things」は不自然です。「have enjoyable experiences」や「share enjoyable moments」と表現しましょう。友達がどのように支えてくれるか、または一緒に何をするかを具体的に加えると説得力が増します。

예시: Friends are very important to me because I can share enjoyable experiences with them. I can also talk to them when I have a problem, so they give me emotional support.

제안: 最終的には「頻繁には出かけない」と質問に答えられていますが、冒頭の「Yes, no」は避け、「No, not very often」と直接答えましょう。「go out with my friends」の繰り返しを減らし、頻度や理由を具体的に説明してください。例えば、学校や勉強で忙しいという理由を加えられます。

예시: No, not very often. I am usually busy with schoolwork, so I only go out with my friends once or twice a month. When we do meet, we usually have lunch or go shopping.

제안: 場所は答えられていますが、「I」と「each other」の組み合わせが不自然です。「I often meet my friends at school」と言いましょう。さらに、学校のどこで会うのか、そこで何をするのかを加えると、より具体的で自然な回答になります。「at school」には通常、冠詞「the」を付けません。

예시: I often meet my friends at school, especially in the cafeteria. We usually talk during our lunch break because it is convenient for everyone.

제안: 「press something」はこの文脈では意味が伝わりにくく、おそらく「play something」や「do something」と言いたかったと考えられます。友達とする活動を具体的に1つか2つ挙げ、頻度や理由を加えましょう。例えば、ゲームをする、食事をする、映画を見るなどが適切です。

예시: I usually play video games and watch movies with my friends. Sometimes we also go to a café and talk about school. These activities are relaxing and help us spend quality time together.

제안: 回答が途中で終わっており、質問への答えが明確ではありません。この質問には、長い付き合いの友達がいるかどうかを最初に「Yes」または「No」で答え、その友達をいつから知っているか説明しましょう。「have known」は継続を表すため、「I have known her since elementary school」のように使います。いない場合も、「I have moved several times, so I have not kept in touch with my old classmates」のように理由を述べられます。

예시: Yes, I have. I have known my best friend since elementary school, so we have been friends for more than ten years. We do not meet very often now, but we still keep in touch online.

× I guess I usually meet with my friends in near my house but my current friend is living in the place as far from my house. So I usually go to the city as it's far from my house.

✓ I guess I usually meet my friends near my house, but my current friend lives in a place far from my house. So, I usually go to the city because it is far from my house.

The preposition in cannot be used before near. Use meet my friends near my house. Also, because gives a clearer grammatical connection than as in this sentence.

× I guess I usually meet with my friends in near my house but my current friend is living in the place as far from my house. So I usually go to the city as it's far from my house.

✓ I guess I usually meet my friends near my house, but my current friend lives in a place far from my house. So, I usually go to the city because it is far from my house.

Use a place when introducing a nonspecific place for the first time. The definite article the is used for a specific place already known to the listener.

× In some places people can talk with other people without looking for as a dead of people as a hmm

✓ In some places, people can talk to each other without being surrounded by a crowd of people.

The original sentence is incomplete and contains an unclear phrase. A complete sentence needs a clear subject, verb, and logical complement. The revised sentence expresses the intended meaning in a complete structure.

× I want to I want to spend time with a group of friends because I am not good at communicate with other people so I became I don't want to talk with one friend, one friend. So I'm doing the group.

✓ I want to spend time with a group of friends because I am not good at communicating with other people. Therefore, I feel uncomfortable talking to just one friend, so I prefer being in a group.

After the expression be good at or be not good at, use a gerund with the -ing form. Therefore, communicate should be communicating. After feel uncomfortable, talking is also used as a gerund.

× I want to I want to spend time with a group of friends because I am not good at communicate with other people so I became I don't want to talk with one friend, one friend. So I'm doing the group.

✓ I want to spend time with a group of friends because I am not good at communicating with other people. Therefore, I feel uncomfortable talking to just one friend, so I prefer being in a group.

The original sentence uses several conjunctions and clauses without a clear structure. Use because to give a reason and therefore or so to show the result. Avoid connecting too many incomplete clauses with repeated so.

× I want to I want to spend time with a group of friends because I am not good at communicate with other people so I became I don't want to talk with one friend, one friend. So I'm doing the group.

✓ I want to spend time with a group of friends because I am not good at communicating with other people. Therefore, I feel uncomfortable talking to just one friend, so I prefer being in a group.

The response contains repeated words, incomplete clauses, and an unclear expression. Divide the ideas into complete sentences, and use one clear subject and verb in each clause.

× I think the friends are important because I can make I can spell out of enjoyable things with my friends.

✓ I think friends are important because I can make a lot of enjoyable memories with them.

When talking about friends in general, do not use the definite article the. Use friends without an article. The pronoun them avoids unnecessarily repeating my friends.

× I think the friends are important because I can make I can spell out of enjoyable things with my friends.

✓ I think friends are important because I can make a lot of enjoyable memories with them.

The phrase I can make I can spell out of enjoyable things is not organized as a grammatical clause. Use the complete expression make enjoyable memories to express the intended meaning clearly.

× I often meet each other at the school.

✓ I often meet my friends at school.

Each other is a reciprocal pronoun and normally requires two people or groups as the subjects of the action. Because I is the subject here, use the object my friends instead.

× I often meet each other at the school.

✓ I often meet my friends at school.

Use school without the when referring to the ordinary activity or location of attending school. The phrase at the school usually refers to a particular school building.

× No, I haven't if I if I graduated from the school at I have never met with the

✓ No, I don't. I have never had a friend whom I have known for a long time.

The question begins with Do you have, so the short negative answer should be No, I don't, not No, I haven't. The present perfect form have never had correctly describes an experience that has not occurred up to the present.

× No, I haven't if I if I graduated from the school at I have never met with the

✓ No, I don't. I have never had a friend whom I have known for a long time.

The original response ends unfinished and contains repeated and disconnected clauses. Use two complete sentences that directly answer the question and clearly express the intended meaning.