Friends— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct minor grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and correct word choice (e.g., “chat” not “chart”, “before” → “in the past”).

예시: No, there isn’t much difference. We still prefer meeting at restaurants or cafés because we enjoy trying new food; however, sometimes we choose quiet places when we want to chat more privately.

제안: Use a clear topic sentence and link reasons with connectors. Improve grammar and word choice (e.g., “clean” → “clean”, “decor” or “decoration” instead of “decorate”). Give concrete examples of atmosphere elements.

예시: I think quiet, clean places are most suitable for meeting because they allow conversation. In addition, a pleasant atmosphere—like soft music and tasteful décor—helps people feel relaxed and comfortable.

제안: Good structure showing contrast. Improve fluency by using linking phrase and correcting small grammar issues. Use simpler phrasing (e.g., “deep conversation” once) and add a brief example.

예시: It depends. If I want a deep conversation, I prefer one-on-one time; however, for fun activities like parties, I enjoy being with a group of friends.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence, fix grammar (e.g., “I cook” not “I cooking”), and use linking words. Give a specific example of what you do when friends visit to make the answer more concrete.

예시: Yes, I often invite friends to my home for dinner. For example, I usually cook a simple meal and we eat together while catching up, which helps us become closer.

제안: Start with a direct statement about importance, then give specific supporting reasons and fix grammar (e.g., “I treat them like siblings,” “I really appreciate that”). Avoid awkward phrasing.

예시: Friends are very important to me. I have kept in touch with childhood friends and treat them like siblings, and they often help me when I have problems, which I really appreciate.

제안: Clarify and complete the answer; remove repetitions and fix grammar. Provide a reasoned explanation with linking words and a clear ending. Avoid leaving sentences unfinished.

예시: Not very often — usually once a week. That works for me because I need private time to focus on my studies, and limiting outings helps me study more efficiently.

제안: Be concise and correct vocabulary (e.g., “coffee shop,” “chat”). Use linking words and give one specific example of a place you recently visited to be more vivid.

예시: We usually meet at restaurants or coffee shops because we’re foodies and enjoy trying new places. For example, last weekend we spent the afternoon at a new café with a cozy atmosphere.

제안: Use more appropriate vocabulary (“chat” or “catch up” instead of “gossip”) and correct tense consistency. Give specific activities and link them logically. Keep within five sentences.

예시: We usually catch up over food and share dishes at cafés or restaurants. Sometimes we go hiking or have picnics in the park, and those activities make us very happy.

제안: Provide a direct topic sentence and improve grammar and word order. Give a brief specific example or memory that shows why the friendship is valuable. Avoid vague phrasing like “I'm very valued about.”

예시: Yes, I have several long-term friends from elementary school. Although we argued sometimes when we were younger, we still keep in touch, and I value our relationship because we understand each other well.

× There is no difference between where I meet friends now and before because we all like to explore new restaurants so we always meet at a restaurant and a cafe.

✓ There is no difference between where I meet friends now and where I met them before because we all like to explore new restaurants, so we always meet at restaurants or cafes.

The sentence mixes present and past references. Use 'where I met them before' for past and plural nouns 'restaurants' and 'cafes' for general meaning. Also add a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'so' and use 'or' to show alternatives.

× Sometimes we want to chart in quiet places.

✓ Sometimes we want to chat in quiet places.

The verb is misspelled: 'chart' should be 'chat'. 'Chat' is a base verb used with 'want to' plus the infinitive, not -ing form after 'want to'.

× In my opinion, quiet and a clean place is suitable for meeting.

✓ In my opinion, a quiet and clean place is suitable for meeting.

Adjectives modifying a noun should be ordered and both should precede the noun: 'a quiet and clean place'. Also 'is' agrees with the singular noun 'place', which is correct.

× Sometimes the atmosphere is important too, such as good music and good taste decorate, this will make people feel comfortable.

✓ Sometimes the atmosphere is important too, such as good music and attractive decor; this makes people feel comfortable.

'Good taste decorate' is ungrammatical. Use 'attractive decor' or 'good decor'. Replace the comma splice with a semicolon or split into two sentences. Use present simple 'makes' for general truth.

× It depends on the situation for example if I want to have a deep chat or deep conversation I choose spending time with one friend, but if we just have fun, I prefer with a group of friends like a party and so.

✓ It depends on the situation. For example, if I want to have a deep conversation, I choose to spend time with one friend; but if we just want to have fun, I prefer being with a group of friends at a party or similar events.

Use sentence breaks for clarity. 'Choose spending' should be 'choose to spend'. 'Deep chat' is informal; 'deep conversation' is better. 'Prefer with a group' should be 'prefer being with a group'. 'And so' is vague; replace with 'or similar events'.

× Yes, I would like to invite friends to my home.

✓ Yes, I would like to invite friends to my home.

Sentence is grammatical; 'would like to' correctly expresses willingness. No change needed.

× Sometimes I invite my friends to my home to have dinner I cooking and we enjoy the meal and we talk a lot.

✓ Sometimes I invite my friends to my home to have dinner; I cook and we enjoy the meal and talk a lot.

'I cooking' is incorrect; use base verb 'I cook'. Also fix the run-on sentence with a semicolon and remove the redundant 'we' before 'talk a lot'.

× I've kept in touch with several friends since childhood.

✓ I've kept in touch with several friends since childhood.

Sentence is correct. 'I've kept in touch' correctly uses present perfect for an action continuing to the present.

× I treated them like my sister or brother so I think they are very important to me because sometimes they help me a lot when I have trouble.

✓ I treat them like sisters or brothers, so I think they are very important to me because they sometimes help me a lot when I have trouble.

Use present simple 'treat' to show habitual action. Use plural 'sisters or brothers' to match 'them'. Move 'sometimes' to a natural position and use 'they' consistently.

× I very appreciate it.

✓ I really appreciate it.

'Appreciate' is not modified by 'very'. Use 'really' or 'greatly' to modify verbs.

× Not often, I go out with my friends once a week.

✓ Not often. I go out with my friends once a week.

Split into two sentences for clarity. The tense is acceptable; 'Not often' as a short answer is fine when punctuated correctly.

× I think it's enough, because I need to have my private time to concentrate on my study.

✓ I think that's enough because I need private time to concentrate on my studies.

Use 'that's' or 'that is' for clarity, 'private time' without 'my' sounds more natural, and plural 'studies' is idiomatic.

× I think I think it's more efficient for me so I can study very folks might

✓ I think it's more efficient for me because I can study better on my own.

Original is repetitive and incomplete. Remove the duplicate 'I think', finish the thought with 'study better on my own' to convey the intended meaning.

× We often meet each other at a restaurant or coffee because we are foodies, we like to explore new restaurants or we like to find a comfortable place to have a chart spend good afternoon together.

✓ We often meet at a restaurant or a coffee shop because we are foodies; we like to explore new restaurants or find a comfortable place to chat and spend a pleasant afternoon together.

Use 'at a restaurant or a coffee shop' for correctness. Replace 'have a chart' with 'chat' and fix 'spend good afternoon' to 'spend a pleasant afternoon'. Also fix run-on sentence with semicolon.

× I usually gossip with my friends at the same time we share foods together.

✓ I usually gossip with my friends and we share food together.

'At the same time' is unnecessary. Use 'share food' (uncountable) instead of 'share foods'.

× Sometimes we go hiking or picking in the park.

✓ Sometimes we go hiking or pick fruit in the park.

Parallel structure: 'go hiking' pairs with 'pick fruit' (not 'picking'). If 'picking' refers to fruit picking, use 'pick fruit'.

× We had a lot of happy time together.

✓ We have had a lot of happy times together.

Use present perfect 'have had' if the friendship continues to present; use plural 'times' to sound natural.

× I felt very happy to have several good friends.

✓ I feel very happy to have several good friends.

Use present simple 'feel' to express current state.

× Yes, I have several friends I've known for a long time they are my elementary classmates

✓ Yes, I have several friends I've known for a long time; they are my elementary classmates.

Run-on sentence; separate with semicolon or period. Tense 'I've known' (present perfect) is appropriate.

× We fought before but we still keep in touch.

✓ We fought before, but we still keep in touch.

Add comma before 'but'. The tenses are acceptable: 'fought' (past) and 'keep in touch' (present simple) to show contrast between past event and current situation.

× I'm very valued about our relationship because we know each other

✓ I greatly value our relationship because we have known each other for a long time.

'I'm very valued about' is incorrect. Use active verb 'value' and clarify duration with 'have known each other for a long time'.