Friends— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity, grammar and conciseness. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms (e.g., “used to meet,” “prefer meeting online”) and avoid filler words.

예시: Yes. People used to meet in person more often, but now many prefer meeting online. For example, friends often chat via messaging apps or use video calls because it’s quicker and works across different countries.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and specific reasons with correct nouns and grammar. Use linking words such as “because” and “for example,” and avoid vague phrases. Be concise and finish the thought.

예시: Some places are suitable because they are quiet and comfortable. For example, cafes and library study rooms are good for conversation, while busy streets or loud clubs are not suitable because it’s hard to hear each other.

제안: Clarify meaning (likely meant “warm friends” or “close friends”) and give a concise opinion with reasons. Use correct adjectives and avoid repetition. One topic sentence plus one supporting reason is enough.

예시: I prefer spending time with one close friend because I enjoy deep conversations. For instance, with a close friend I can talk about personal issues calmly, while large groups can be noisy and distracting.

제안: Be more natural and precise: use correct phrases (e.g., “wear our pajamas,” “have a chat”) and limit to 2–3 sentences. Provide a brief specific detail about activities to illustrate why home is preferred.

예시: Yes, I often invite friends to my home because it’s comfortable and private. We usually wear pajamas, sit on the sofa and have relaxed conversations or watch movies together.

제안: Avoid confusing metaphors and be direct. State how important friends are and give one or two clear reasons with examples. Use simple, correct sentences.

예시: Friends are important to me because they support me when I need help and help me relax. For example, when I’m stressed about exams a friend listens and gives advice, but I also value time alone to focus on my work.

제안: Make the response concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear frequency statement and give a specific reason using linking words. Fix tense and plural forms.

예시: Not often. I usually go out with friends about once a month because many of them live in different countries, so it’s difficult to find a time when we’re all available.

제안: Use a clear topic sentence and a specific reason. Correct singular/plural and verb agreement. Keep it to two sentences and use linking words like “because” and “for example.”

예시: We usually meet at a cafe because it offers food and drinks and a relaxed atmosphere. For example, we can sit and catch up about our current lives while enjoying coffee.

제안: Make the sentence natural and concise. State the activity, give a reason and an example. Use correct verb forms and avoid awkward phrasing like “flashback our memories.”

예시: We usually take photos together because we don’t see each other often. Later we look back at these pictures and remember the good times from our meetings.

제안: Answer directly and give specific details about how you stay in touch. Correct grammar and avoid repetition. Mention activities you share or topics you discuss for concreteness.

예시: Yes, I have several friends from primary school whom I’ve known for many years. We stay in touch online by messaging and sometimes video calls, and we talk about our lives and share memories.

× In the past, people usually like meeting each other face by face compare with now or people might more prefer having the conversation online, like sending the message to each other.

✓ In the past, people usually liked meeting each other face to face compared with now, when people often prefer having conversations online, such as sending messages to each other.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly and uses wrong comparative forms. Use past tense 'liked' for past habits and present tense 'prefer' for current habits. Replace 'face by face' with the idiomatic 'face to face', 'compare with' with 'compared with', 'might more prefer' with 'often prefer', and 'sending the message' with 'sending messages'. Also use plural 'conversations' to match general meaning.

× Or they can have a face time to meet each other rather than like stay

✓ Or they can have a FaceTime call to meet each other rather than stay in person.

The original uses informal fragment 'have a face time' and an unfinished clause 'rather than like stay'. Use the verb phrase 'have a FaceTime call' (FaceTime is capitalized as a proper noun) and complete the contrast 'rather than stay in person'. Avoid filler 'like'.

× That's because some places that have a quiet and peace environment is really benefits for people who want to talk in or having a short conversation with each other like a cafe or tracking room in library, but some others too noisy to

✓ That's because some places that have a quiet and peaceful environment are really beneficial for people who want to have a short conversation with each other, like a cafe or a study room in a library, but others are too noisy.

Multiple issues: 'quiet and peace environment' should be 'quiet and peaceful environment' (adjective form), subject 'places' is plural so use 'are' not 'is', 'really benefits' should be 'really beneficial' or 'are really beneficial', 'talk in or having' should be 'have', 'tracking room' is likely 'study room', and add articles 'a' and 'a library'. End fragment 'but some others too noisy to' corrected to 'but others are too noisy'.

× I would prefer spending time with warm fans because I don't think I'm pretty I'm a high energy people high energetic people so I only will spend my time with my worm fans and we can have a deep talk with each other rather than a group of friends because sometimes a group of friends is too annoying for me.

✓ I would prefer spending time with close friends because I don't think I'm very outgoing; I'm a high-energy person, so I only spend my time with my warm friends and we can have deep conversations with each other rather than with a group of friends, because sometimes a group is too annoying for me.

Many word choice and adjective/adverb errors: 'warm fans' should be 'warm friends' or 'close friends'; 'pretty I'm a high energy people high energetic people' is garbled — use 'I'm a high-energy person'; 'only will spend' should be 'only spend'; 'worm fans' typo to 'warm friends'; 'have a deep talk' to 'have deep conversations'; avoid repeating 'a group of friends' twice and adjust articles. Ensure singular/plural agreement: 'person' vs 'people'.

× Yes I really like to do this thing because I think home is a place for us to relax and we can just our pajamas and sit on the sofa and have a tip talk with each other.

✓ Yes, I really like to do this because I think home is a place for us to relax; we can just wear our pajamas, sit on the sofa, and have a little chat with each other.

Missing verb 'wear' before 'our pajamas' and 'tip talk' is incorrect; use 'little chat'. Also punctuation and flow improved: 'do this thing' to 'do this'. Use gerund/infinitive forms correctly and include commas.

× So I would prefer home will be the best choice when we are hanging out.

✓ So I would prefer that home be the best choice when we hang out.

Original mixes 'would prefer' with future 'will be' awkwardly. Use 'would prefer that home be' or more naturally 'I prefer to hang out at home' or 'I would prefer to hang out at home'. Also change 'are hanging out' to simple 'hang out' to match preference context.

× I think friends treat me like a cup of tea they will be here they once I need it but not often not but we can't drink tea every day to keep our concentration on the mountains.

✓ I think friends are like a cup of tea: they are there when I need them, but not all the time; we can't rely on friends every day to maintain our concentration.

The simile is awkward and the clause order is confused. Use idiomatic structure 'friends are like a cup of tea' and correct pronouns 'they are there when I need them'. Remove unclear phrase 'concentration on the mountains' and replace with a general idea 'maintain our concentration'. Ensure punctuation and clause connection with colon and semicolons.

× Because friend they can help me to relax, but I don't need relax every time.

✓ Friends can help me relax, but I don't need to relax all the time.

Use plural 'Friends' not 'friend they'. Remove unnecessary 'to' after 'help' (help + infinitive is optional: 'help me relax' or 'help me to relax'). Use 'all the time' instead of 'every time'. Include 'to' in 'need to relax'.

× Not really. I go out with my friends once a month because like my friend is staying too far away from me because we are in the different countries that it's really to find the best time that we can meet each other.

✓ Not really. I go out with my friends once a month because my friends live too far away from me; we are in different countries, so it's really hard to find a good time to meet each other.

Use 'live' rather than 'is staying' for regular location, 'friends' plural, 'different countries' without 'the', and 'it's really hard to find a good time' fixes missing adjective 'hard'. Remove filler 'like'.

× We usually meet at Cafe because cafe is the places that can provide drinks and food and we can have time to hang out with each other and sit down to have a small talk about how their current life are

✓ We usually meet at a cafe because a cafe is a place that provides drinks and food, and we can hang out, sit down, and have a short talk about how their current lives are going.

Use articles 'a cafe' and 'a place'; change plural agreement: 'places' to 'place', 'provide' to 'provides' to match singular, 'small talk' to 'a short talk' or 'small talk' (uncountable), and 'how their current life are' to 'how their current lives are going' for subject-verb agreement and idiomatic phrasing.

× The most enjoyable thing that we are doing together is taking photos because as you can see we are seeing each other for a long time so the best thing we have to do is start taking a photo and then we can flashback our memories at the next time of meeting.

✓ The most enjoyable thing we do together is taking photos because, as you can see, we haven't seen each other for a long time, so the best thing to do is take photos and then we can look back on our memories the next time we meet.

Tense and aspect errors: use present simple 'we do together' for habitual actions. 'Are seeing each other for a long time' should be 'haven't seen each other for a long time'. 'Start taking a photo' to 'take photos'. 'Flashback our memories' is incorrect; use 'look back on our memories'. 'the next time of meeting' to 'the next time we meet'.

× Yes. I have a few of them. I meet them in my primary school and I still keep contact contacting with them online because we are far away from each other then we can we can send a message to ask some questions or talk about some girls' thing.

✓ Yes. I have a few of them. I met them in primary school and I still keep in contact with them online because we are far away from each other. Then we can send messages to ask questions or talk about girls' things.

Use past tense 'met' for meeting in the past. 'Keep contact contacting' is wrong; use 'keep in contact'. 'Send a message' should be plural 'send messages' for general action. 'Ask some questions' to 'ask questions'. 'Girls' thing' should be pluralized and made idiomatic as 'girls' things'. Removed duplicate 'we can'.