Friends— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect phrases like “your traveller.”

예시: When I was at school, I mainly met friends in class because we saw each other every day. However, now I often meet new people online because it’s more convenient and lets me connect with people from different places.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence and add a specific example. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'unbothered' -> 'undisturbed'; 'communication do' -> 'communication does'). Use a linking word to show cause.

예시: Some places are suitable because they are quiet and undisturbed, which helps conversations flow. For example, a small café or a private study room is better than a noisy shopping mall because you won’t be interrupted.

제안: Clear topic sentence is good. Improve by adding a reason with a linking word and a brief example. Use smoother phrasing: 'one-on-one' and 'I feel overwhelmed by large groups.'

예시: I prefer spending time one-on-one because I can have deeper conversations. For example, I can focus on one person’s feelings during a long walk, whereas in a large group I often feel overwhelmed and miss details.

제안: Begin with a direct answer, then give clear reasons with correct grammar and avoid repetition. Mention a specific boundary and a linking word like 'because' or 'since.'

예시: Not usually, because I prefer to keep my home private and my parents are uncomfortable having guests in our personal spaces. Therefore, we usually meet outside instead.

제안: Good idea but be more concise and use precise vocabulary. Start with a topic sentence, then give one specific example of how friends help you, using linking words.

예시: Friends are very important because they provide support when needed. For instance, even if we don’t talk every day, I know I can ask a close friend for advice during stressful exam periods.

제안: Make the sentence more natural: correct grammar, reduce redundancy, and add a specific detail about where or what you do. Use linking words like 'so' or 'to' properly.

예시: Yes, after school we often go for dinner together so we can catch up on each other’s lives. For example, we usually eat at a nearby noodle shop and talk about classes and plans.

제안: Answer is clear and concise. To improve, add a linking word and a brief reason or example to show specificity.

예시: We usually meet in the classroom or in the laboratory after class because those are convenient places to study together and discuss assignments.

제안: Good content but improve phrasing: remove incorrect prepositions ('discuss on') and be more specific about the activities. Use a linking word to connect ideas.

예시: We usually discuss coursework in the department building and also share stories about recent activities, such as a club event or a weekend trip.

제안: Clarify and simplify. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and give one specific example of how your sister supports you. Use linking words for coherence.

예시: Yes, my sister has been my best friend since childhood. We have played together for over twenty years, and she is the person I turn to when I need advice or emotional support.

× Yes, when I was in elementary schools and high schools my friends are all my classmates because we see each other every day almost every day that we can talk to your traveller frequently but nowadays I usually meet new friends online because it is convenient.

✓ Yes, when I was in elementary school and high school my friends were all my classmates because we saw each other almost every day and could talk to each other frequently, but nowadays I usually meet new friends online because it is convenient.

The sentence has multiple structure and tense problems (Grammar problem type 26 and 5/6). Use singular forms for school levels (elementary school, high school). Maintain past tense for past situations: 'were' and 'saw' instead of 'are' and 'see'. Replace incorrect phrase 'talk to your traveller' with 'talk to each other'. Use a comma and conjunction to join the two contrasting clauses correctly.

× A meeting really requires a place that is private and unbothered so that the content can stay confidential and the communication do not get interrupted.

✓ A meeting really requires a place that is private and free from interruptions so that the content can remain confidential and communication does not get interrupted.

Use correct adjective phrase 'free from interruptions' instead of 'unbothered' and 'remain' for continuity. 'Communication' is uncountable here so use singular verb 'does not get interrupted' (subject-verb agreement issue, type 27). Also remove the definite article 'the' before 'communication'.

× I'm that kind of person that prefers speaking one to one because it always makes me feel overwhelmed when there are too many people speaking together.

✓ I'm the kind of person who prefers speaking one-on-one because I always feel overwhelmed when there are too many people talking at once.

Use 'the kind of person who' (pronoun usage, type 12) and the idiomatic 'one-on-one'. Replace 'speaking together' with 'talking at once' for natural phrasing. 'It always makes me feel' is wordier; 'I always feel' is clearer and more direct.

× Not really because I feel like my home should be kept to myself and my parents also do not do not quite welcome others to get into our private areas.

✓ Not really, because I feel like my home should be private and my parents do not really welcome others into our private areas.

Avoid double negative 'do not do not' and use 'private' instead of 'kept to myself' (pronoun/reference simplification, type 12). Use 'into' rather than 'to get into' for conciseness and correct preposition use (type 11).

× I feel like friends are the ones that you do not necessarily contact frequently, but when you need help or they need help, you can always reach out for each other's help.

✓ I feel like friends are people you do not necessarily contact frequently, but when you need help or they need help, you can always reach out to each other.

Replace 'the ones that' with 'people' for natural phrasing and correct relative pronoun use (type 26/12). Use 'reach out to each other' rather than 'reach out for each other's help' to avoid awkward possessive structure.

× Yes, after school I often go for a dinner with my friends together so that we can chat about the lives recently and other things that we want to share to each other.

✓ Yes, after school I often go out to dinner with my friends so that we can chat about our recent lives and other things we want to share with each other.

Use 'go out to dinner' (idiomatic) and omit the indefinite article 'a' before dinner when used in this context (article error, type 22). Remove redundant 'together'. Use 'our recent lives' not 'the lives recently' (adjective order and noun phrase, type 18). Use correct preposition 'share with each other' (preposition error, type 11).

× Since my friends and I are still students, we often meet each other in the classroom or after class in the laboratory.

✓ Since my friends and I are still students, we often meet in the classroom or after class in the laboratory.

No major tense error, but 'meet each other' is redundant with 'we' (style and sentence economy). Removing 'each other' produces a more natural sentence. The rest is present tense and appropriate (verb present participle form not required).

× We often discuss on the coursework in the department building and also talk about some fun activities that we have participated in.

✓ We often discuss coursework in the department building and also talk about fun activities that we have participated in.

Remove incorrect preposition 'on' after 'discuss' (discuss takes a direct object, type 11). Omit 'the' before 'coursework' for general reference (article/type 22). 'Some' is optional; removing it makes the sentence cleaner.

× I think my sister is the one that has always been my sister mine my best friend since I was born. We have been playing with each other for over twenty years and still feel so close to each other that we can share everything between us.

✓ I think my sister has always been my best friend since I was born. We have been close for over twenty years and can share everything with each other.

Remove redundant and confusing phrases 'the one that has always been my sister mine my best friend' (sentence structure error, type 26). 'Playing with each other for over twenty years' is odd—use 'been close' to express enduring relationship. Use 'share everything with each other' for correct preposition and natural phrasing (type 11).