Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly using the present perfect (“I have”), and say what you bought. Use “an advertisement” or “ads” and explain briefly why it persuaded you. Check the unclear example: name the brand or product accurately, and use a linking phrase such as “For example.”

예시: Yes, I have. I once bought fried chicken after seeing an advertisement that showed it looking especially crispy and delicious. The ad made me curious, so I decided to try it.

제안: Your answer is relevant, but avoid repeating words such as “I” and connect your ideas more clearly. Use “ads pop up” rather than “it pops up,” and keep the verb tense consistent (“catch my eye” for a general habit). Add one specific example of where you see these ads.

예시: Yes, I see them quite often, especially when I’m browsing social media or watching videos. They usually pop up unexpectedly, so I either close them or scroll past. Occasionally, though, an interesting one catches my eye.

제안: Choose one clear example rather than starting with “There are many times.” Since you are talking about childhood, use past tense (“caught,” “wanted,” “asked”). Explain what made the advertisement memorable and phrase the request naturally, such as “I asked my parents to buy one for me.”

예시: Yes, I remember advertisements for Barbie dolls from when I was a child. The dolls looked colorful and came with different outfits, which made them seem exciting. I wanted one so much that I asked my parents to buy it for me.

제안: You answer the question, but make the wording more natural and remove the repeated “through.” Say “on public transport” or “along the roads,” depending on where the ads appear. Add a specific example and a short comment about how noticeable they are.

예시: Yes, I see quite a lot of advertising when I commute in my hometown. There are posters inside buses and digital screens at some stations, as well as billboards along the roads. They’re hard to miss during rush hour.

제안: Give a clear opinion first, then explain the main reason. Avoid repeating “are not” and clarify the comparison: ads can make products look better than they are. The final point about sales is unclear, so either explain it fully or leave it out.

예시: I’m not particularly fond of advertisements because they can make products look better than they are in real life. This can be disappointing when a product doesn’t match the picture. However, I understand that advertising helps businesses attract customers.

제안: Name the type of advertising directly and use the singular/plural forms correctly (“ads for food” and “dishes”). “Anticipate” and “get attached” are not natural choices here; try “look forward to” or “find appealing.” Give a specific example of the food ad that attracts you.

예시: I like advertisements for food, especially new snacks and restaurant meals. Since I enjoy trying different dishes, colorful images of food often make me curious. I might look up the restaurant or product if the ad seems appealing.

× Definitely I shop some items or food because of advertisement since they look appealing and they are good at promoting that specific product.

✓ I have definitely bought some items or food because of advertisements, since they look appealing and are good at promoting those products.

The question asks whether you have ever bought something, so the present perfect form have bought is appropriate for describing a life experience. Use advertisements or an advertisement rather than the uncountable singular advertisement without an article. Those products also agrees with the plural reference.

× For example cholly from their crispy chicken.

✓ For example, an advertisement for Cholly's crispy chicken caught my attention.

The original is a sentence fragment because it has no main verb. Add a verb, such as caught, to make it a complete sentence.

× Definitely I see many advertisements when I'm on my phone or computer just randomly it pops up and sometimes I I click the exit or I disregard it, but at the same time it really caught my eye.

✓ I definitely see many advertisements when I'm on my phone or computer. They just pop up randomly, and sometimes I click the exit button or disregard them, but they still catch my eye.

The adverb randomly is awkwardly placed between the subject and the rest of the clause. Place it after the verb phrase: pop up randomly. The revised sentence also separates the ideas more clearly.

× Definitely I see many advertisements when I'm on my phone or computer just randomly it pops up and sometimes I I click the exit or I disregard it, but at the same time it really caught my eye.

✓ I definitely see many advertisements when I'm on my phone or computer. They just pop up randomly, and sometimes I click the exit button or disregard them, but they still catch my eye.

The pronouns it and them refer to many advertisements, so use the plural pronoun they and the plural object them. The plural subject advertisements also requires the plural verb pop.

× Definitely I see many advertisements when I'm on my phone or computer just randomly it pops up and sometimes I I click the exit or I disregard it, but at the same time it really caught my eye.

✓ I definitely see many advertisements when I'm on my phone or computer. They just pop up randomly, and sometimes I click the exit button or disregard them, but they still catch my eye.

The answer describes what happens regularly, so use the present-tense verb catch rather than the past-tense caught.

× There are many times that when I was a child products that caught my attention are toys specifically barbie dolls, even though it's expensive I desire to have them to be asked to be bought from my parents.

✓ When I was a child, the products that caught my attention were toys, especially Barbie dolls. Even though they were expensive, I wanted my parents to buy them for me.

The opening phrase There are many times that when creates an incomplete and confusing structure. Start with When I was a child, then state the main clause. The phrase to be asked to be bought is also an awkward construction; use wanted my parents to buy them for me.

× There are many times that when I was a child products that caught my attention are toys specifically barbie dolls, even though it's expensive I desire to have them to be asked to be bought from my parents.

✓ When I was a child, the products that caught my attention were toys, especially Barbie dolls. Even though they were expensive, I wanted my parents to buy them for me.

The answer refers to childhood, a completed period in the past. Use were, were expensive, and wanted rather than the present-tense forms are, is, and desire.

× There are many times that when I was a child products that caught my attention are toys specifically barbie dolls, even though it's expensive I desire to have them to be asked to be bought from my parents.

✓ When I was a child, the products that caught my attention were toys, especially Barbie dolls. Even though they were expensive, I wanted my parents to buy them for me.

The pronoun it's refers to the plural Barbie dolls, so it does not agree in number. Use they instead.

× In my hometown, I usually commute and through different modes of transportation I observe many types of ads through through billboards or LED televisions and such.

✓ In my hometown, I usually commute using different modes of transportation, and I see many types of ads on billboards, LED screens, and similar displays.

Use on for advertisements displayed on billboards or screens. Through is not the appropriate preposition in this context. Using is also more natural than and through when describing modes of transportation.

× I cannot say that I like advertisements because sometimes the picture or the visual that they present are not are not the same as in ones in reality, but it's better for the sales that they have more

✓ I cannot say that I like advertisements because sometimes the picture or visual they present is not the same as the one in reality. However, having more advertisements can be better for sales.

The subject picture or visual is singular, so it takes the singular verb is, not are. The final clause has also been recast so that its subject and verb are clear.

× The type of advertising that I definitely anticipate are food and meal products because as a person who is fond of eating different types of dish, I get easily attached

✓ The type of advertising that I definitely anticipate is food and meal products because, as a person who is fond of eating different types of dishes, I get easily attached to them.

Use dishes after different types of because the phrase refers to more than one kind of dish. Adding to them completes the phrase get attached to and makes its reference clear.

× The type of advertising that I definitely anticipate are food and meal products because as a person who is fond of eating different types of dish, I get easily attached

✓ The type of advertising that I definitely anticipate is food and meal products because, as a person who is fond of eating different types of dishes, I get easily attached to them.

The main subject is the singular noun type, so the verb should be is, not are. The plural phrase food and meal products does not change the number of the subject.