Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答似乎想表达“经常在社交媒体和视频网站上看到广告”，但大量词语无法理解，影响了沟通效果。首先直接回答“Yes, I do.”，然后说明广告出现的平台，并举出具体例子。注意使用正确搭配，如“see advertisements on my phone”“watch videos”和“banner ads”。建议控制在3句话以内，避免重复。

예시: Yes, I often see advertisements when I use my phone or computer. They usually appear on social media and video-sharing websites, especially before or during a video. Most of them are banner ads or short commercials for clothing, food, and online services.

제안: 回答没有清楚说明广告是什么、为什么令人印象深刻，而且句子在“For example, I saw”处中断。应先明确回答“Yes, there was.”，再介绍广告内容、童年时的感受以及它带来的结果。可以使用“because”“so”等连接词，并给出一个完整的例子。

예시: Yes, I remember an advertisement for a cute toy that I saw when I was a child. The commercial showed children playing with it, so I really wanted one. I even asked my parents to buy it for me, although they thought it was unnecessary.

제안: 你没有直接、清楚地回答“是否看到很多广告”，并且最后一句没有完成。应先回答“Yes, quite a lot.”，再说明广告出现的位置，例如车厢内、车站或车身外，并解释乘客容易看到它们的原因。使用“because”连接原因，同时避免使用无法确定含义的词。

예시: Yes, I see quite a lot of advertisements on trains and buses. They are usually displayed above the seats, on the doors, or on the outside of the vehicles. Since passengers spend a lot of time travelling, public transport is an effective place for companies to advertise.

제안: 回答的核心观点不清楚，似乎想说不喜欢广告打断在线视频，但没有完整表达。应直接说明“I don't really like advertisements”，然后给出一个具体原因，例如广告太长、打断观看或内容与自己无关。建议使用“especially”和“because”组织句子，并确保句子完整。

예시: I don't really like advertisements, especially when they interrupt the videos I am watching. Some of them are too long or unrelated to my interests. However, I don't mind short and creative advertisements if they are not too intrusive.

제안: 你提到了“有趣的广告”和“容易记住”，这是合理的方向，但表达不清楚，且没有明确说明喜欢哪一类广告。应先给出主题句，例如“I like funny and creative advertisements.”，然后解释它们为什么吸引你，并举一个具体例子。注意使用“because”“as a result”等连接词，最多使用3到4句话。

예시: I like funny and creative advertisements, especially short videos on social media. They are entertaining and easy to remember, so I sometimes share them with my friends. I also like advertisements that explain a product clearly instead of simply repeating its name.

제안: 回答没有明确说明买了什么、广告如何影响你的决定以及购买后的结果。应先直接回答“Yes, I have.”，然后介绍具体商品和广告中的信息，最后说明你是否满意。可以使用“because”“but”或“so”连接原因和结果，并避免难以理解的词语。

예시: Yes, I have bought something because of an advertisement. A few years ago, I saw an online advertisement for a pair of wireless earbuds, and the long battery life attracted me. I bought them and was satisfied because I used them almost every day.

× Yes, I often see wonches on my phones and computer because I show social media and reheaders the light for example I usually cash out videos, advice and talk and banner on newspace, so I just war for them.

✓ Yes, I often see wonches on my phone and computer because I show social media and reheaders the light. For example, I usually cash out videos, advice, talk, and banners on newspace, so I just war for them.

“Phone”前面有“my”，这里是在泛指使用手机这一设备，通常用单数形式“my phone”。“Banners”表示多个广告横幅时需要使用复数形式。其他词语似乎是语音识别错误，无法仅根据语法规则准确修改。

× Where I remember as the formula bobby cats on if you should write cute court and for this thing in my hand so I don't like parents to buy this thing.

✓ What I remember is the formula bobby cats. It was cute, and I wanted my parents to buy this thing for me.

问题询问的是童年时的经历，因此描述当时的想法和愿望应使用过去时。例如，“want”应改为“wanted”。“It was”也用于描述过去的事物。

× I see a lot of other things on the train and buses most often there mobiles and online service and they are usually one of the most resemblances for our day because when people use public.

✓ I see a lot of other things on trains and buses. Most often, there are mobile services and online services, and they are usually some of the most noticeable advertisements in our daily lives.

“There”后面表示“有”时，需要使用“There be”结构。因为后面的名词是复数，所以应使用“there are”，不能使用“there is”。

× I see a lot of other things on the train and buses most often there mobiles and online service and they are usually one of the most resemblances for our day because when people use public.

✓ I see a lot of other things on trains and buses. Most often, there are mobile services and online services, and they are usually some of the most noticeable advertisements in our daily lives.

“Trains and buses”表示泛指不同的交通工具，两个名词都应使用复数。“Service”表示多个服务时应改为“services”。“A lot of”后面也通常接可数名词复数。

× Well, I don't like hair ties because things are open and know what I like doing for example I get when there are long dress for us online videos and usually I can.

✓ Well, I don't like hair ties because things are open. For example, I get annoyed when there are long dresses in online videos, and usually I can explain why.

“There are”后面应接复数名词。这里说的是多条裙子，所以应使用“There are long dresses”，而不能使用“There are long dress”。

× Well, I don't like hair ties because things are open and know what I like doing for example I get when there are long dress for us online videos and usually I can.

✓ Well, I don't like hair ties because things are open. For example, I get annoyed when there are long dresses in online videos, and usually I can explain why.

“Dress”是可数名词。由于前面使用了“There are”，后面的可数名词必须使用复数形式“dresses”。学习“There is/are”时，要特别注意后面名词的单复数。

× Well, and I cut you and funny advice they will on time and I usually remember them because they are in place so I need to even tell my friends talk about them.

✓ I like funny advertisements because they are memorable. I usually remember them, so I even tell my friends about them.

原句包含多个成分，但缺少清晰的主语、谓语和连接关系，导致句子结构不完整。“Tell my friends talk about them”结构错误，应改为“tell my friends about them”。表达一个完整观点时，建议使用“主语 + 谓语 + 宾语”的基本结构。

× Well, and I cut you and funny advice they will on time and I usually remember them because they are in place so I need to even tell my friends talk about them.

✓ I like funny advertisements because they are memorable. I usually remember them, so I even tell my friends about them.

副词“even”通常放在实义动词前面，因此应说“I even tell”，而不是“I need to even tell”。如果使用“need to”，更自然的表达是“I even need to tell my friends about them”，但这里根据语境直接使用“I even tell”更清楚。

× for this because it's advertised here shows not clear yet. The show doesn't have long better life so I that bone blocks where I used them almost every day.

✓ I bought it because it was advertised. The advertisement showed that it had a long life, so I bought these blocks and used them almost every day.

原句中的多个分句缺少清晰的主语和谓语，句子连接也不完整。描述购买广告商品的过去经历时，可以拆成几个简单句，并使用“because”和“so”表达原因和结果。注意使用“I bought”和“used”来描述已经发生的事情。

× for this because it's advertised here shows not clear yet. The show doesn't have long better life so I that bone blocks where I used them almost every day.

✓ I bought it because it was advertised. The advertisement showed that it had a long life, so I bought these blocks and used them almost every day.

“Have you ever bought...”询问过去是否有过购买经历，因此具体描述这次购买时应使用过去时：“is”改为“was”，“shows”改为“showed”，“has”改为“had”。“Used”已经是过去式，适合表示过去经常使用这些物品。