Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答的主要问题是句子不完整，“my Most”明显是口误或修改错误，影响自然度和清晰度。建议直接说明你经常在哪里看到广告，再补充广告的类型和感受。可以使用“Most of them...”连接细节，并避免“commercial promotions”这种略显重复的表达，改为“ads for clothes and apps”。

예시: Yes, I often see advertisements on my phone and computer. Most of them are ads for clothes, apps, and online services, and some of them are quite annoying. They often appear while I am browsing the internet or watching videos.

제안: 回答结构清楚，也回答了问题，但“an advertisement that impressed me”重复且不够自然，“commercial advertisement”属于重复表达。建议具体说明广告是什么饮料、画面有什么特点，以及为什么让你印象深刻。“the brighter colors”应改为“its bright colors”。

예시: Yes, I remember an advertisement for a fruit drink from my childhood. It used bright colors and showed a group of children having fun outdoors. I think it made an impression on me because it was cheerful and easy to remember.

제안: “trends”应为“trains”，这是影响理解的明显拼写或发音问题；“shorter video advertisements”表达不自然，建议使用“short video ads”。回答可以进一步说明广告出现的位置，例如车厢内、车站或飞机座椅屏幕上，并使用“usually”连接具体细节。

예시: Yes, I see quite a lot of advertising on trains and planes. On trains, there are usually posters above the seats or on the doors, while planes sometimes show short video ads on their screens. Most of them promote food, travel services, or electronic products.

제안: 回答直接、语法基本正确，也给出了原因。不过内容较简短，第二句可以具体说明广告如何打断你，例如观看视频或浏览网页时出现弹窗。可以加入“especially when...”使表达更自然、更有细节。

예시: I do not really like advertisements because they can be annoying. They sometimes interrupt me when I am watching a video or reading something online. I especially dislike pop-up ads because they are difficult to close.

제안: 回答简洁、直接，观点和理由都很清楚。为了获得更高分，可以加入一个具体例子或说明故事型广告为什么比普通促销广告更有效。使用“For example”补充细节会让答案更完整。

예시: I prefer advertisements that tell stories. They are entertaining and easier to remember than simple product promotions. For example, an ad showing how a family uses a product in everyday life can make me feel more connected to the brand.

제안: 回答有清晰的经历和具体信息，但“Yes I have”后应加逗号，最后的“It’s attractive”指代不清，也不符合过去经历的时态。建议改为“The discount was attractive”或“I found the discount appealing”，并说明广告在哪里看到以及购买结果。

예시: Yes, I have. I once bought some clothes after seeing an advertisement online. The ad offered a 20% discount, which was quite attractive, so I decided to buy them. Fortunately, the clothes were comfortable and looked just like they did in the advertisement.

× Yes, I often see advertisements on my computer or my Most of them are commercial promotions for clothes and apps, which sometimes are annoying.

✓ Yes, I often see advertisements on my computer or my phone. Most of them are commercial promotions for clothes and apps, which are sometimes annoying.

“on my computer or my”后面缺少与computer并列的名词，导致句子结构不完整。应补充“phone”，构成“on my computer or my phone”。另外，“which sometimes are annoying”语法上可以理解，但副词放在be动词后更自然，因此改为“which are sometimes annoying”。

× Yes I have. I once bought some clothes because of an advertisement. It had a 20% discount. It's attractive.

✓ Yes, I have. I once bought some clothes because of an advertisement. It had a 20% discount. It was attractive.

前文描述的是过去发生的购买经历，因此最后一句也应使用过去时。“It's attractive”是一般现在时，与过去的叙述不一致，应改为“It was attractive”。同时，“Yes, I have”后需要加逗号。