Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答有明确观点，也提到了广告出现的平台和个性化推荐，内容方向基本切题。但存在明显的词汇、语法和发音转写问题，例如“appear really well”应改为“appear frequently”，“at all present based on my listen search”表达不清，可改为“are presented based on my recent searches or shopping habits”；“interested”应改为“interesting”。最后一句没有完成，影响自然度和有效性。建议使用“观点+具体场景+感受”的三句结构，并完整结束答案。

예시: Yes, I see advertisements very often when I use my phone or computer. They usually appear on social media, websites, and even inside mobile apps. Many of them are tailored to my recent searches or shopping habits, which can be useful sometimes, although I find some of them rather annoying.

제안: 答案没有真正回答是哪一个广告，也存在严重的语法和重复问题。“Of course that there are there is”不自然。应直接说明广告类型或品牌，然后补充广告内容、为什么印象深刻以及当时的感受。至少提供两到三句具体信息，例如广告中的人物、歌曲或产品。

예시: Yes, I remember a television advertisement for a chocolate bar when I was a child. It showed a group of children sharing the chocolate while a catchy song played in the background. I still remember it because the music was fun and the advertisement made the product look delicious.

제안: 回答提到了机场、地铁和公交车，也列举了广告内容，具备基本拓展意识。但句子过长，缺少标点和连接词，导致逻辑不清；“trust service”“too miss”“make me ingrawing complaints”表达错误。可以改为“travel services”“hard to miss”和“sometimes annoy me”。建议拆分句子，并使用“because”解释广告醒目的原因，再说明个人感受。

예시: Yes, I see a lot of advertisements on public transport, especially on buses and subway trains. They usually promote travel services, mobile phones, or local events. Since they are large and eye-catching, they are hard to miss, although they can sometimes be annoying.

제안: 答案有清晰的总体观点，并通过“creative or informative”以及产品介绍视频进行解释，内容较切题。但句子之间缺少标点和连接，最后的“However, I dislike”没有完成，严重影响完整性。建议明确说明不喜欢什么广告，例如夸大宣传、重复播放或误导消费者，并控制在三至四句内。

예시: I like some advertisements, but not all of them. I enjoy ads that are creative or informative because they can be both entertaining and useful. For example, I like short videos that clearly explain how a product works. However, I dislike advertisements that are repetitive or exaggerate the benefits of a product.

제안: 答案直接表达了偏好，但内容太短，且“how to use tooling or art”含义不清，词汇使用不准确。应明确广告类型，例如教学广告、公益广告或介绍实用产品的广告，并补充喜欢它们的原因和一个具体例子。这样可以形成“类型+原因+例子”的基本结构。

예시: I like practical and informative advertisements, especially those that show people how to use a product. For example, a short advertisement explaining how to use a kitchen tool can be very helpful. I prefer this kind of advertising because it gives me useful information instead of simply trying to persuade me to buy something.

제안: 答案尝试讲述个人经历，并说明了购买原因和购买后的感受，这是较好的回答思路。但品牌和产品表达不清，“hair snacks”可能应为“healthy snacks”，“natural ingredient and low sugar content”需要使用复数或正确搭配；“that look”应为“which looked”，“the crack”应根据意思改为“the taste and texture”。句子过长，建议拆分并使用“because”和“As a result”等连接词。

예시: Yes, I once bought a packet of healthy snacks after seeing an advertisement for them. The advertisement emphasized their natural ingredients and low sugar content, which made them look appealing. I decided to try them, and I was pleased with their taste and crunchy texture, so I bought them again later.

× Yes, I encounter advertisements very often everywhere I use my phone or computer.

✓ Yes, I encounter advertisements very often whenever I use my phone or computer.

“Whenever”表示“每当……的时候”，适合引导时间状语从句；“everywhere”表示“到处”，不能准确表达这里的时间关系。

× They appear really well on social media platforms, websites and even within apps.

✓ They appear very prominently on social media platforms, websites, and even within apps.

“Well”通常表示做某事的方式很好，而这里想表达广告“很显眼地出现”。使用副词“prominently”更准确。

× I've noticed that many of these at all present based on my listen search or shopping habits, although they can be quite interested at times.

✓ I've noticed that many of these are presented based on my recent searches or shopping habits, although they can be quite interesting at times.

“广告被展示”需要使用被动语态“are presented”。另外，描述广告本身“有趣”要用“interesting”，而不是表示人的感受的“interested”。

× I've noticed that many of these at all present based on my listen search or shopping habits, although they can be quite interested at times.

✓ I've noticed that many of these are presented based on my recent searches or shopping habits, although they can be quite interesting at times.

“Interesting”表示“令人感兴趣的事物”；“interested”表示“感到兴趣的人的感受”。广告应该用“interesting”。

× Of course that there are there is an advertisement.

✓ Of course, there is an advertisement.

“Advertisement”是单数可数名词，所以要使用“There is”，不能使用“There are”。同时，句中不需要重复使用“there are”和“there is”。

× Yes, I often see a lot of advertisements in airports on subways and on buses they usually promote trust service, mobile phones or local events and they are too miss because they are large and very eye catching which sometimes make me ingrawing complaints.

✓ Yes, I often see a lot of advertisements at airports, on subways, and on buses. They usually promote train services, mobile phones, or local events.

谈论机场这一地点时，通常使用“at airports”；谈论地铁和公交车上的广告时，使用“on subways”和“on buses”。原句还缺少标点，导致多个句子连接在一起。

× Yes, I often see a lot of advertisements in airports on subways and on buses they usually promote trust service, mobile phones or local events and they are too miss because they are large and very eye catching which sometimes make me ingrawing complaints.

✓ Yes, I often see a lot of advertisements at airports, on subways, and on buses. They usually promote train services, mobile phones, or local events. They are hard to miss because they are large and very eye-catching, although they sometimes make me ignore the advertisements.

原句包含多个独立分句，却没有正确使用句号或连接词，形成了句子连接错误。应将过长的句子拆分，或使用合适的连词连接。

× They are too miss because they are large and very eye catching which sometimes make me ingrawing complaints.

✓ They are hard to miss because they are large and very eye-catching, which sometimes makes me ignore the advertisements.

这里的“which”指代前面整个事实或情况，因此谓语动词使用单数形式“makes”，而不是“make”。“make”后面还应接动词原形，如“makes me ignore”。

× I like some advertisements but not all I enjoy ads that are creative or informative because they can be entertaining and useful for example a short video that explains how a product works.

✓ I like some advertisements, but not all of them. I enjoy ads that are creative or informative because they can be entertaining and useful. For example, I like short videos that explain how a product works.

原句把多个完整句子直接连接在一起，缺少必要的句号和连接结构。应拆分句子，并在“not all”后补充代词“of them”使结构完整。

× However, I dislike

✓ However, I dislike some advertisements.

“However, I dislike”虽然有主语和谓语，但意思没有完成，听起来像未说完的句子。应在“dislike”后补充宾语，使句子完整。

× I like some useful advertisements such as how to use tooling or art.

✓ I like some useful advertisements, such as advertisements that show how to use tools or art supplies.

“Such as”后面应接名词、名词短语或完整的名词性结构。原句中的“how to use tooling or art”结构不完整，因此改为“advertisements that show how to use tools or art supplies”。

× I once spotted some hair snacks after seeing a cheeseway advertisement that highlighted their natural ingredient and now sugar content content that look very attractive and convinced me to try them and I was pleased with the taste and the crack.

✓ I once spotted some hair snacks after seeing a Cheeseway advertisement that highlighted their natural ingredients and low-sugar content. They looked very attractive and convinced me to try them, and I was pleased with the taste and the crack.

“Ingredients”表示多个成分，应使用复数形式，因为前面提到的是“natural”。另外，原句重复使用了“content”，需要删除重复部分。

× I once spotted some hair snacks after seeing a cheeseway advertisement that highlighted their natural ingredient and now sugar content content that look very attractive and convinced me to try them and I was pleased with the taste and the crack.

✓ I once spotted some hair snacks after seeing a Cheeseway advertisement that highlighted their natural ingredients and low-sugar content. They looked very attractive and convinced me to try them, and I was pleased with the taste and the crack.

这件事发生在过去，前文使用了“spotted”“highlighted”和“convinced”等过去时，因此描述这些零食时也应使用过去式“looked”，不能使用现在时“look”。

× I once spotted some hair snacks after seeing a cheeseway advertisement that highlighted their natural ingredient and now sugar content content that look very attractive and convinced me to try them and I was pleased with the taste and the crack.

✓ I once spotted some hair snacks after seeing a Cheeseway advertisement that highlighted their natural ingredients and low-sugar content. They looked very attractive and convinced me to try them, and I was pleased with the taste and the crack.

将原句拆分后，主语“They”是复数，因此使用“looked”与其保持一致。原句中“content that look”的结构也不清楚，拆分句子可以避免主谓关系混乱。