Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is direct, well organized, and supported with a specific example. To sound more natural and accurate, use the compound adjectives “full-screen,” “pop-up,” and “eye-catching.” You could also avoid repeating “pop up” by replacing the second use with “appear unexpectedly.”

예시: Yes, I see more advertisements on my phone and computer than I’d like. Full-screen and pop-up ads are the most annoying because they’re very eye-catching and appear unexpectedly, interrupting whatever I’m trying to do.

제안: This is a clear and effective answer with a relevant childhood example and a logical result. “Made an impression on me” would sound slightly more natural than “impressed me” because it matches the wording of the question. You could also say “on television” instead of “on TV” for a slightly more polished style, although “on TV” is acceptable in Speaking.

예시: Yes, one advertisement that made a strong impression on me as a child was for a supplement called Six Walnuts. It was everywhere on television and had a very catchy jingle, so I remembered both the tune and the product name quite easily.

제안: Your response answers the question directly and includes a specific explanation. The main grammatical error is the missing possessive apostrophe in “commuters’ attention.” Also, “this captures” is slightly unclear because “this” refers to the whole advertising practice; “these ads capture” would be more precise. Add a brief result or personal reaction to make the answer more developed.

예시: Yes, I see a lot of advertising on trains and buses. For example, companies often put large posters or digital screens inside carriages because these ads capture commuters’ attention and can boost sales. I usually notice them during my daily journey, even if I don’t remember the brands afterward.

제안: You express a clear opinion and give a relevant reason, but the second sentence contains unnecessary repetition in “only see products I looked at only once.” Replace it with “keep seeing products I looked at once.” The phrase “my privacy is being compromised” is accurate, but “I feel that my privacy is being invaded” sounds more natural in this context. You could also connect the example more smoothly with “For example.”

예시: No, I usually dislike advertisements because they’re often based on my recent purchases or browsing history, even across different apps. This makes me feel that my privacy is being invaded. For example, I keep seeing products I looked at once, and that constant tracking really annoys me.

제안: This is a strong, natural answer with a clear preference, well-chosen vocabulary, and effective explanation. The linking word “because” clearly shows the reason, and “so” introduces the result. To make the comparison fully grammatical, change “more than with flashy or pushy commercials” to “more easily than I remember flashy or pushy commercials.”

예시: I prefer subtle, carefully designed advertisements that aren’t too obtrusive. In particular, I like ads that tell funny, short stories because they’re engaging and memorable. They make me laugh, so I remember the brand more easily than I remember flashy or pushy commercials.

제안: Your answer is well structured: it gives a direct response, explains the advertisement, and describes how it influenced your decision. However, “So I trusted” is slightly abrupt after the previous sentence; use “As a result” or combine the ideas more smoothly. You can also avoid repeating “I” and “the clubs” by saying “That endorsement convinced me to buy them.”

예시: Yes, I once bought a set of golf clubs after seeing an advertisement claiming that one of my favorite professional golfers used them. I checked the claim and found that it was true. As a result, I trusted his endorsement, and it convinced me to buy them.

× No, I usually avoid advertisements because they're targeted at my recent purchases or browsing history, even across apps, which makes me feel my privacy is being compromised. For instance, I only see products I looked at only once and that constant tracking annoys me.

✓ No, I usually avoid advertisements because they're targeted at my recent purchases or browsing history, even across apps, which makes me feel that my privacy is being compromised. For instance, I only see products that I looked at once, and that constant tracking annoys me.

The adverb only is unnecessarily repeated in the phrase I looked at only once. Using only before see already expresses the intended limitation. The revised sentence places the adverb more naturally and avoids repetition. Adding that after feel also makes the clause structure clearer.

× They make me laugh, so I remember the brand more than with flashy or pushy commercials.

✓ They make me laugh, so I remember the brand better than I remember brands from flashy or pushy commercials.

The original comparison is incomplete because more than with flashy or pushy commercials does not clearly identify what is being compared. The correction compares two parallel actions: remembering the brand from funny advertisements and remembering brands from flashy or pushy commercials. Better is also more natural than more when comparing the quality of remembering.