Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答基本切题，但开头的“It’s all the time”语序错误，应改为“I see them all the time”。后半部分重复表达“ads appear/pop up”，可以合并。建议使用清晰的主题句，再补充广告出现的位置和对你的影响，并使用“especially”和“which”连接细节。

예시: Yes, I see advertisements all the time when I use my phone or computer. They often appear between short videos or pop up after I have watched a few clips. Although they can be annoying, I sometimes find them useful when they introduce products that interest me.

제안: 内容具体，有童年经历和结果，但时态不一致：过去的广告应使用“had”而不是“has”。“bronze color”表达不自然，可以说“bright orange color”或“golden color”；同时需要加入连接词，如“because”和“as a result”，使句子更连贯。

예시: Yes, I remember a television advertisement for a fruit drink from my childhood. It had bright orange colors and featured several cheerful children, so it caught my attention immediately. I watched it repeatedly and, as a result, asked my mum to buy the drink for me.

제안: 回答切题，但句子缺少标点和清晰结构，导致信息难以理解。“screen sidebars”不自然，可以说“digital screens”或“screens beside the doors”。“on the subway windows”也不够准确，建议说“on the windows of a subway train”。应先直接回答，再列举广告位置，最后提供上周的具体例子。

예시: Yes, I see quite a lot of advertisements on public transport. They are usually displayed on the walls, beside the doors, or on digital screens inside trains. For example, last week I noticed a large poster for a popular brand on the windows of a subway train.

제안: 观点明确，但“money ads”应改为“many ads”，“interrupt when what I’m doing”应改为“interrupt me while I’m doing something”。“noisy”重复了两次，而且广告通常是“intrusive”或“annoying”，不一定是声音很大。建议给出两个不同理由，并使用“also”或“for instance”连接。

예시: Not really, to be honest. Many online advertisements are intrusive because they interrupt me while I am watching a video or browsing a website. In addition, some of them exaggerate the benefits of a product, so I do not always trust them.

제안: 回答结构较好，有偏好、解释和特点，但“this short travel ads”应改为“these short travel ads”，“natural sensory”搭配错误，可以说“beautiful natural scenery”。“warm little story”可以改为更自然的“heartwarming story”。

예시: I like short, creative video advertisements that tell a heartwarming story. They do not pressure people to buy something directly; instead, they focus on emotions or memorable images. I particularly enjoy travel advertisements that show beautiful natural scenery and make me want to visit those places.

제안: 回答中有多个词语和语法问题，导致意思几乎无法理解，例如“havice”“notable crown light”和“under chaos”。需要先明确商品名称、购买原因和结果。建议使用简单、准确的过去时句型，并按照“广告内容—购买原因—购买结果”的顺序回答；同时注意“it was not expensive”与“it was expensive”的区别。

예시: Yes, I once bought a rechargeable desk lamp because of an online advertisement. The ad showed that it was bright, portable, and useful during power cuts, so I ordered it immediately. Fortunately, it was reasonably priced and worked quite well, so I was satisfied with my purchase.

× It's all the time social media apps and websites are full of ads that usually appear between videos every time I watch short videos and ads pop up after a few clips.

✓ Social media apps and websites are full of ads. They usually appear between videos whenever I watch short videos, and more ads pop up after a few clips.

原句中多个完整分句直接连接，句子结构混乱。“It's all the time”放置位置也不自然。可以拆分长句，并使用逗号和连词连接相关分句。

× It has the bronze color and cheerful kids in it.

✓ It had a bronze color and featured cheerful kids.

你是在描述童年时看到的广告，因此应使用过去时。将“has”改为“had”，使时态与“when you were a child”和“I watched”保持一致。

× It has the bronze color and cheerful kids in it.

✓ It had a bronze color and featured cheerful kids.

“color”是可数名词单数，前面通常需要冠词。这里是泛指一种青铜色，所以使用“a bronze color”，而不是“the bronze color”。

× I watched it many times back then I even asked my mum to buy that drink after seeing the ad.

✓ I watched it many times back then, and I even asked my mum to buy that drink after seeing the ad.

原句包含两个完整分句，但中间没有连接词或标点，形成连接错误。可以在“back then”后加逗号，并使用“and”连接两个分句。

× Yes there are quite a few you can find posters on the wall and the screen sidebars and trains last week I saw a big brand poster on the subway windows.

✓ Yes, there are quite a few advertisements. You can find posters on the walls and screens of trains. Last week, I saw a large poster for a well-known brand on a subway window.

“There are quite a few”后面缺少名词，应该补充“advertisements”。此外，原句把多个意思连接在一起，建议拆成几个完整句子。

× Yes there are quite a few you can find posters on the wall and the screen sidebars and trains last week I saw a big brand poster on the subway windows.

✓ Yes, there are quite a few advertisements. You can find posters on the walls and screens of trains. Last week, I saw a large poster for a well-known brand on a subway window.

原句缺少必要的标点和连接词，多个独立分句连续出现，导致意思不清楚。回答口语问题时，应把不同时间和地点的信息分开表达。

× Not really to be honest, money ads are too noisy and interrupt when what I'm doing.

✓ Not really, to be honest. Many ads are too noisy and interrupt me when I am doing something.

“interrupt when what I'm doing”结构错误。“interrupt”后面需要宾语“me”，而“when”后面应接完整句子“when I am doing something”。

× For example, pop up ads on website are really noisy.

✓ For example, pop-up ads on websites are really noisy.

“ads”是复数，因此相关名词“website”也应使用复数“websites”，表示多个网站上的广告。“pop-up”作前置修饰语时通常加连字符。

× For example, pop up ads on website are really noisy.

✓ For example, pop-up ads on websites are really noisy.

“website”是可数名词单数，不能单独使用。这里是在泛指网站，应使用复数“websites”，或者说“a website”。

× I love this short travel ads with beautiful natural sensory.

✓ I love these short travel ads with beautiful natural scenery.

“ads”是复数，所以指示代词应使用复数“these”，不能使用单数“this”。另外，“scenery”是不可数名词，适合表示自然风景。

× He is a havice and ad for a nice notable crown light it looked really practical under chaos I ordered it to right away so it was now expensive.

✓ Yes, I saw an advertisement for a nice table lamp. It looked really practical, so I ordered it right away. It was not expensive.

原句包含许多无法连接的分句，部分表达也不完整，导致句子结构不清楚。应使用完整的主语、谓语和宾语，并把广告内容、产品特点和购买结果分成几个句子。

× He is a havice and ad for a nice notable crown light it looked really practical under chaos I ordered it to right away so it was now expensive.

✓ Yes, I saw an advertisement for a nice table lamp. It looked really practical, so I ordered it right away. It was not expensive.

“ordered it to right away”中的“to”使用错误。固定搭配是“order something right away”，表示“立即订购某物”，不需要介词“to”。