Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答基本切题，但存在较多语法、搭配和表达问题。应直接说明“经常看到”，并用具体场景支持观点。注意不可数名词和单复数：advertising通常不可数，digital world应使用单数概念，a video前要用an。最后一句“by its understandable”不自然，可以改为“which is understandable because advertising is an effective way to promote products”。建议控制在2—3句，避免重复使用advertisements。

예시: Yes, I see advertisements very often when I use my phone or computer. They usually appear before online videos, in social media feeds, or on shopping websites. This is understandable because digital advertising is an effective way for companies to promote their products.

제안: 回答提到了童年广告，但核心内容不够清楚，“message machine”可能不是准确表达，建议明确说明广告是什么产品或节目。存在时态和形容词错误：过去习惯应使用“was watching”或“used to watch”，人感到兴奋用“excited”，事物令人兴奋用“exciting”。可以按照“广告内容—印象—原因”的结构组织答案，并补充一个具体画面或幽默情节。

예시: Yes. When I was a child, I was fascinated by a funny TV commercial for a message machine. The host acted in an exaggerated and energetic way, and the advertisement used a memorable slogan. I still remember it because it was entertaining rather than simply trying to sell the product.

제안: 回答观点明确，但语法和词汇需要改进。advertising是不可数名词，commercials是可数复数；“transportation”不适合表示交通工具，建议使用“public transport”或“trains and planes”。不要同时使用Although和but。可以先直接回答数量，再用让步或对比说明总体广告很多，但公共交通上的广告相对少。

예시: Not really. I see some advertisements on buses and in stations, but there are not many on trains or planes where I live. Although advertising is everywhere online, public transport is relatively less crowded with commercials.

제안: 回答有清晰立场，也进行了例外说明，但表达重复且有明显语法错误。“made not aesthetically enough”应改为“not very aesthetically pleasing”，“keep telling you buy it”应改为“keep telling you to buy something”，“I very like it”应改为“I like them very much”。建议用2—3句完成：先表明不喜欢，再解释原因，最后给出Apple广告作为例外。

예시: Generally speaking, no. I find many advertisements too pushy because they repeatedly tell people to buy something, and they are not always aesthetically pleasing. However, I do like Apple’s commercials because they are simple, creative, and focused more on the brand’s ideas than on direct selling.

제안: 回答切题，条件“制作精良、具有审美性”比较明确，也提供了Apple的例子。不过“all kinds... only if”逻辑略生硬，“Apple's advertised advertising”重复且错误，应改为“Apple’s advertisements”或“Apple’s advertising”。建议加入具体特征，例如简洁的画面、富有创意的故事或不强迫消费者购买，以提升内容具体性。

예시: I like advertisements that are well-produced and visually appealing. For example, Apple’s commercials often use simple images, elegant music, and creative storytelling instead of giving customers a hard sell. I find this style sophisticated and memorable.

제안: 这是几组答案中较完整的一项：直接回答了问题，给出了具体产品和原因，结构也较清楚。需要改进搭配和语法：“well made”作定语应写“well-made”，“advertisements from Apple”可改为“Apple’s advertisements”，“promote the company ideas”应为“communicate the company’s ideas”。另外，“it’s not like encouraging”不自然，可改为“they do not directly encourage consumers to buy”。

예시: Yes, I have. I bought my iPhone and AirPods partly because of Apple’s well-made advertisements. They are minimalist and focus on the design and lifestyle associated with the products rather than directly pressuring people to buy them. As a result, I became interested in the brand and its products.

× Yeah, I'd say the advertisements have already filled the whole digital worlds.

✓ Yeah, I'd say advertisements have already filled the whole digital world.

“world”在这里表示整个数字世界，是单数概念，因此应使用单数形式“world”，不能使用复数“worlds”。

× Before you play an video, you see advertisements and almost you can see it everywhere by its understandable it's a good way to promote the products.

✓ Before you play a video, you see advertisements, and you can see them almost everywhere. Obviously, it's a good way to promote products.

“video”以辅音音素开头，所以前面应使用“a”，而不是“an”。

× Before you play an video, you see advertisements and almost you can see it everywhere by its understandable it's a good way to promote the products.

✓ Before you play a video, you see advertisements, and you can see them almost everywhere. Obviously, it's a good way to promote products.

“advertisements”是复数名词，因此后面的代词应使用复数“them”，不能使用单数“it”。

× Before you play an video, you see advertisements and almost you can see it everywhere by its understandable it's a good way to promote the products.

✓ Before you play a video, you see advertisements, and you can see them almost everywhere. Obviously, it's a good way to promote products.

原句把多个意思直接连接在一起，结构不清晰；“by its understandable”也不能构成正确表达。应拆分句子，并使用“Obviously, it's understandable that...”或更自然的“Obviously, it's...”。

× Yeah, when I was a child I had a very weird hobby that is watching advertisement on the TV and I remember it was a message machine.

✓ Yeah, when I was a child, I had a very weird hobby that was watching advertisements on TV, and I remember it was a message machine.

主句使用过去时“was a child”和“had”，从句也应保持过去时，所以“is”应改为“was”。

× Yeah, when I was a child I had a very weird hobby that is watching advertisement on the TV and I remember it was a message machine.

✓ Yeah, when I was a child, I had a very weird hobby that was watching advertisements on TV, and I remember it was a message machine.

这里是泛指看广告，通常需要使用可数名词复数“advertisements”，而不是单数“advertisement”。

× The host acted very exciting excited and it was quite funny I think.

✓ The host acted very excited, and it was quite funny, I think.

“exciting”表示“令人兴奋的”，通常描述事物；“excited”表示“感到兴奋的”，可以描述人。这里描述主持人的状态，所以应使用“excited”。

× Well, actually I don't see too much advertisement on those transportation. Although nowadays there are too much commercials in our society, but there are very limited advertisements on train or plan.

✓ Well, actually, I don't see too many advertisements on those forms of transportation. Although nowadays there are too many commercials in our society, there are very limited advertisements on trains or planes.

“advertisements”和“commercials”都是可数名词复数，因此应使用“many”，而不是用于不可数名词的“much”。另外，“those”后面需要接复数名词短语，如“those forms of transportation”。

× Well, actually I don't see too much advertisement on those transportation. Although nowadays there are too much commercials in our society, but there are very limited advertisements on train or plan.

✓ Well, actually, I don't see too many advertisements on those forms of transportation. Although nowadays there are too many commercials in our society, there are very limited advertisements on trains or planes.

“although”本身已经表示让步关系，不能和“but”同时使用。应删除“but”，或者将“although”改为“but”。

× Well, actually I don't see too much advertisement on those transportation. Although nowadays there are too much commercials in our society, but there are very limited advertisements on train or plan.

✓ Well, actually, I don't see too many advertisements on those forms of transportation. Although nowadays there are too many commercials in our society, there are very limited advertisements on trains or planes.

这里是在泛指火车和飞机上的广告，所以“train”和“plane”应使用复数形式“trains”和“planes”。

× I think most advertisements are made not aesthetically enough and they are very rude.

✓ I think most advertisements are not aesthetically pleasing enough, and they are very rude.

“aesthetically enough”单独使用不完整。表达“在审美上不够令人愉悦”时，应使用形容词短语“aesthetically pleasing enough”。

× It's like keep telling you buy it, by it.

✓ It's like they're constantly telling you to buy it.

“It's like”后面需要一个完整的从句，因此应加入主语和谓语“they're constantly telling”。另外，“tell someone”后面通常接带“to”的不定式，即“tell you to buy it”。

× I don't like it. But it's not always the case. Apple commercials, I very like it.

✓ I don't like them. But that's not always the case. I really like Apple commercials.

“advertisements”或“commercials”是复数名词，所以应使用“them”，不能使用“it”。“that”在“that's not always the case”中指代前面整个观点，比“it”更合适。

× Apple commercials, I very like it.

✓ I really like Apple commercials.

英语中程度副词通常放在实义动词前面，因此应说“I really like”，而不是“I very like”。此外，“very”通常不能直接修饰动词“like”。

× I'd say I like all kinds of advertisements only if they are well made and have a high aesthetic level for instance, Apple's advertised advertising are very sophisticated.

✓ I'd say I like all kinds of advertisements as long as they are well made and have a high aesthetic level. For instance, Apple's advertisements are very sophisticated.

主语“Apple's advertisements”是复数，所以谓语应使用“are”。原句中的“advertised advertising”结构重复且不自然，使用“Apple's advertisements”更加准确。

× They are very minimalist and it's not like encouraging consumers to buy it but to promote the company ideas.

✓ They are very minimalist, and they are not meant to encourage consumers to buy them but to promote the company's ideas.

前文的“advertisements”是复数，因此应使用“they”和“them”，不能在同一语境中使用单数“it”。“buy them”中的“them”指代广告所宣传的产品。

× They are very minimalist and it's not like encouraging consumers to buy it but to promote the company ideas.

✓ They are very minimalist, and they are not meant to encourage consumers to buy them but to promote the company's ideas.

原句中“they”和“it's”主语不一致，且“it's not like encouraging...”结构不完整。应改为“they are not meant to...”，使“encourage”和“promote”保持平行结构。