Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答要更直接并注意句子连贯与简洁，避免重复与语法错误。先给主题句，然后用一两句具体说明广告出现的频率与感受，使用连接词如"because"或"so"使逻辑清楚。发音上注意减少重复填词（like, you know）。

예시: Yes, I see ads very often on my phone and computer because many apps and websites display them. They usually interrupt what I'm doing and make me feel annoyed, so I tend to close them quickly.

제안: 回答要更有结构：先给出明确的记忆对象，然后用具体细节解释为什么印象深刻。避免模糊表述并用更准确的词汇（e.g. elderly, heartwarming）。句子不要过长且注意语法。

예시: Yes. I remember a TV ad featuring an elderly couple promoting health products. The couple looked warm and affectionate, and their story was emotional, which made the ad memorable to me.

제안: 回答应更具体并使用连接词。先回答是否看到，然后说明类型与原因或效果。避免含糊的短语如"have a quick time"，用更准确的表达比如"pass time"或"catch people's attention"。

예시: Yes, I often see many ads on the subway, especially for meditation apps and education courses. These ads are placed where passengers can easily read them while passing time, so they catch people's attention.

제안: 回答应更自然并提供理由，使用一到两个支持句。避免重复和填充词，注意时态和语法（e.g. "are not real" -> "often seem misleading"）。给出具体例子说明为什么不喜欢。

예시: No, I don't really like most ads because many online adverts seem misleading and interrupt my browsing. For example, pop-up ads on apps often cover the screen and waste my time.

제안: 回答要更准确并完成未完的句子。先明确喜欢的广告类型，再解释原因并举例。用更自然的表达如"emotional"、"family-oriented"并说明效果（e.g. evokes empathy）。

예시: I prefer emotional, family-oriented ads because they feel sincere and relatable. For instance, commercials that show parents and children reconnecting often evoke empathy and leave a strong impression.

제안: 回答要更连贯并提供具体细节，如产品类别、使用效果和购买原因。减少语气词并注意语法（e.g. "good for our health" -> "beneficial for health"）。控制长度不超过5句。

예시: Yes. Last summer I saw a TikTok ad for a dietary supplement that claimed to improve energy. I bought it because the reviews looked convincing, and after using it for a month I did notice a modest improvement in my stamina.

× Yeah, I open the advertisement when I open some applications and some websites.

✓ Yes, I open advertisements when I use some applications and websites.

原句句子结构不够自然，“open the advertisement”与“open some applications”并列使用导致重复和不准确。将“the advertisement”改为复数形式“advertisements”，并把“open some applications and some websites”改为更自然的“use some applications and websites”。建议用更自然的动词搭配（use applications/websites）。

× You know, this is a really confusing and anxious, you know, didn't I don't like to say the advertisement is a waste of time.

✓ You know, it's really confusing and annoying; I don't want to say advertisements are a waste of time.

原句结构混乱，含有双重否定与断裂的插入语（didn't I don't），且形容词选择不当。将“anxious”改为描述广告感受更合适的“annoying”，去掉多余的否定并把“the advertisement is a waste of time”改为复数形式“advertisements are a waste of time”。中文建议：避免插入语打断主句，保持主谓一致与单一否定。

× I remember I saw the advertisement that old couples sell the products that are good for the old man in the advertisement, they were very warm and outgoing and always the story was really touching me.

✓ I remember seeing an advertisement where an elderly couple promoted products that are good for older people; they were very warm and outgoing, and the story really touched me.

原句中“old couples sell the products that are good for the old man”措辞不自然且重复“in the advertisement”。把動詞時態與語態調整為動名詞短語“seeing an advertisement”，使用“elderly couple”與“older people”更恰當，並把“touching me”改為更自然的“touched me”。中文建议：用自然的名词短语替代直译，避免冗余。

× Yes, of course when I was in the subway there were many advertisements about meditation and education.

✓ Yes, of course, when I was on the subway there were many advertisements about meditation and education.

此句本身問題較小，但介詞“in the subway”在英語中通常說“on the subway”。根据题目要求只修正列出类型中的问题，此处归为介词使用（但更接近习惯用法），已作调整。中文建议：注意介词搭配，“on the subway/on the bus”。

× You know the advertisement may give a chance for people to just read and have a quick time.

✓ You know, advertisements can give people a chance to read something quickly.

原句不自然且“have a quick time”不是地道表达。将“may give a chance for people to just read and have a quick time”改为更自然的“can give people a chance to read something quickly”。中文建议：使用惯用短语表达“快速阅读”，避免直译。

× No, you know, advertisements in my daily life are not real sometimes especially when I see advertisements on my phone when I opened the application.

✓ No, advertisements in my daily life are sometimes not real, especially when I see them on my phone after I open an application.

原句时态混用（see / opened），且语序不自然。把“sometimes”放在合适位置，统一现在时“see”并将“opened”改为“open an application”或用“after I open an application”。中文建议：保持时态一致，注意时间状语的位置。

× This was this is really waste of time, I think.

✓ I think this is really a waste of time.

原句重复“this was this is”，且缺少冠词“a”。合并为一句并添加冠词。中文建议：避免重复，注意冠词使用。

× I like the advertisements that express sincere feelings.

✓ I like advertisements that express sincere feelings.

原句使用定冠词“the”使表述过于特指，去掉“the”更符合泛指用法。中文建议：谈一般喜好时通常省略定冠词或用复数名词泛指。

× For example, there are many advertisements about family relationships. You know, this will give if people a good leading and to just live strong relationships between

✓ For example, there are many advertisements about family relationships. You know, they can give people good guidance and encourage them to build strong relationships.

原句结构混乱，词序错误，“give if people a good leading”不通顺。将句子重写为自然表达，使用“give people good guidance”和“encourage them to build strong relationships”。中文建议：使用清晰的主谓结构，避免词序颠倒与不必要的插入词。

× Yeah, of course you know last summer vacation I saw an advertisement on TikTok this is a product which can give us healthy and be good for our health.

✓ Yes, of course. Last summer vacation I saw an advertisement on TikTok for a product that can improve our health and is good for us.

原句时态与从句衔接不当，“this is a product which can give us healthy”语法错误（“give us healthy”不正确），改为“a product that can improve our health and is good for us”。中文建议：注意时态一致及用词搭配（improve health），避免直译。

× So I just bought it and it really it's really a real product for me.

✓ So I just bought it, and it really was a genuine product for me.

原句有重复“it's really it's really”且“a real product”表达笨拙。根据上下文为过去发生的事，使用过去时“was”并改为“genuine product”。中文建议：避免重复，时态与语境一致，选择更准确的形容词。