Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答内容较直接，但存在语法和用词错误（例如“collect to close”“appears”），句子有些重复且长度偏长。提高建议： 1) 修正语法和拼写错误，确保主谓一致； 2) 用更自然的表达替换重复句，如用one or they代替重复名词； 3) 控制在3-4句内，第一句给出直接回答，后面用一到两句补充具体例子或影响； 4) 使用简单连接词（for example, because）使逻辑更清晰。

예시: Yes, I do. I often see many ads on my phone and computer, and they pop up so frequently that I have to close them. For example, video ads interrupt what I'm watching and make it hard to concentrate.

제안: 回答有记忆性细节，但语法和用词混乱（重复词汇、拼写错误如“the a little girl”，“tidy”可能用词不当，“made the sounds very touching”逻辑不清）。提高建议： 1) 把描述按时间顺序和因果关系组织清楚； 2) 使用准确词汇描述（e.g. toy而不是 tidy），避免重复词； 3) 用连接词（because, so）自然衔接原因与结果； 4) 控制在最多四句话，第一句直接回答并点明广告品牌或类型，随后具体描述细节与感受。

예시: Yes. I remember a Jelly Cat TV ad when I was a child. It showed a little girl playing with a soft toy, and the gentle music and pastel colors made the scene very touching. Because of that, I asked my mother to buy the toy for me.

제안: 回答覆盖要点，但存在语法错误（复数形式、搭配等）和表达不自然（“feel sometimes very annoying about this advertisement”）。提高建议： 1) 注意名词单复数和介词搭配（e.g. backs of seats）； 2) 用更自然的形容词和结构表达感受（e.g. I sometimes find them annoying）； 3) 提供一两个具体位置或类型的例子，使用连接词使句子连贯； 4) 保持简洁，避免重复。

예시: Yes, I do. There are many ads on trains and planes, often on the backs of seats and above the doors. I sometimes find these ads annoying because they are hard to ignore during a journey.

제안: 回答表达了对比观点，这很好。但有词汇错误（“intra intrusive”，“placed displayed”）和时态/搭配问题（I found → I find）。提高建议： 1) 使用准确词汇（intrusive, informative）； 2) 保持时态一致，通常用一般现在时表达常态观点； 3) 用连接词（however, when）清晰区分对比； 4) 可补充具体例子说明广告如何提供有用信息。

예시: Generally, I dislike ads, especially those displayed in public spaces because I find them intrusive and distracting. However, when I'm shopping for something new, I find ads can be informative and help me compare products.

제안: 观点明确但语法和词汇问题较多（单复数、时态和拼写，如 advertisement/advertisements, makes me feels, shot→short, sparing→sparing? 意义不清）。提高建议： 1) 注意主谓一致和形容词/名词形式； 2) 用准确的短语表达（heartwarming ads, short touching stories）； 3) 增加一两处具体例子或原因，用连接词（because, as）连接； 4) 控制句数并保持自然流畅。

예시: I prefer heartwarming ads that show people being kind to strangers. Such ads make me feel calm and positive because they focus on simple gestures and often tell short, touching stories.

× I see a lot of advertisements on my phones and computers.

✓ I see a lot of advertisements on my phone and computer.

原句中“phones”和“computers”与语境不一致，通常人们说“on my phone and computer”（指各自的设备），此处应使用单数。简洁改法：使用单数形式匹配所属关系。

× I often have to collect to close them because they appears too frequently, which is very annoying and interrupts what I'm doing.

✓ I often have to click to close them because they appear too frequently, which is very annoying and interrupts what I'm doing.

原句有几个问题：1) “collect” 是拼写错误，应为“click”（点击）；2) “appears” 主语是复数“they”，应用原形“appear”；3) 此处不需要不定式“to”后再接动词，正确结构是“have to click”。这些属于动词形式和主谓一致的错误。建议注意动词拼写并确保主语与动词数一致。

× When I was younger I remember a really cute advertisement from brand Jelly Cat. I saw the a little girl playing with a small tidy and the music and and the gentle colors made the sounds very touching.

✓ When I was younger, I remember a really cute advertisement from the brand Jelly Cat. I saw a little girl playing with a small toy and the music and the gentle colors made the scene very touching.

句子问题包括：1) 缺少冠词“the”修饰“brand Jelly Cat”；2) 多余的“the”出现在“I saw the a little girl”；3) 单词“tidy”用错，应为“toy”；4) 重复了“and and”；5) “made the sounds very touching”表达不自然，应改为“made the scene very touching”或“made it very touching”。这些属于冠词、词汇使用和句子结构问题。建议注意冠词使用，检查拼写并用自然搭配表达总体印象。

× So I immediately asked my mom to buy 1 for me.

✓ So I immediately asked my mom to buy one for me.

原句中数字“1”应写成单词“one”以符合书面表达，但语法时态正确。此处并非时态错误，主要是书写格式和自然表达问题。建议在正式写作或口语转写中用单词形式或“one”。

× Many advertisement are placed on the backs of seat and above the doors, so they are very noticeable and I feel sometimes very annoying about this advertisement.

✓ Many advertisements are placed on the backs of seats and above the doors, so they are very noticeable and I sometimes feel very annoyed by these advertisements.

错误包括：1) “advertisement” 应为复数 “advertisements”；2) “seat” 应为复数“seats”；3) “I feel sometimes very annoying about this advertisement” 主语感受应为“I feel annoyed”而不是“annoying”，且代词要与复数广告一致，改为“these advertisements”，并用介词“by”。这些属于单复数、形容词/分词用法及介词使用错误。建议检查名词单复数和形容词与感受表达（人感觉是形容词）。

× Well, I generally dislike advertisements, especially those placed displayed in public space because I feel intra intrusive and distracting.

✓ Well, I generally dislike advertisements, especially those displayed in public spaces because I feel they are intrusive and distracting.

问题有：1) “placed displayed” 重复，应选其一，例如“displayed”；2) “public space” 通常用复数“public spaces”或“public spaces/places”；3) “I feel intra intrusive” 单词重复/错误，应为“they are intrusive”或“I find them intrusive”。这涉及形容词使用、词汇重复以及名词复数。建议避免重复词、使用正确形容词并保证句子完整主谓结构。

× However, when I'm looking to buy something new, I found the advertisement can be information and help me choose the right products.

✓ However, when I'm looking to buy something new, I find advertisements can be informative and help me choose the right products.

原句时态混用：前半用当前进行时“I'm looking”，后半用过去式“found”，应保持现在时“find”。另外“the advertisement can be information” 词类错误，应为形容词“informative”，且复数更自然“advertisements”。建议保持时态一致并使用正确词类（形容词）。

× For me, I prefer heartwarming advertisement that show people being kind to strangers.

✓ For me, I prefer heartwarming advertisements that show people being kind to strangers.

“advertisement” 应用复数“advertisements”与“that show”一致；此外“that show”中的动词与复数主语一致。此为名词单复数错误，建议注意主语与动词的一致性。

× Those advertisement makes me feels calm and positive because they focus on simple human gestures and often tell a shot in sparing stories to care consumers.

✓ Those advertisements make me feel calm and positive because they focus on simple human gestures and often tell short, sparing stories to care for consumers.

原句错误：1) “advertisement” 应为复数“advertisements”；2) 动词应为复数形式“make”（非“makes”）；3) “feels” 应为“feel”；4) “a shot in sparing stories” 词语搭配错误，改为“short, sparing stories”；5) “to care consumers” 应为“to care for consumers” 或“to show care for consumers”。这些涉及主谓一致、第三人称单数错误、词汇搭配和介词使用。建议确保主语复数时动词用复数形式，注意常用短语搭配和介词。