Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details. Avoid invented words (e.g., “disadvertisement”) and redundant phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, “also” or “for example”).

예시: Yes, I see a lot of ads on my phone and computer. For example, I often get pop-up ads while browsing apps and banner ads when I watch videos. These ads usually promote apps or online services, and I sometimes click them if the product looks useful.

제안: Give a direct answer then add one concise reason with a clear linking word. Correct grammar (past tense, articles) and choose simpler vocabulary if unsure. Keep to 2–3 sentences total.

예시: No, not really. When I was a child I preferred watching movies and science fiction shows, so I didn’t pay much attention to advertisements. As a result, no ad left a strong impression on me.

제안: Finish your sentence and organise your response: give a clear topic sentence, then compare two places with a linking word such as “but” or “however”. Use specific examples (posters, digital screens) and avoid trailing off.

예시: Yes, I see a lot of advertising on public transport. For example, in Minsk’s metro there were many posters and digital screens, but when I moved to Moscow I noticed fewer ads on some lines. Overall, trains and buses often display ads for local shops and events.

제안: Answer directly (yes/no/partly) then give one clear reason with a concrete example. Avoid repeating phrases and use natural collocations like “stick in my mind” instead of “subconsciously you can choose”.

예시: I like some advertisements occasionally. They can stick in my mind, so when I go shopping I sometimes pick products I’ve seen in ads, especially if the ad highlighted a useful feature or a discount.

제안: Be specific about types of ads and give a short reason or example. Use clearer phrasing (e.g., “ads for products I might buy” and “influence my decisions”) and keep to two sentences maximum.

예시: I prefer ads for products I might buy, such as electronics or kitchen gadgets. These ads help me learn about features and prices, so I can decide in advance whether to buy them.

× Absolutely yes. And I think it is commonly used today that we have such pop up advertisements in our phones or our computers and while we are watching TV, that disadvertisement company shares to us the idea of their products.

✓ Absolutely. I think it is common today to have pop-up advertisements on our phones and computers, and while we are watching TV, advertising companies share ideas about their products with us.

This sentence has multiple issues: wrong word forms ('commonly used' should be 'common' to describe a situation), incorrect placement of 'pop up' (should be hyphenated 'pop-up'), wrong prepositions ('on our phones' not 'in our phones'), incorrect noun 'disadvertisement company' (use 'advertising companies'), and awkward word order. Suggestion: use simpler, standard structures: 'It is common to have X on Y' and 'companies share ideas about their products with us.' ID:26

× I can definitely say no because of the reason that when I was a child I didn't completely imperst into this advertisement for me.

✓ I can definitely say no because when I was a child I wasn't completely interested in advertisements.

'didn't completely imperst into this advertisement for me' is ungrammatical. The correct verb is 'be interested in' and in past tense 'wasn't interested in.' Also plural 'advertisements' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'wasn't interested in advertisements' for clear past-tense expression. ID:5

× Advertisements wasn't my primary goal.

✓ Advertisements weren't my primary concern.

'Advertisements' is plural, so the verb must be plural 'weren't' not 'wasn't.' Also 'primary goal' is odd for ads; 'primary concern' or 'main interest' is better. Suggestion: match subject and verb number and choose appropriate noun collocation. ID:27

× Absolutely yes, when I moved to Minsk, especially in the Metro, a lot of different advertisement banners and so on, but while I relocated to Moscow, I can say definitely that this metro didn't

✓ Absolutely. When I moved to Minsk, especially in the metro, there were a lot of different advertising banners, but when I relocated to Moscow, I can definitely say that the metro didn't have them.

Missing verb 'there were' to introduce existence (There be issue) and incorrect preposition/capitalization ('in the Metro' -> 'in the metro' is ok but 'on the metro' can also be used). Also sentence was incomplete; added 'didn't have them.' Use past tense 'there were' to describe past situation. Suggestion: include 'there were' for existence and finish the clause with clear verb. ID:3

× I can say every now and then because when you see the advertisement you can subconsciously memorize the information that you have and maybe when you go to some grocery store, you subconsciously you can choose the product by yourself that you keep in mind for this time you have seen the advertisement.

✓ I would say occasionally, because when you see an advertisement you can subconsciously memorize the information, and later, when you go to a grocery store, you may unconsciously choose the product you remembered from the ad.

Awkward tense and repetition: 'I can say every now and then' is better as 'I would say occasionally.' Use simple present for general truths: 'when you see an advertisement you can subconsciously memorize...' Avoid repeating 'subconsciously' and incorrect phrasing 'choose the product by yourself that you keep in mind for this time you have seen the advertisement.' Suggestion: simplify and use natural collocations 'may unconsciously choose the product you remembered.' ID:6

× If I had to choose, I would probably say that I like advertisements about different products that I in the future probably will buy to own use and it is quite convenient that they subconsciously can tune your mind to make a choice beforehand you buy this product.

✓ If I had to choose, I would say I like advertisements about products I might buy in the future for personal use, and it is convenient that they can subconsciously influence you to make a choice before you buy the product.

Word order and modal verbs are awkward: 'I in the future probably will buy' should be 'I might buy in the future.' 'to own use' should be 'for personal use.' 'they subconsciously can tune your mind' is unnatural; use 'they can subconsciously influence you.' Also 'beforehand you buy this product' -> 'before you buy the product.' Suggestion: use 'might' for possibility and natural verb collocations like 'influence' and 'personal use.' ID:4