Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce repetition and use correct verb forms and countable/uncountable nouns.

예시: Yes, I often see advertisements on my phone and computer. For example, when I watch videos on YouTube I usually encounter several ads before and during the video, some of which are humorous while others are more emotional.

제안: Answer directly about a specific ad from childhood. Use one clear example and explain why it impressed you with simple cause-effect linking words (for example, because, so, which). Avoid vague phrases and incorrect nouns/verbs.

예시: Yes. I remember a cheerful toy commercial from my childhood that always made me smile. Because it showed children playing together and laughing, the ad made me want the toy and brightened my mood whenever I felt sad.

제안: Give a concise and structured answer: state whether you see many ads, then give specific examples and one effect of those ads. Use linking words (for example, for instance, because) and correct singular/plural forms and vocabulary.

예시: Yes, I see many advertisements on buses and trains. For instance, digital screens and posters often promote products like snacks or smartphones, so I sometimes learn about new brands or offers while I commute.

제안: State your opinion clearly, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid long repetitive sentences and correct word choices (e.g., 'a good break', 'informative').

예시: Yes, I do like some advertisements because they give viewers a short break during long videos and can be informative. For example, an ad might introduce a new app or a useful household product.

제안: Answer with a clear topic sentence naming the types you prefer, then explain why with specific reasons and an example. Use varied vocabulary (humorous, celebrity-endorsed, upbeat) and avoid repetition.

예시: I prefer humorous and celebrity-endorsed advertisements because they are entertaining and memorable. For example, a funny commercial featuring a well-known actor is more likely to catch my attention and help me remember the brand.

× Yes, when I usually use my phone and like open app YouTube, then I see watch our long videos.

✓ Yes, when I usually use my phone and open the YouTube app, I see long videos.

The sentence has tense and word-choice problems. 'Like open app YouTube' is awkward; use 'open the YouTube app'. 'I see watch our long videos' mixes verbs; use a single present simple verb 'I see long videos' to match the habitual present context. Also remove unnecessary words ('our'). Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions: 'When I use my phone and open the YouTube app, I see long videos.'

× This way the load of advertisement are a lot of our funny and other are emotional and I see the lot of advertise on my phone.

✓ In this way there are a lot of advertisements that are funny and others that are emotional, and I see many ads on my phone.

Incorrect subject-verb agreement and article use. 'The load of advertisement are' is wrong: 'a lot of advertisements' is plural so use 'are' with correct construction 'there are'. 'Our funny' is incorrect pronoun; use 'that are funny' or 'many are funny'. 'A lot of advertise' should be 'many ads' or 'many advertisements.' Suggestion: use 'there are' for existence and plural nouns: 'There are many advertisements; some are funny and others are emotional.'

× Definitely yes, the load of advertisements are give me a pression but I also see the advertisement I also again more motivate than I see the advertisement this way and also one thing that when I am sad then the happy advertisement is come then I feel happy.

✓ Definitely yes, many advertisements gave me an impression, and I also feel more motivated when I see certain ads. Also, when I am sad and a happy advertisement appears, I feel happier.

Multiple errors: tense misuse ('are give me' should be past or present perfect depending on meaning), wrong noun 'pression' should be 'impression', and awkward structure. Use 'gave me an impression' for past influence or 'have given me an impression'. 'Is come' is incorrect; use 'appears'. Maintain consistent tense and correct verb forms. Suggestion: split into clear sentences and use proper verbs: 'gave' or 'have given', and 'appears'.

× Definitely yes, when I travel on the bus and train, then the load of advertisements are running on the screen, then I watch the advertisement and also gain a knowledge about the products.

✓ Definitely yes, when I travel by bus or train, many advertisements run on the screens; I watch them and learn about the products.

Use correct preposition 'by bus or train' and avoid 'the load of advertisements are running' which is awkward. For habitual actions use present simple: 'advertisements run'. 'Gain a knowledge' is unidiomatic; use 'learn about' or 'gain knowledge about'. Suggestion: use concise constructions: 'many advertisements run' and 'I learn about the products.'

× The load of advertisements are on products like Benus promote the advertisement to see the quality of products.

✓ Many advertisements promote products like Benus to show their quality.

Awkward and incorrect noun phrases. 'The load of advertisements are on products like Benus' mixes singular/plural and word order. Simplify: 'Many advertisements promote products like Benus' and use 'to show their quality' instead of 'to see the quality'. Suggestion: keep subject-verb agreement and use standard verb 'promote'.

× Definitely yes, I like advertisement because it is a very big break when the long video is running then the people take a break at that time and they also give knowledge about products and also gain worldwide advertisements to take knowledge.

✓ Definitely yes, I like advertisements because they provide a break during long videos; people can rest and also learn about products from them.

Number agreement and sentence structure issues. 'I like advertisement' should be 'I like advertisements' (plural). 'It is a very big break' unclear; better: 'they provide a break'. 'They also give knowledge' is better as 'people can learn about products from them'. Remove 'gain worldwide advertisements to take knowledge' which is unclear. Suggestion: use plural nouns and clearer phrasing: 'advertisements provide a break and convey information about products.'

× I like famous and funny advertisement which are which are funny and full of happiness and lot of celebrities are also advertised advertisement.

✓ I like famous, funny advertisements that are cheerful and often feature many celebrities.

Redundant and incorrect phrasing: 'which are which are funny' repeats and 'advertised advertisement' is wrong. Use adjectives before nouns and proper plural: 'advertisements'. Also 'full of happiness' is better as 'cheerful'. Suggestion: avoid repetition and use adjective order: 'famous, funny advertisements'.

× I also like this type of advertisement which are celebrities and also they give information about the businesses.

✓ I also like this type of advertisement that features celebrities and provides information about businesses.

Article and agreement issues: 'which are celebrities' is incorrect because advertisements do not 'are celebrities'; they 'feature' celebrities. Use 'that features' (or 'which feature') and singular/plural agreement: 'advertisement that features celebrities' or 'advertisements that feature celebrities'. Also 'give information about the businesses' -> 'provide information about businesses.' Suggestion: use correct verbs with 'feature' and proper noun forms.