Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid filler words and pauses. For example, say when and where you see ads, and mention one typical type of ad.

예시: Yes, I see advertisements on my phone and computer almost every day. For example, when I scroll through social media I often get short video ads or banner ads between posts, which I usually skip after a few seconds.

제안: Provide a direct answer naming a specific ad and explain why it was memorable. Use a clear structure: topic sentence + one or two concrete details (what the ad showed and why it stuck with you). Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example.'

예시: Yes. When I was a child I remember a TV commercial for a chocolate brand because it had a catchy song and colorful characters. As a result, I associated the chocolate with fun and still remember the jingle.

제안: Answer directly and give a specific observation about transport ads. Use linking words to connect ideas and a clear example of what you see. Avoid grammatical errors and unnecessary phrases.

예시: Yes, I see many advertisements on trains and buses in my city. For instance, almost every carriage has posters and digital screens promoting local businesses and events, which makes the transport system look very commercial.

제안: State your opinion clearly and follow with specific reasons using linking words (because, so, therefore). Give one brief example of how ads bother you and possibly what you prefer instead.

예시: To be honest, I don't like advertisements because they interrupt my browsing and are often repetitive. For example, I dislike autoplay video ads on social media because they use up data and distract me from content I want to see.

제안: Give a clear preference and explain what makes an ad acceptable. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'non-intrusive', 'useful', 'creative') and provide a short example of an ad you like.

예시: I prefer non-intrusive and useful ads that match my interests. For example, I like short ads that recommend products I might buy, such as a well-made ad for a useful kitchen gadget during a cooking video.

× Yes, I almost every day comma class with advertisement on computers or iPhone, especially when I watch social media scrolling many times. It's inevitable to.

✓ Yes, almost every day I see advertisements on my computer or iPhone, especially when I scroll through social media. It's inevitable.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and tense usage. 'I almost every day comma class with advertisement' is ungrammatical. Use present simple 'I see' for habitual actions. 'scrolling many times' should be 'when I scroll through social media'. Remove 'comma class' which is incorrect. Keep 'It's inevitable' as a separate clause.

× When I was a child, I didn't use any social media with phones, iPhones, so only, uh, I watched only TV and there's a commercial which kind of advertisements and I remember well about.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't use social media or phones, so I only watched TV, and there was a commercial that I remember well.

Use past simple consistently for past habits: 'didn't use' is correct, so follow with 'I only watched TV'. 'There's a commercial' is present; change to past 'there was a commercial'. 'Which kind of advertisements' is awkward; use 'that' to introduce the remembered commercial.

× Yes, I see a lot especially on trains and it's I think it's almost full advertising the city, my city for Gurgaon and I been living here, but it's very interesting to see whether.

✓ Yes, I see a lot, especially on trains. I think the city of Gurgaon is almost full of advertisements; I have been living here, and it's very interesting to see them.

Combine clauses and fix tense: 'I been living here' needs present perfect 'I have been living here'. 'almost full advertising the city' should be 'almost full of advertisements' or 'the city is almost full of advertisements'. End with clear object 'see them'.

× To be honest, I did don't have the positive feelings toward advertisements because it's always bothering me to watch social media and even repay for monthly it appears.

✓ To be honest, I don't have positive feelings toward advertisements because they always bother me when I use social media, and they even appear in my monthly subscriptions.

'Did don't' is ungrammatical; use simple present 'I don't have' for current feelings. 'It's always bothering me to watch social media' should be 'they always bother me when I use social media'. 'Repay for monthly it appears' is unclear; I interpreted as 'appear in my monthly subscriptions'.

× If it's not that sticky and it's really much the uses like uses favorite, I would say it's very good to advertise between the social media content.

✓ If an advertisement is not too intrusive and is relevant to users' interests, I would say it is good to place it within social media content.

Original sentence has unclear phrases: 'sticky' likely means 'intrusive', and 'it's really much the uses like uses favorite' is ungrammatical. Rephrase to 'relevant to users' interests' and 'place it within social media content' to convey intended meaning.