Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetitions (e.g., "platform platforms"), reduce filler words, and use linking words to add a reason. Also replace imprecise verbs like "say" with "see".

예시: Yes — I see a lot of ads on my phone, especially on Facebook and other social media. Because these platforms track our searches and interests, the ads are often tailored to my browsing history.

제안: Give a clearer, more specific response. If you cannot remember a particular ad, explain generally what types made an impression and why. Use linking words (e.g., "however," "for example") and correct singular/plural forms.

예시: I can't remember a specific ad, but I vividly recall TV commercials for snacks and children's shows. For example, colourful snack adverts with catchy jingles always stood out because they had memorable music and bright characters.

제안: Make the answer more fluent and combine short fragments into full sentences. Use linking words like "for instance" and avoid sentence breaks such as "...way to. Advertise". Add a brief reason to support your opinion.

예시: I occasionally see ads on public transport; for instance, posters on the sides of trams and buses. I haven't noticed many ads inside trains, but I think transport advertising is effective because it reaches many commuters throughout the day.

제안: Be direct and tighten the response. Start with a clear opinion, then give one or two specific reasons and a linking word. Replace vague phrases like "displaying on the TV or Internet" with more natural phrasing.

예시: Not really — I dislike ads because they interrupt TV shows and movies. Therefore, I usually skip them or browse my phone until the programme resumes.

제안: Clarify and give a concrete example. Avoid repetition ("way to ways") and be specific about what makes an ad effective (storytelling, humour, clear message). Mention one clear example and link it to why it appeals to you.

예시: I prefer creative adverts that tell a story or highlight a meaningful message while showcasing a product. For example, some YouTubers make short, humorous sketches that both entertain and explain a product's benefits, which makes me more likely to remember and trust the brand.

× Especially when I'm using Facebook and other social media platform platforms, I often say many advertisements on different, uh, things.

✓ Especially when I'm using Facebook and other social media platforms, I often see many advertisements about different things.

The noun 'platform' should be plural 'platforms' to match 'other social media'. The verb 'say' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'see' when referring to viewing advertisements. 'On different, uh, things' is awkward; use 'about different things' to indicate topics or items. Suggestions: use plural nouns to match context, choose verbs that match the action (see for viewing), and use 'about' to indicate subject matter.

× I also believe they populate the advertisements based on our search history.

✓ I also believe they populate advertisements based on our search history.

The phrase 'the advertisements' suggests specific adverts already known; 'advertisements' without 'the' is more natural here to speak generally. Removing 'the' makes the sentence more idiomatic. Suggestion: omit unnecessary definite articles when speaking about adverts in general.

× To be honest, I do not recall such an advertisement. However, there were advertisement on the TV I still remember on snacks and child, uh, stories.

✓ To be honest, I do not recall any particular advertisement. However, I still remember some advertisements on TV about snacks and children's stories.

'Such an advertisement' is okay but 'any particular advertisement' is clearer. 'There were advertisement' is incorrect: 'advertisement' needs plural 'advertisements' and 'on the TV' is better as 'on TV'. 'child, uh, stories' should be 'children's stories' to show possession. Suggestions: use plural form for multiple adverts, use 'on TV' for general medium, and use possessive form for 'children's'.

× I occasionally see such advertisements as, for example, I see posters placed on the outside of trams and buses, but I haven't seen advertisements on trains.

✓ I occasionally see such advertisements; for example, I see posters on the outside of trams and buses, but I haven't seen advertisements inside trains.

The sentence had redundancy and slight preposition issues. 'On the outside of' can be shortened to 'on the outside of' or simply 'on'. Also 'on trains' is ambiguous; 'inside trains' is clearer. Suggestions: remove redundancy, choose precise prepositions like 'inside' or 'on the outside of' to indicate location.

× Actually, I think it's a good way to. Advertise and market products or services.

✓ Actually, I think it's a good way to advertise and market products or services.

The sentence is incorrectly split, creating a fragment 'Advertise and market products or services.' It should be a single sentence. Suggestions: keep infinitive phrase 'to advertise' attached to 'a good way to' without breaking the sentence.

× Well, I do not prefer watching advertisements mainly because usually they interrupt our favorite TV shows or movies.

✓ Well, I do not prefer watching advertisements, mainly because they usually interrupt our favorite TV shows or movies.

Word order is slightly off: 'mainly because usually they interrupt' should be 'mainly because they usually interrupt'. Also add a comma for clarity. Suggestions: place adverbs ('usually') close to the verb they modify and use commas to separate clauses.

× So I usually skip advertisements if possible or else I scroll through my phone whenever there's an advertisement displaying on the TV or Internet.

✓ So I usually skip advertisements if possible, or I scroll through my phone whenever there's an advertisement on TV or the Internet.

'Displaying on the TV or Internet' is wordy and awkward; use 'on TV or the Internet'. Also 'or else I scroll' is informal; 'or I scroll' is smoother. Suggestions: simplify participial phrases and prefer concise prepositional phrases 'on TV' and 'on the Internet'.

× Personally, I prefer advertisements which are creative and convey something important while promoting their products or services.

✓ Personally, I prefer advertisements that are creative and convey something important while promoting products or services.

Use 'that' (or 'which' in restrictive clauses) is acceptable; changing 'their products or services' to 'products or services' avoids unclear reference for 'their'. Suggestions: remove ambiguous possessive pronouns when the owner is unclear.

× For example, I have seen Youtubers who use new, innovative and attractive way to ways to promote youth advertisements as a platform.

✓ For example, I have seen YouTubers who use new, innovative and attractive ways to promote products or advertise on their platform.

Multiple errors: 'Youtubers' should be 'YouTubers' (capitalization), 'use ... way to ways to' is confused; use plural 'ways' to match 'use'. 'Promote youth advertisements' is unclear and likely wrong; intended meaning is 'promote products' or 'advertise on their platform'. Suggestions: ensure verb-noun agreement ('use ways'), choose clear objects ('promote products' or 'advertise'), and avoid redundant phrases.