Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 答えは直接的で内容も分かりやすいですが、文法ミス（時制や冠詞）、冗長表現、語彙の誤用が見られます。また、詳細や理由がもう少しあると説得力が増します。改善点：1) 文法を整える（例："when I was a child"、"it looked"）。2) トピック文の後に理由や具体例を1〜2文で付け、接続詞（because, so, for example）を使う。3) 語彙を少し広げて"game advertisement"→"video game commercials"など自然な表現にする。

예시: When I was a child, I was impressed by video game commercials for titles like Mario Kart and Super Mario Brothers because the ads showed exciting races and colorful characters. For example, one commercial had fast-paced music and bright graphics, which made me really want to play the game.

제안: 答えは肯定で始まり良いですが、文法と語順の誤り、冗長な部分、具体性の欠如があります。改善点：1) 不要な接続詞を減らす（"and" の多用を避ける）。2) 文法を修正（"on trains and other transport"→"on trains and other forms of transport"、"I want to get those items"→"I want to buy them"）。3) 1〜2つの具体例（どんな広告が目につくか）を加える。

예시: Yes, I see a lot of advertising on trains and other forms of transport, such as buses and taxis. Many of the ads promote mobile apps and local shops, and their bright designs often catch my attention so I sometimes decide to visit the advertised store.

제안: 答えは単純で繰り返しが目立ちます（"TV"の重複など）。理由が弱く具体性に欠けます。改善点：1) トピック文を明確にし、具体的な理由を1〜2文で述べる（例えば、情報を得られる、面白い演出がある等）。2) 繰り返しを避け、接続詞を自然に使う。3) 時制と語法を正す。

예시: Yes, I like some advertisements because they can be informative and entertaining. For example, TV commercials often use humor or memorable jingles, which makes it easier for me to remember a brand.

제안: 答えは種類を述べている点は良いですが、文法ミス（"I want to these clothes"）と表現の自然さに欠けます。改善点：1) 自然な語彙に置き換える（"clothes advertising"→"fashion ads"）。2) 理由を具体化する（どの要素が"stylish"なのか）。3) 例や個人的な経験を加える。

예시: I prefer fashion advertisements because they often feature stylish outfits and attractive styling ideas. For instance, an ad that shows how to mix different pieces can inspire me to try a new look.

제안: 内容は明確で具体例（ソーシャルメディアや化粧品）もあり良いですが、文法（名詞の複数形、冠詞）、言い回しの自然さを改善できます。改善点：1) 複数形・冠詞を正す（"advertisements"、"on social media"）。2) 接続詞を使い、頻度や影響について詳細を加える。3) 具体的なプラットフォームやどのように表示されるかを一言添える。

예시: Yes, I often see advertisements on my smartphone and computer, especially on social media platforms like Instagram. Many of these ads promote cosmetic products with short videos or sponsored posts, and they sometimes influence me to check the product reviews.

× Well, when I was child I was impressed by game advertisement such as Mario Kart and Super Mario Brothers.

✓ Well, when I was a child I was impressed by game advertisements such as Mario Kart and Super Mario Brothers.

The sentence needs the article 'a' before 'child' and the plural form 'advertisements' to match 'game' in general. Use simple past 'was impressed' is correct for a past situation. Suggestion: include 'a' for singular count nouns and pluralize 'advertisement' when referring to multiple ads.

× It looks looked very interesting and I wanted to gain that game.

✓ They looked very interesting and I wanted to get those games.

'It looks looked' mixes present and past; choose past 'looked' to match 'was impressed'. 'Advertisement(s)' are plural, so use 'they'. 'Gain that game' is unnatural; use 'get' and plural 'those games' or 'that game' depending on reference. Suggestion: maintain consistent tense and use natural verb 'get' for obtaining items.

× Yes, every day I see a lot of advertising on trains and other transport such as taxis and buses.

✓ Yes, every day I see a lot of advertising on trains and other transport such as taxis and buses.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; present simple is appropriate for habitual actions. No change needed.

× And it is the advertisements are very interesting, so I want to get that items.

✓ The advertisements are very interesting, so I want to get those items.

Remove redundant 'it is'. Use plural demonstrative 'those' to match plural 'items'. 'Get' is fine. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary filler phrases and ensure demonstratives agree in number with nouns.

× Yes, I do because they are very interesting.

✓ Yes, I do because they are very interesting.

This sentence is correct; present simple expresses a general preference. No change needed.

× For example, when I watched TV, I usually see commercials on TV.

✓ For example, when I watch TV, I usually see commercials.

Mixing past 'watched' with habitual 'usually see' creates tense inconsistency. Use present simple 'watch' for habitual actions. Also avoid repeating 'on TV'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent for habitual statements.

× Well, my favorite advertising is clothes advertising because it looks very stylish and I feel I want to these clothes.

✓ Well, my favorite advertisements are clothing ads because they look very stylish and I feel I want these clothes.

Use plural 'advertisements' or 'ads' and 'clothing' as adjective. 'It looks' should be 'they look' to match plural. Remove unnecessary 'I feel' or place it correctly: 'I feel that I want these clothes' or simply 'I want these clothes.' Suggestion: ensure subject and verb agree in number and word order is natural.

× Yes, I often see advertisement when I use my smartphone or computer.

✓ Yes, I often see advertisements when I use my smartphone or computer.

Use plural 'advertisements' to refer to ads in general. Also add 's' to 'advertisement' for countability in this context. Suggestion: pluralize countable nouns when speaking generally.

× Especially when I see social media, I often see advertisements such as cosmetic items.

✓ Especially on social media, I often see advertisements for cosmetic items.

Use preposition 'on' with 'social media'. Use 'advertisements for' to indicate what the ads promote. Suggestion: learn common preposition collocations (on social media, advertisements for).