Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and clarity: use correct tense and subject-verb agreement, and make the answer more concise with a clear topic sentence and one specific detail. Add a linking word to show contrast or result. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

예시: A memorable advertisement from my childhood was for instant noodles. It showed a poor family struggling until the noodles gave them comfort and hope, so the ad felt emotional and uplifting. Because of its strong story and music, I still remember it clearly.

제안: Make the response more natural and fix phrasing errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific reason and a linking word. Avoid vague words like “virtually” when you mean “visually.”

예시: Yes, I often see many advertisements when I travel on the BTS, especially inside the carriages. For example, I usually read them to pass the time because they are visually appealing and easy to understand.

제안: Be concise and use more precise vocabulary. Give a clear topic sentence, then one brief specific example with a linking word. Avoid repetition (e.g., 'entertain' used twice).

예시: Yes, I enjoy advertisements because they entertain me while I wait. For instance, if I have to wait an hour for my mother, I read ads on the wall or my phone to keep myself occupied.

제안: Clarify vocabulary (use 'humour' or 'humorous' instead of 'rumour' if you mean funny) and correct grammar (agreement and verb forms). Provide one clear reason and an example. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I prefer advertisements that are humorous and have catchy music because they are memorable. For example, a funny TV commercial with a strong jingle stayed in my mind for weeks.

제안: Correct collocations and word choice (e.g., 'advertisements', 'skip mode'), and make sentences natural and concise. Use a linking word to connect the example to the main point.

예시: Yes, I often see advertisements on my phone. For example, YouTube ads usually play before videos, so I frequently press the skip button to avoid watching them for too long.

× 'One of the most impressive advertisement that I have ever was when I were a child is an instant noodle advertisement.'

✓ 'One of the most impressive advertisements that I have ever seen from when I was a child is an instant noodle advertisement.'

'Subject-verb agreement and noun number: "advertisement" should be plural after "one of the". Tense and verb form: "have ever was" is incorrect; use present perfect 'have ever seen' or simple past 'I saw'. Pronoun/verb agreement: use 'I was' not 'I were'. Keep reference to childhood clear with "from when I was a child" or "when I was a child".'

× 'In this advertisement it tell it tells the story about the kids and their mother who have been living a poor living condition.'

✓ 'In this advertisement it tells the story of a family with a mother and children who were living in poor conditions.'

'Third person singular verb: use "tells" for "it". Preposition and noun choice: say "tells the story of" rather than "about". Collocation: "poor living condition" should be plural and expressed as "poor conditions" or "a poor living situation". Past tense "were living" fits the narrative context.'

× 'However, with this instant noodle it helped them overcome their poverty.'

✓ 'However, this instant noodle helped them overcome their poverty.'

'Word order and tense: remove unnecessary "it" after the subject; use simple past "helped" to match the previous past narrative. Also definite article: "this instant noodle" is acceptable if referring to the product in the ad.'

× 'Yes, I frequently see many advertisements when I travel by the BTS, especially inside the carriage.'

✓ 'Yes, I frequently see many advertisements when I travel on the BTS, especially inside the carriages.'

'Preposition: use "on" for trains or transit systems (on the BTS). Number agreement: "carriage" should be plural if speaking generally; "carriages" or "inside the carriage" if referring to a single carriage. Also "many advertisements" is okay.'

× 'This is why remember, I will look at those advertisements to pass the time because they are virtually appealing and easy to read.'

✓ 'This is why, I remember, I look at those advertisements to pass the time because they are visually appealing and easy to read.'

'Sentence structure and adverb choice: word order was awkward; place "I remember" in a parenthetical position or omit it. "Virtually appealing" is incorrect; use "visually appealing". Tense: use present simple "I look" for habitual action rather than future "I will look" when describing a usual behavior.'

× 'Of course, I like the advertisement a lot.'

✓ 'Of course, I like advertisements a lot.'

Article/number error: use plural "advertisements" when speaking generally rather than singular with an article. If singular intended, use "the advertisement" only when referring to a specific ad previously mentioned.'

× 'This is because it entertains me when I want to pass my time effectively.'

✓ 'This is because they entertain me when I want to pass the time.'

'Pronoun and verb agreement: refer back to "advertisements" with plural pronoun "they" and plural verb "entertain". "Pass my time effectively" is wordy; "pass the time" is the common idiom.'

× 'For example, if I have to wait for my mom for one hour, I will definitely look at the advertisement to entertain myself.'

✓ 'For example, if I have to wait for my mom for an hour, I will definitely look at advertisements to entertain myself.'

Article and number: use "an hour" not "one hour" for natural phrasing. Use plural "advertisements" for general behavior. Tense and conditional structure are correct (first conditional) so keep "will".'

× 'To be honest, I like the advertisement that contain a lot of rumour and catchy music.'

✓ 'To be honest, I like advertisements that contain a lot of humor and catchy music.'

'Number and agreement: "advertisement that contain" should be "advertisements that contain". Word choice: "rumour" is inappropriate contextually; likely intended "humor" (or "dramatic elements"). Also ensure spelling matches variety of English; here use "humor" (US) or "humour" (UK) consistently.'

× 'This is because it would be very visually appealing and it also entertain me at the same time.'

✓ 'This is because they are very visually appealing and they also entertain me at the same time.'

'Subject-verb agreement and pronoun: match plural "advertisements" with plural pronoun "they" and plural verb "entertain". Modal "would" changed to present "are" to state a general fact about ads.'

× 'Of course, I always see many advertisement when I'm on my phone.'

✓ 'Of course, I always see many advertisements when I'm on my phone.'

Article/number error: use plural "advertisements" instead of singular "advertisement" when speaking generally.'

× 'For example, when I open the YouTube application, it will pop up immediately after I play the video.'

✓ 'For example, when I open the YouTube app, ads pop up immediately after I start a video.'

Tense and natural phrasing: use present simple "ads pop up" for habitual actions rather than future "it will pop up". Use "start a video" or "play the video" consistently. Use plural "ads" and natural term "app".'

× 'This is why I have to play the skip model in order to avoid watching it for a long time.'

✓ 'This is why I have to press the skip button in order to avoid watching them for a long time.'

'Word choice and sentence structure: "play the skip model" is incorrect; use "press the skip button" or "click skip". Pronoun agreement: refer to "ads" with "them". Maintain infinitive purpose phrase "in order to avoid watching them for a long time".'