Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the ad, then give one or two specific details (why it impressed you) using linking words. Reduce hesitations and filler words, and correct small grammar (e.g., "a soap" → "a soap commercial", "very female actors" → "many female actors").

예시: A soap commercial impressed me as a child. It was very famous in my country because many well-known female actors appeared in it, and the ad emphasized how their faces glowed after using the product. As a result, I remember the music and the bright visuals, which made the commercial unforgettable.

제안: Begin with a direct answer, then provide a concise reason and one supporting detail. Avoid repetition and filler words. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to make the connection clear.

예시: Not really — I haven't seen many ads on trains or buses recently because I rarely use public transport. I usually travel by my own car, so I don't notice advertising in buses or trains.

제안: Answer directly and give one clear reason with a brief example. Remove fillers and finish your sentence. Use a linking word such as "because" or "for example" and avoid colloquial contractions to sound more fluent.

예시: I don't really like advertisements because they interrupt what I'm watching. For example, YouTube ads often start unexpectedly, which I find frustrating since I don't subscribe to YouTube Premium to remove them.

제안: Provide a focused response: state your preference, then explain with one specific reason or comparison. Avoid repeating the same point and correct grammar ("couldn't fast-forward" and avoid capitalizing mid-sentence).

예시: I generally dislike advertisements because they interrupt TV programmes and used to be unavoidable when I was a child. Back then, we couldn't fast-forward ads, so they felt more intrusive than they do now.

제안: Keep the answer direct and add one specific detail about frequency or type of ads. Use one linking phrase like "for example" and avoid repeating synonyms (frustrating and annoying).

예시: Yes, I see ads often on my phone and computer, especially on YouTube and news websites. For example, video ads sometimes play before my videos, which interrupts my experience and is quite frustrating.

× Yes, definitely there was this, uh, one ad, uh, about a soap little and it was really famous in our country because most very female umm actors used to play this ad and they used to show the glow up on their face and.

✓ Yes, definitely there was one ad about a small soap, and it was really famous in our country because many female actors used to appear in it and they used to show the glow on their faces.

Errors: awkward 'there was this, uh, one ad' and 'soap little' misuse of adjective order and article; 'most very female' incorrect quantifier and word order; 'actors used to play this ad' wrong verb choice; 'glow up on their face' incorrect phrase and singular/plural mismatch. Suggestion: use 'there was one ad' for existence, 'a small soap' (article + adjective + noun), 'many female actors' (correct quantifier), 'appear in it' (correct collocation), and 'glow on their faces' (correct noun phrase and plural agreement).

× Not really, I think it's been very long time since I have, uh, seen any advertisements on trains or buses.

✓ Not really, I think it has been a very long time since I saw any advertisements on trains or buses.

Errors: 'it's been very long time' missing article 'a'; tense consistency: use 'has been ... since I saw' or 'since I have seen' but common idiom is 'since I saw'. Suggestion: add 'a' and use consistent past simple after 'since' for a finished time reference: 'since I saw'. Also remove filler words.

× But I usually don't travel through train or buses.

✓ But I usually don't travel by train or bus.

Errors: incorrect preposition 'through' and incorrect pluralization 'train or buses'. Suggestion: use 'by' for transport methods and pair singular/plural correctly: 'train or bus' or 'trains or buses'; 'by train or bus' is idiomatic.

× I have a personal transport and that's how I go there.

✓ I have my own vehicle, and that's how I get around.

Errors: 'a personal transport' is non-idiomatic and lacks possessive pronoun; 'go there' vague. Suggestion: use 'my own vehicle' or 'personal car', and 'get around' or 'go there' depending on meaning; ensure correct pronouns and natural collocation.

× To be honest, I think, uh, they're just waste of time and they're really annoying because, uh, sometimes when I watch YouTube then suddenly the ad pops up.

✓ To be honest, I think they're just a waste of time and they're really annoying because sometimes, when I watch YouTube, an ad suddenly pops up.

Errors: missing article 'a' before 'waste of time'; awkward placement of 'then' and punctuation. Suggestion: include 'a', place commas correctly, and use 'an ad suddenly pops up' for natural word order.

× So it really it is frustrating because I don't wanna pay for uh, YouTube premium and watch without.

✓ So it is really frustrating because I don't want to pay for YouTube Premium to watch without ads.

Errors: redundant 'it really it is', informal 'wanna', missing object 'ads' after 'watch without'. Suggestion: use 'I don't want' and complete the phrase 'watch without ads' and capitalize 'YouTube Premium' as a proper noun in formal correction.

× I don't like any kind of advertisements.

✓ I don't like any kind of advertisement.

Errors: 'advertisements' is acceptable but with 'any kind of' singular 'advertisement' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'any kind of advertisement' or 'any advertisements' depending on nuance; keep consistency.

× I have never been a fan of them.

✓ I have never been a fan of them.

No grammatical error according to list; sentence is correct as present perfect to describe a life experience. No change needed.

× But as a child, we used to watch TV a lot.

✓ But as a child, I used to watch TV a lot.

Errors: pronoun mismatch: speaking for personal experience but using 'we' can be fine; if referring to self, use 'I used to'. Suggestion: use 'I used to' for personal habit in the past. This falls under past tense usage and pronoun choice.

× Then there were many advertisements coming those days because we can't Fast forward the ad ads at that time on TV.

✓ There used to be many advertisements in those days because we couldn't fast-forward the ads on TV at that time.

Errors: 'coming those days' awkward; incorrect tense/mood 'can't' should be 'couldn't' for past ability; 'Fast forward' capitalization wrong; duplicate 'ad ads'. Suggestion: use 'used to be' for past habitual state, 'couldn't fast-forward the ads', and correct word order.

× So I didn't like it.

✓ So I didn't like them.

Errors: pronoun number mismatch: antecedent 'advertisements' is plural so use 'them'. Suggestion: ensure pronoun agrees in number with its antecedent.

× Definitely. Especially when I use YouTube or any website, suddenly those ads pop up on my screen and interrupt my experience and that's really frustrating and annoying.

✓ Definitely. Especially when I use YouTube or any website, ads suddenly pop up on my screen and interrupt my experience, which is really frustrating and annoying.

Errors: word order 'suddenly those ads pop up' is acceptable but improved to 'ads suddenly pop up'; redundancy 'really frustrating and annoying' is stylistic. Suggestion: reorder for flow and use 'which is' to connect clauses smoothly.