Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and organized: start with a clear topic sentence saying whether an ad impressed you, then give one specific example with brief details. Use correct tense and avoid repetition. Use linking words (for example, because, so) properly and keep it to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes. One advertisement that impressed me as a child was a poster for an exam results workshop at the local bazaar. I often saw it when I visited the bazaar, and because the poster showed successful students, it motivated me to study harder. For example, after seeing that ad I started revising earlier and my grades improved.

제안: Answer directly and give a clear, specific example. Correct grammar (plural/singular, prepositions) and avoid unclear numbers or phrases. Use linking words like because and for example to connect ideas, and keep the answer concise.

예시: Yes, I often see advertisements on trains and buses because these vehicles carry many passengers between cities. For example, last month I travelled to a neighboring country and noticed large posters and audio ads promoting a tourist service, which showed how common transport advertising is.

제안: Be clear about your opinion: say yes or no and then give one or two concise reasons with concrete wording. Avoid filler words (uh, um) and vague phrases. Use precise vocabulary to explain whether ads are useful or not and provide a short example or result.

예시: I have mixed feelings about advertisements. On one hand some ads are useful because they inform me about new products; on the other hand many ads are expensive and feel misleading. For example, I saw a gadget ad that promised features it did not have, so I stopped trusting similar ads.

제안: State the type you prefer clearly, then give specific reasons and an example. Use concise, correct sentences and relevant vocabulary (social media, targeted, mobile users). Avoid repetition and unclear phrases.

예시: I prefer social media advertising because most people use smartphones and ads there can be tailored to my interests. For example, I often see short video ads on Instagram that recommend products similar to things I have searched for, which makes them more useful to me.

제안: Give a direct answer, then add specific frequency and examples. Use correct collocations (see ads, a lot, many ads, plenty of ads) and avoid repeating words. Mention platforms and typical ad types briefly.

예시: Yes, I see many advertisements on my phone and computer every day. For instance, when I watch YouTube I often have to watch one or two video ads before my video plays, and I also see sponsored posts on social media throughout the day.

× Yes, advertisement made a very impression only when I was at a child because when whenever I go to their bazaar, there is a lot of advertisement and I just attract to see the advertisement.

✓ Yes, an advertisement made a very strong impression on me when I was a child because whenever I went to the bazaar, there were a lot of advertisements and I was attracted to them.

Singular and plural errors: 'advertisement' should be 'an advertisement' (singular with article) or plural; 'a very impression' should be 'a very strong impression'; 'at a child' is incorrect; use 'a child' or 'when I was a child'; tense consistency: 'when I was a child' with past tense 'went' and 'were'; 'there is a lot of advertisement' should be 'there were a lot of advertisements' (plural and past); 'I just attract to see' should be 'I was attracted to them'. Suggestion: use correct articles, plural forms for countable nouns, and keep past tense consistent for past events.

× For example when I saw the advertisement of the result, so I also have the ability to achieve the good marks.

✓ For example, when I saw that advertisement, I also felt I had the ability to achieve good marks.

Present tense issue and sentence structure: 'so I also have the ability' mixes past event with present tense; change to past 'felt I had'. Also 'the advertisement of the result' is unclear; 'that advertisement' is clearer. Remove unnecessary articles: 'good marks' (not 'the good marks'). Suggestion: keep tense consistent and choose clear noun phrases.

× Yes, I see a lot of advertisement on transport because in transport a lot of people are travel to 170 city to another city.

✓ Yes, I see a lot of advertisements on public transport because many people travel from one city to another by transport.

Preposition and plural errors: 'on transport' is better as 'on public transport' or 'in transport'; 'a lot of people are travel to 170 city to another city' is ungrammatical—use 'many people travel from one city to another'. Use plural 'advertisements'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions ('on' or 'in' with 'transport') and standard expressions for movement between cities.

× So most of the people are preferred to advertising through the transport.

✓ So most people prefer advertising on transport.

Pronoun and verb form: 'are preferred to' is passive and incorrect here; use active 'prefer'. 'Most of the people' can be simplified to 'most people'. Use 'on transport' or 'on public transport'. Suggestion: choose active voice and correct verb forms after subject.

× For example, last month when I was when I go to their second country, then uh, one man advertised here.

✓ For example, last month when I went to a neighboring country, one man advertised something there.

Past tense and sentence structure: 'when I was when I go' is mixed tenses—use past 'when I went'. 'Their second country' is unclear; 'a neighboring country' or 'another country' is better. 'One man advertised here' should be 'one man advertised something there' for clarity. Suggestion: use simple past for past events and clearer nouns.

× Uh, well, I like advertisement, but most of the time I don't uh, have any, uh, like to advertisement because, uh, the, uh, most of the people just spend a lot of uh, money on the advertisement and it not give you any overcome.

✓ Well, I like advertisements, but most of the time I don't like most advertisements because most people spend a lot of money on advertising and it does not help you overcome problems.

Pronoun and verb errors: 'I don't have any, like to advertisement' is incorrect—use 'I don't like most advertisements'. Use plural 'advertisements' and uncountable 'advertising'. 'It not give you any overcome' is ungrammatical: use 'it does not help you overcome problems'. Suggestion: simplify structure, use correct verb forms and collocations ('help you overcome').

× So, uh, I think so that, uh, most of the time advertisement just give you, uh, proper money and proper.

✓ So I think that most of the time advertisements only give you monetary benefits or seem superficial.

Adjective/adverb and sentence structure: 'advertisement just give you proper money and proper' is ungrammatical and unclear. Use plural 'advertisements' and correct verb agreement 'give' -> 'give' with plural but better 'only give you monetary benefits' or 'seem superficial'. Suggestion: express the intended meaning clearly (money-oriented or superficial) and use appropriate nouns/adjectives.

× Well, I like the kind of advertisement that is advertised through the social media because I believe that now the time most of people are used just the mobile phone and on the mobile phone a lot of people see the different advertisement.

✓ Well, I like advertisements on social media because nowadays most people use mobile phones and see many different advertisements on them.

Preposition and verb form: 'advertised through the social media' is wordy—use 'on social media'. 'Now the time' should be 'nowadays' or 'these days'. 'Most of people are used just the mobile phone' should be 'most people use mobile phones'. 'See the different advertisement' -> 'see many different advertisements'. Suggestion: use concise expressions like 'on social media' and correct present tense 'use'.

× For example, we can see that the branding address branding just advertised through.

✓ For example, we can see that brands are advertised through social media.

Sentence structure: original is ungrammatical and repetitive. Use 'brands are advertised through social media' or 'branding is done through social media'. Ensure subject and verb present. Suggestion: avoid repetition and complete the prepositional phrase.

× Yes, I see the advertisement when I I use my phone.

✓ Yes, I see advertisements when I use my phone.

Tense and plurality: remove duplicate 'I' and use plural 'advertisements' for general habit. Present simple 'see' is correct for habits. Suggestion: proofread for repetition and use plural for countable habitual occurrences.

× Most of the time I just see the advertisement a lot of in one day because everyone just advertised their company and brand.

✓ Most of the time I see a lot of advertisements in one day because many companies advertise their brands.

Quantifier and word order: 'see the advertisement a lot of in one day' is awkward—use 'see a lot of advertisements in one day'. 'Everyone just advertised their company and brand' should be 'many companies advertise their brands' or 'many people advertise their companies'. Suggestion: correct placement of quantifiers and choose accurate subjects.

× And a lot of the time when I use the YouTube there is a plenty of advertisement.

✓ And a lot of the time when I use YouTube there are plenty of advertisements.

Quantifier and subject-verb agreement: 'a plenty of' is incorrect—use 'plenty of' and with countable noun 'advertisements'. 'There is' should be 'there are' for plural. Remove 'the' before 'YouTube'. Suggestion: use 'plenty of' and correct agreement with plural nouns.