Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevap daha doğal ve net bir konu cümlesi ile başlamalı; gereksiz tekrarlar ve duraksamalar azaltılmalı. Ayrıca destekleyici detaylar (neyi hatırladığınız, neden etkileyici olduğu, hangi unsurların hoşunuza gittiği gibi) bağlaçlarla mantıksal sırada verilmeli. Cümle sayısı 3-4 arası tutulmalı ve dil bilgisi ("I was impressed by", "on television") düzeltilmeli.

예시: I was impressed by the Algida commercials on television when I was a child because they were colourful and playful. For example, the ads featured cheerful music and cartoon characters that made me laugh. This made the brand memorable and made me ask my parents to buy the ice cream.

제안: Cevap doğrudan ve net olmalı; gereksiz detaylardan kaçınılmalı ve nedenini açıklayan bir neden cümlesi eklenmeli. Mantıksal bağlaçlar (e.g., "because", "so") kullanılmalı ve zaman/yer ifadeleri doğru olmalı ("on the train", "to Ankara").

예시: Yes, I often see advertisements on trains, such as posters and small screens. However, I usually don't pay much attention to them because I'm focused on my phone or reading. Sometimes I notice interesting ads if they have bright colours or moving images.

제안: Cevap karışık ve belirsiz; doğrudan görüşünüzü açık bir konu cümlesiyle belirtin ve ardından nedeni basit, mantıklı adımlarla açıklayın. Karmaşık ifadeler yerine net kelimeler kullanın ve gereksiz jargondan kaçının ("reorganize your vibes" gibi).

예시: Yes, I like some advertisements because they can be creative and memorable. For instance, a good ad can show how a product helps people or tells a short story, which makes me remember the brand. However, I dislike misleading ads.

제안: Cevap net ama kısa ve tekrarlı; daha fazla özgül detay ve örnek verin (hangi reklam kampanyasını sevdiğiniz, neden — duygusal bağ, müzik, tema). Bağlaçlarla cümlenizi genişletin ve gereksiz duraksamaları kaldırın.

예시: I particularly like Coca‑Cola advertisements because they often focus on happiness and togetherness. For example, their holiday ads use warm music and family scenes which create a positive feeling and make the brand familiar worldwide.

제안: Cevap açık ama dilbilgisi hataları ve tekrarlardan arındırılmalı. Durumu açıklayan örnek verin (pop‑ups, banners, videos) ve hislerinizi kısa ve doğru ifadelerle belirtin ("I feel annoyed" yerine "I feel uncomfortable" ya da "annoyed").

예시: Yes, I often see ads on my phone and computer, especially when I install a new app. Pop‑ups and full‑screen video adverts appear and I usually close them because they are annoying and interrupt what I'm doing.

× Actually, I impressed by the Cafe Algida advertisements in, uh, television.

✓ Actually, I was impressed by the Cafe Algida advertisements on television.

The student omitted the auxiliary 'was' needed for the past passive construction and used incorrect preposition 'in' instead of 'on' for television. Use 'was impressed' for passive past and 'on television' for broadcasts.

× But why I impressed by?

✓ But why was I impressed?

Question word order is incorrect. In past simple passive questions, the auxiliary 'was' must precede the subject: 'Why was I impressed?'.

× Because, uh. I am. I was having fun with this advertisement because it's a childish advertisement.

✓ Because I enjoyed that advertisement; it was childish and fun.

Fragmented sentences and tense inconsistency. 'I was having fun with this advertisement' is awkward; 'I enjoyed that advertisement' is a clearer simple past. Also 'it's a childish advertisement' should match past context: 'it was childish and fun.'

× Yes, when I went to Ankara with my train in train including advertisements with a mini television, but I didn't realize how they are because I really didn't care.

✓ Yes, when I went to Ankara by train there were advertisements on small televisions, but I didn't pay attention to them because I really didn't care.

Multiple errors: preposition/use of transport ('by train'), 'in train' incorrect, and 'there were' is needed to state existence (There be issue). Also 'didn't realize how they are' is wrong structure; 'didn't pay attention to them' fits context. Adjusted verb forms to past simple.

× Yes, because it said marketing strategy and if you want to become an idol, then you become a adult in your future you need to reorganize your vibes to the public and. Rebuilds.

✓ Yes, because it showed a marketing strategy, and if you want to become an idol in the future you need to adjust your public image and rebuild it.

Incorrect verb forms and awkward phrasing. 'It said marketing strategy' should be 'it showed a marketing strategy'. 'Become a adult' should be 'become an adult' and 'reorganize your vibes to the public' is unnatural; use 'adjust your public image'. 'Rebuilds' is incorrect form; use 'rebuild it.'

× I like especially Coca-Cola advertising because they are, uh, most well known. Uh, brands in the world. So they are.

✓ I especially like Coca-Cola advertising because it is one of the most well-known brands in the world.

Coca-Cola as a brand is referred to as 'it' (singular), not 'they'. 'Most well known' needs articles and hyphenation: 'one of the most well-known brands.' Removed redundant sentence 'So they are.'

× Yes, especially when I loaded my phone a new application, there are a lot of advertising advertisements appearing in my phone and then I had to close because I really discomfort about.

✓ Yes, especially when I download a new application on my phone, a lot of advertisements appear and I have to close them because they make me uncomfortable.

Tense and form errors: 'loaded my phone a new application' should be 'download a new application on my phone' (present habitual). Use present simple 'advertisements appear' for general truth. 'I had to close' -> 'I have to close them' for habitual action. 'I really discomfort about' is ungrammatical; use 'they make me uncomfortable.'