Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 答えをもっと明確で簡潔にまとめ、文法の誤りと語順を直してください。話の構成はトピック文（印象に残った広告の紹介）→具体的な理由（なぜ印象的だったか、スローガンやビジュアルなど）→短い結論、の順にし、接続詞（for example, because, so）を適切に使って流れを良くしましょう。発音や語彙はシンプルで正確な表現を心掛け、日本語での例：子供の頃、Jr. Tokaiの広告が印象的だった。スローガンが覚えやすく、ビジュアルが強かった、など。

예시: When I was in elementary school, one JR Tokai advertisement impressed me. The catchy slogan “Kyoto Nico” was easy to remember, and the bright visuals made it stand out. Because of these features, I still remember the ad today.

제안: 文法と語彙の誤り（commuting の誤用、displayやpostureの不適切な使用）を直し、具体例を明確に述べてください。構造は短い主文（はい、よく見ます）→詳細（通勤中、車両内部の広告、ポスター、ラッピング広告など）→一例で終える。接続詞（for example, such as）を入れて流れを良くすること。

예시: Yes, I do. When I'm commuting I often see many advertisements on trains, such as posters on the walls and full-carriage wraps. For example, last week I saw a large poster for a music festival near the door.

제안: 論理は悪くないですが文法と語彙を正しく使い、具体例を明確にしてください。主文（はい、好きです）→理由（新商品や情報を知る手段だから）→具体例（スナック広告を見て新商品を知った、味や値段を比較した、など）という構成を守ってください。

예시: Yes, I do. Advertisements help me discover new products and trends. For example, I once learned about a new snack from a TV ad and decided to try it because it looked interesting and affordable.

제안: 意味は通じますが表現を自然にして、文法と語順を正してください。好みを述べる主文→理由（ターゲット性やインタラクティブ性）→具体例（YouTubeのゲーム広告を見て試す、短時間で楽しめる、など）を使い、接続語（because, for example, so）を活用してください。

예시: I prefer social media ads, especially interactive game ads, because they are engaging and often let you try a demo. For example, during breaks I sometimes click a YouTube ad to play a short game.

제안: 文を簡潔にまとめ、文法（時制、動詞の使い方）と語順を正してください。構造は肯定文→頻度や状況の説明（スマホでよく見かける、アプリや動画の途中で表示される）→具体例（ドラマの次の話を見るために短い広告を見る必要がある）を明確に。接続語（for example, when）を使って流れを良くすること。

예시: Yes, I do. I often see many ads on my phone. For example, when I try to watch the next episode of a drama, I sometimes have to watch a short video ad before it starts.

× Yes, when I was in elementary school, I saw the advertisement of Jr. Tokai for a first time and I was surprised because the slogan which is so the Kyoto Nico is easy to memory.

✓ Yes, when I was in elementary school, I saw Jr. Tokai's advertisement for the first time and I was surprised because the slogan "so the Kyoto Nico" was easy to remember.

The sentence has errors in past tense consistency and phrase choice. Use 'for the first time' (fixed article order) and 'was' to keep past tense consistent. 'Easy to memory' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'easy to remember'. Also use possessive form 'Jr. Tokai's advertisement'. Suggestions: maintain past tense for verbs describing past events, use correct fixed expressions (for the first time), and use 'remember' rather than 'memory'.

× Yes, I do. When I'm committing, I usually see a lot of advertisement on the train.

✓ Yes, I do. When I'm commuting, I usually see a lot of advertisements on the train.

'Committing' is incorrect; the intended verb is 'commuting' (present participle of commute). Also 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to match 'a lot of'. Suggest practicing common -ing forms and matching plural nouns with quantifiers like 'a lot of'.

× For example, there is a lot of display for advertisement or posture on the train.

✓ For example, there are a lot of displays for advertisements or posters on the train.

Subject-verb agreement and article/noun form errors: 'there is' should be 'there are' for plural 'a lot of displays'. 'Display for advertisement or posture' is incorrect word choice; likely 'displays for advertisements or posters'. Use plural nouns and correct word 'poster'.

× Yes I do, because advertisements help me learn about new things.

✓ Yes, I do, because advertisements help me learn about new things.

This sentence is already correct in present tense; no grammatical correction needed. Keep present simple for general truths and habits.

× For example when I saw the advertisement of snack, I can know a lot of sno kind of snacks.

✓ For example, when I see a snack advertisement, I can learn about many kinds of snacks.

Tense inconsistency and word choice: use present tense 'see' to match 'can', or change 'can' to 'could' if keeping past. 'Advertisement of snack' should be 'snack advertisement'. 'I can know' is unnatural; use 'I can learn about'. 'A lot of sno kind of' should be 'many kinds of'. Suggestions: keep tense consistent, use 'learn about', and use 'many kinds of' for variety.

× I like social media advertisements, particularly game style advertisement for example.

✓ I like social media advertisements, particularly game-style advertisements, for example.

Use hyphen in compound adjective 'game-style' and plural 'advertisements' to match context. Add commas for clarity. Preposition 'for example' works but should be set off; ensure adjective-noun agreement.

× When I see YouTube I play the game over advertisement during break.

✓ When I watch YouTube during a break, I play the game shown in advertisements.

Original sentence has incorrect verb choices and word order. 'See YouTube' should be 'watch YouTube'. 'Play the game over advertisement' is unclear; likely 'play the game shown in advertisements'. Also place time phrase 'during a break' appropriately. Suggest using 'watch', 'shown in', and proper placement of time expressions.

× Yes I do. I usually see a lot of advertisement on my phone.

✓ Yes, I do. I usually see a lot of advertisements on my phone.

Pluralization: 'a lot of' requires plural noun 'advertisements'. Present tense 'see' is appropriate for habitual actions.

× For example when I want to see next next story of drama, I had to see show watch short video about advertisement.

✓ For example, when I want to see the next episode of a drama, I have to watch a short advertisement video.

Multiple issues: incorrect phrase 'next next story of drama' should be 'the next episode of a drama'. Tense inconsistency: 'I had to see show watch' is wrong; for present habit use 'I have to watch'. Word order fixed to 'watch a short advertisement video'. Suggestions: use 'episode' for TV dramas, maintain tense, and use correct word order for watching videos.