Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 在回答中要更直接地回应问题并组织句子结构，减少停顿和填充词（如“uh”，“mmm”）。使用清晰的主题句并用两到三句具体细节支持，例如描述广告中歌手的外观、动作、以及为什么歌词和旋律令人印象深刻。同时注意语法和单复数的一致性，控制在不超过5句内。

예시: Yes. One advertisement that impressed me as a child was for A lollipop. It featured a boy band who sang catchy songs and performed colorful dances while tasting the lollipops. The upbeat melody and memorable lyrics made the ad very appealing to me and stuck in my mind.

제안: 回答要更连贯并使用连接词，例如先给出总体肯定，然后列举具体例子。减少重复词和停顿，注意词汇准确（例如“back of the seats”, “posters”或“stickers”）。可补充一两条具体地点或形式以丰富内容，但总句数不超过5句。

예시: Yes, I do. I often see advertisements on public transport, especially on the back of seats in buses and trains. There are also posters and stickers in subway carriages, and sometimes adverts on digital screens near the doors.

제안: 提高表达的准确性和流畅性，避免重复和填充词。先给出简洁观点，再用一两条具体理由支持，例如广告如何帮助小品牌提高知名度和销售，并用连词（because, so, therefore）连接句子。注意词汇搭配（promote → advertise/promote awareness; popularization → awareness）。

예시: Yes, I do. I think advertisements are useful because they raise awareness of products. For small brands especially, ads can introduce their products to more people and help increase sales.

제안: 回答需更加具体并修正语法错误。先用一句话说明偏好类型（例如celebrity endorsements or star-studded ads），然后解释为什么喜欢（吸引力、可信度等），并给出一两个例子。保持句子简洁并用连接词使逻辑清楚。

예시: I prefer advertisements that feature celebrities or well-known actors. Seeing a familiar face makes the ad more attractive and believable, and it often encourages me to try the product.

제안: 回答内容不错，有个人观点和具体情境。但要减少口头语并更流畅地表达原因。开头直接肯定，然后说明具体问题（如弹窗广告在开车时会跳转、分心），并适当给出结果或建议。保持不超过5句。

예시: Yes, I see them often and I find some intrusive ads dangerous. For example, when I'm using a map on my phone while cycling or driving, full-screen ads can suddenly open other apps and distract me. Because of this safety risk, I dislike those kinds of advertisements.

× they are boys and they singing songs and dances and take some actions uh, about in the advertisement and they are tasted lollipops.

✓ they are boys and they sing songs and dance and take some actions in the advertisement and they taste lollipops.

原句中“they singing”应使用动词原形或第三人称复数形式“sing”，而不是现在分词“singing”；同样“dances”作为动词时应为“dance”。此外“are tasted lollipops”被动形式不合语境，应使用主动“they taste lollipops”。建议：描述习惯或同时发生的动作时，用一般现在时（主语为复数）如“they sing, they dance”。

× Always give me a the most impression.

✓ They always give me the most impression.

原句中“a the most impression”同时使用了不定冠词和定冠词，且搭配不合。可改为“They always give me the strongest impression”或“They always impress me the most”。建议：不要同时使用两个冠词，根据语境选用“the”或不使用冠词，并用合适的名词短语（如“strongest impression”）。

× they are tasted lollipops.

✓ they taste lollipops.

原句使用“tasted”及被动结构与语境不符。这里想表达“他们尝/吃棒棒糖”，应用主动动词“taste”。建议：表达动作执行者时使用主动语态和动词原形或时态形式。

× Back of the chairs, like a bus or the train.

✓ on the back of the seats, like on a bus or a train.

原句中介词和名词单复数及冠词使用不当。应使用“on the back of the seats”或“on the backs of seats”，并用“on a bus or a train”。建议：固定搭配为“on the back of”或“on the backs of”，并注意冠词与可数名词的一致性。

× Or, uh, some. Stick sticks in the subway.

✓ Or, uh, some stick-on ads in the subway.

原句“Stick sticks”不自然且“in the subway”可接受但“stick-on ads”更贴切。建议：用常见的广告词汇如“stick-on ads”或“posters”并放在合适位置。

× I think it's a good way to, uh, promote the popularization of their products and. Especially and it can widen their. Knowledge, especially some very small brand, can lead more people to know their products to increase their uh. Sale.

✓ I think it's a good way to promote their products and especially it can raise awareness of them. Especially for very small brands, it can lead more people to know their products and increase their sales.

原句存在冠词、断句、不连贯和可数名词复数形式错误。应使用“raise awareness”而不是“widen their knowledge”，并把“brand”复数化为“brands”，“sale”改为复数“sales”。建议：用常见表达“raise awareness”，注意句子连接与名词复数形式。

× maybe has so many actors or actress that I whose I like and they uh, SH show their face or end products.

✓ maybe has so many actors or actresses that I like and they show their faces or endorse the products.

原句中“actors or actress”性别和数不一致，应为“actors or actresses”；“that I whose I like”语序错误且冗余，改为“that I like”；“end products”应为“endorse the products”。建议：注意代词与关系词的位置，使用正确动词“endorse”。

× Do you often see advertisements when you are on your phone or computer? ... if I need a map, uh, I will, uh, uh, TR open my apps, but at that time there will be a very big advertisement and turn to another apps.

✓ if I need a map, I open my apps, but at that time there is a very big advertisement that redirects me to another app.

原句时态与习惯动作不一致。描述常发生的事情应使用一般现在时，如“I open my apps”。“will”在此不合适且“turn to another apps”语法错误，应为“redirects me to another app”并注意“app”单数形式。建议：描述经常发生的情况用一般现在时，注意动词单复数和被动/主动结构。