Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 注意语法和用词准确性，避免重复与冗长。回答要有清晰的主题句，随后用一到两个具体细节支持。比如修正时态和主谓一致（advertisement has left → advertisements left / has left），以及纠正不恰当词汇（depression → impression）。同时用连词保持衔接，控制在不超过5句。

예시: Yes. When I was a child, a colorful advertisement for a Thai restaurant left a strong impression on me. The vivid images of food and bright colors made the dishes look exquisite, so I remember craving Thai food for weeks. Even now I still enjoy Thai flavors because of that ad.

제안: 要先给直接回答（主题句），然后用具体原因和例子支持。注意语法（there are sort of people → many people / 'can can' 去重），以及使用连接词使逻辑更连贯。句子尽量简洁，不要重复。

예시: Yes, there is a lot of advertising on trains and other transport. Because many people use public transport daily, ads on subways reach a large audience. For example, companies often place full-carriage posters to increase exposure during rush hour.

제안: 表达要更明确并避免重复。先给明确立场（Yes/No/It depends），然后说明原因并举例。注意词汇搭配（feature creativity / inspire me in other ways / Apple ads），语法（they're really creates → they really create）。控制句数并使用连接词。

예시: I like high-quality advertisements because they are creative and memorable. Creative ads often inspire new ideas or make me laugh; for example, Apple's commercials create a smart and stylish image that stays with viewers.

제안: 先直接回答喜欢哪类广告，然后用具体例子和结果说明影响。修正重复词与不自然表达（busy education → basic education），并提高连贯性（使用because / so）。保持句子简短有力。

예시: I prefer charity advertisements because they highlight important social issues. For example, a campaign about improving rural education showed how donations provide basic school supplies, which moved me and motivated me to volunteer.

제안: 回答要更流畅并注意语法（ads appear / advertisers want / websites）。给出一两个具体平台作为例子并说明原因或影响。合并碎片句为完整句，避免断裂。

예시: Yes, I see ads almost every day on my phone and computer because advertisers want to reach a wider audience. For example, platforms like WeChat, WhatsApp and Weibo frequently show banners and video ads when I open apps or browse websites.

× Well, when I was a child, advertisement about a Thai restaurant have left very deep impression for me and until today I really enjoy the flavor of the Thai food.

✓ Well, when I was a child, an advertisement about a Thai restaurant left a very deep impression on me, and even today I still really enjoy the flavor of Thai food.

错误类型：可数名词单复数和冠词使用。句中 advertisement 应为可数名词，表示“（一则）广告”，前面需加不定冠词 an；动词 have left 与主语不一致且时态不当，应使用过去时 left；短语 leave an impression on sb.。建议：遇到可数单数名词时加 a/an，描述过去发生且对现在仍有影响的事件可用过去时并加表示持续的副词（even today / still）。

× The picture on the advertisement is really appealing and it has a bright color and seems to be really exquisite so.

✓ The picture in the advertisement is really appealing; it has bright colors and seems quite exquisite.

错误类型：冠词和介词使用不当。常用搭配是 picture in the advertisement 而非 on the advertisement（两者可用但 in 更自然）；bright color 应为复数 bright colors 或者用 a bright color 指一类颜色；句末多余的 so 不恰当。建议：注意固定搭配和单复数一致，句子间可用分号或连词清晰连接。

× It's has left a very depression for me.

✓ It has left a very deep impression on me.

错误类型：形容词/名词使用错误和结构错误。原句用 depression（名词，意为抑郁）不符合语境，应使用印象 impression；且多余的 it's 与 has 连用错误，正确为 It has left ... 或 It left ...。建议：区分 impression 和 depression，避免多余助词，注意固定搭配 leave an impression on someone。

× Plenty of advertising on trains, especially on subways and this is mainly because there are sort of people use the public transport every day.

✓ There is plenty of advertising on trains, especially on subways, and this is mainly because many people use public transport every day.

错误类型：句子结构和数量表达错误。原句缺少系动词（there is），advertising 作不可数或复数时表达为 plenty of advertising 或 many advertisements；there are sort of people 使用不自然，应为 many people 或 a lot of people。建议：表示存在时用 There is/are；表达大量人时用 many/a lot of people；注意名词可数性。

× The advertisements can can expose to more people if they are in the public places.

✓ Advertisements can be exposed to more people if they are placed in public places.

错误类型：动词的被动/现在分词使用不当。原句重复 can can，且 expose 用法不正确，应使用 be exposed to 表示被更多人看到，或者 use active form "advertisements can reach more people"。建议：检查重复词，选择主动或被动结构时注意动词形式。

× Well, maybe I like the advertisements with a higher quality.

✓ Well, maybe I like advertisements of higher quality.

错误类型：冠词/定冠词使用不当。a higher quality 前面不需要不定冠词 a，且常用 of higher quality 或 higher-quality advertisements（连字符）表述。建议：学习形容词短语修饰名词的固定搭配。

× This this advertisement always features with the creativity.

✓ This advertisement always features creativity.

错误类型：代词冗余和介词误用。重复的 this this 应删除；feature 用法为 "feature something"，不需要 with。建议：注意不要重复词语，熟悉动词搭配。

× This can inspire me to sing with another way.

✓ This can inspire me in another way.

错误类型：副词/介词短语使用不当。表达“以另一种方式激励我”应为 inspire me in another way 或 inspire me to sing in a different way，而不是 sing with another way。建议：使用固定搭配 in another way / in a different way。

× And to be honest, watching this advertisement is really funny, such as some companies published by the Apple company.

✓ And to be honest, watching these advertisements is really enjoyable, such as those published by Apple.

错误类型：形容词选择与被动短语使用错误。funny 常表示滑稽而非令人愉快，better 用 enjoyable；some companies published by the Apple company 结构错误，应为 advertisements published by Apple 或 those published by Apple。建议：选择合适形容词（enjoyable, entertaining），简化被动短语。

× They're really creates a very intelligent image for the audience.

✓ They really create a very intelligent image for the audience.

错误类型：主谓一致。主语 They（复数）后应接动词原形 create，而不是 creates（第三人称单数）。建议：注意主语为复数时动词不加 s。

× I always like the advertising published by the charities and for example, a an very meaningful advertising is about helping the education in rural areas and this can help more and more children in the in the in that areas to receive busy education.

✓ I always like advertisements published by charities; for example, a very meaningful advertisement is about supporting education in rural areas, and this can help more and more children in those areas receive proper education.

错误类型：冠词和重复词、词汇选择问题。the advertising 应为复数 advertisements 或者 advertising without article；a an 重复且错误；helping the education 用法不自然，应为 supporting education 或 improving education；in the in the in that areas 有重复，且 busy education 用词错误，应用 proper/quality education。建议：注意冠词使用，删除重复词，选择恰当词汇（supporting, proper education），保持地区指代一致（those areas）。

× Such meaningful things really motivate me, really moved me.

✓ Such meaningful things really motivate me and really move me.

错误类型：时态不一致。前半 use present tense motivate，后半 moved 为过去式，语境应保持现在时态表示持续影响，改为 move me 或 really move me. 建议：保持句子内部时态一致，若表达持续感受使用现在时。

× Yes, I see ads almost every day as often appear when I open apps and the website because advertiser want to reach diverse and larger audience to increase the product exposure.

✓ Yes, I see ads almost every day; they often appear when I open apps and websites because advertisers want to reach a diverse and larger audience to increase product exposure.

错误类型：冠词、主谓一致与句子结构问题。原句缺主语（as often appear），应加 they；the website 改为 websites（复数）或 a website；advertiser 应为 advertisers（复数）与主语一致；a diverse and larger audience 需要不定冠词 a；product exposure 不加 the 更自然。建议：补全主语，注意单复数和冠词，用并列结构分句更清晰。

× For example social media such as WeChat and WhatsApp or even Weibo of local Chinese. Social media platform.

✓ For example, social media such as WeChat, WhatsApp, or even local Chinese platforms like Weibo.

错误类型：句子碎片与结构不完整。原句断裂为片段（Social media platform.），应合并为完整短语并调整词序，Weibo 是本地平台的例子，不应说 Weibo of local Chinese。建议：避免句子碎片，使用完整并列结构并把例子放在后面。