Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: まず、簡潔で明確な主題文を作ること。回答は5文以内にまとめ、文法と語彙の誤りを直すこと。具体的な詳細（いつ、どのキャラクター、どんな場面が印象的だったか）を論理的な接続語（for example, because, so）でつなぐと自然になる。発音や単語選択（e.g. ‘advertisement’, ‘chocolate’, ‘character’, ‘catchy’）を正しく使う練習をすること。

예시: Yes. One advertisement that impressed me as a child was a chocolate commercial featuring a funny cartoon character. I liked it because the character’s antics and the catchy song made me laugh and remember the brand. For example, the character would dance and hide the chocolate, which made the commercial very memorable. Because of that ad, I wanted to try the chocolate and asked my parents to buy it.

제안: 主題文で直接質問に答え、次に具体例を述べる。語彙の誤用（high claims, foster, uniforms）を避け、正しい語を使う（posters, near the doors, local events, screens）。接続語（for example, usually, often）で文をつなぎ、明確な描写を加えると説得力が増す。

예시: Yes, I see a lot of advertising on trains and buses. They are usually posters or digital screens placed near the doors, so people notice them when boarding. For example, I often see posters for local events and large digital ads on commuter trains when I travel to work.

제안: まず肯定/否定で簡潔に答え、その後理由を一つか二つ挙げる。'advertisement'は複数形や不可算を意識し、文法（they interrupt me / they interrupt what I'm doing）を正す。具体例（どんなとき有用か）を加えると良い。

예시: Generally, I don't like advertisements because they are often annoying and interrupt what I'm doing. However, they can be useful when I want to learn about sales or new products, for example when an app announces a special discount.

제안: 直接質問に答えてから理由と具体例を述べる。冗長や繰り返しを避け、文をつなぐ接続語（because, so, for example）を正しく使う。語彙では 'short online videos', 'memorable', 'share with friends' などを使うと自然。

예시: I prefer short online video ads because they are usually funny and quick, so they don't waste my time. For example, last month I saw a short YouTube ad that made me laugh and I shared it with my friends because it was memorable.

제안: まず簡潔に頻度を述べ、その後具体的な状況を説明する。文法（I often see advertisements when I use my phone; short videos show up; they remind me）と語順を正す。理由や結果（they make me remember or I click them）を具体的に述べると良い。

예시: Yes, I often see advertisements when I use my phone. For instance, while watching YouTube videos short ads sometimes appear, and if an ad is funny or interesting it often makes me remember the brand or even click the link.

× Well yes, I remember on advertisement for chocolates now it showed a funny part to talk to.

✓ Well yes, I remember an advertisement for chocolates that showed a funny scene.

The original sentence has incorrect preposition use and unclear structure. Use the indefinite article 'an' before a singular countable noun (article error), replace 'on advertisement' with 'an advertisement', and change 'it showed a funny part to talk to' to 'that showed a funny scene' to make the relative clause correct and the meaning clear. Suggestion: use 'an' with singular countable nouns and form relative clauses with 'that' or 'which'. ID:26

× Hitting the snug and making everyone laugh as a song was really shotsy.

✓ The characters were hitting a snug object and making everyone laugh with a song; it was really silly.

The original sentence uses unclear noun phrases and a nonstandard adjective 'shotsy'. Replace vague or incorrect pronouns/phrases with clear nouns and correct adjectives. Use plural verb 'were' to agree with plural subject 'characters'. Suggestion: identify the subject clearly and choose appropriate adjectives (e.g. 'silly'). ID:12

× I remember it because I love the character and the music and I wanted to try Snapchat their eyes so.

✓ I remember it because I loved the characters and the music, and I wanted to try to catch their attention.

Original mixes tenses and uses incorrect verb phrase 'try Snapchat their eyes so' which is ungrammatical. Change to past tense 'loved' to match 'remember', plural 'characters', and replace with correct infinitive phrase 'try to catch their attention'. Suggestion: keep consistent tense and use correct verb patterns ('try to' + verb). ID:6

× Yes, I see a lot of other high claims on trains and buses.

✓ Yes, I see a lot of other bold claims on trains and buses.

The adjective 'high' is incorrect collocationally with 'claims'. Use an appropriate adjective like 'bold' or 'exaggerated'. Suggestion: choose adjectives that collocate naturally with the noun. ID:13

× They are usually posters and ridiculously near the door and they often show ads for points or a local event.

✓ They are usually posters placed right next to the doors, and they often advertise points or local events.

Original structure is awkward ('ridiculously near the door') and ambiguous ('show ads for points'). Rephrase to clear passive/adjective placement and make nouns plural as needed. Suggestion: place adverb/adjective close to the word it modifies and use plural nouns for general statements. ID:26

× For example, I often notice a big foster or the screen for the uniforms when I go to work.

✓ For example, I often notice a big poster or the screen displaying advertisements for uniforms when I go to work.

'Foster' is incorrect; likely meant 'poster'. Also 'the screen for the uniforms' is unclear—add a verb 'displaying' to show function. Suggestion: choose correct nouns and add verbs to clarify the relationship. ID:26

× Well, I don't like advertisement, they are often annoying and interrupt what I'm doing, but sometimes they are useful because I can learn about it.

✓ Well, I don't like advertisements; they are often annoying and interrupt what I'm doing, but sometimes they are useful because I can learn about things from them.

'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' or preceded by an article. Also 'learn about it' is vague and mismatches plural subject. Use 'things from them' or 'about products/services' to be clear. Suggestion: match singular/plural and referents (pronouns) correctly. ID:22

× Well I like short online videos I they are usually funny and quick so I don't mind watching them and sometimes they make me remind the the brand.

✓ Well, I like short online videos; they are usually funny and quick, so I don't mind watching them, and sometimes they make me remember the brand.

Original has fused sentences and incorrect verb 'make me remind the brand'. Use 'make me remember the brand'. Also remove accidental extra 'the'. Suggestion: separate clauses with proper punctuation and use correct verb patterns ('make someone do something' + base verb or 'remind someone of' + noun). ID:26

× For example I saw a short YouTube last month and that made me laugh and I told my friends about it.

✓ For example, I saw a short YouTube video last month that made me laugh, and I told my friends about it.

Missing noun 'video' after 'YouTube' and comma placement. Tense is correct (past). Add the word 'video' for clarity. Suggestion: include necessary nouns and use commas to separate clauses. ID:5

× Yes, I often see advertisement when I use on my phone.

✓ Yes, I often see advertisements when I use my phone.

Use plural 'advertisements' for general statements and remove the unnecessary preposition 'on' after 'use'. Suggestion: 'use my phone' is correct; ensure articles and prepositions are used properly. ID:22

× Sometimes I watch YouTube video on my phone, some short video shows up and sometimes it's remind me because it's a short video is funny, so sometimes I thought it to.

✓ Sometimes I watch YouTube videos on my phone; a short video will show up, and sometimes it reminds me because the short video is funny, so sometimes I think about it.

Multiple errors: missing plural forms, awkward clause 'it's remind me', incorrect tense and pronoun usage. Rephrase to correct subject-verb agreement ('it reminds me'), use future/ habitual 'will show up' or 'shows up', and 'think about it' instead of 'thought it to'. Suggestion: keep consistent tense/aspect and use correct verb forms and prepositions. ID:26