Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (tense and article use) and avoid redundancy.

예시: Yes. One advertisement that stuck with me was for a family computer. It showed children and parents playing games together, which made the computer seem fun and family-friendly, so I really wanted one.

제안: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and use linking words (however, for example). Fix grammar (prepositions, articles) and avoid repetition. Be specific about examples and keep to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I see a lot of advertising on public transport in Japan. For example, trains and buses often display posters and even short videos on screens; however, in Australia I rarely see ads on trains, which I find quite surprising.

제안: Give a clear opinion then support it with two concise reasons using linking words (because, although). Avoid filler words and correct word forms (advertisements, enjoyable → enjoy).

예시: Yes, I like advertisements because they can be entertaining and I sometimes discover useful products. Although some ads are disruptive, overall I enjoy them because they catch my attention and give me ideas.

제안: Be specific about what you mean by "movie advertisement" and link ideas. Use correct plurals and concise structure: state preference, give reason and an example. Avoid hesitations like "uh" and filler words.

예시: I prefer video ads for movies because they show trailers and key scenes that attract me. For example, when I browse the internet, short movie trailers often convince me to watch a new film.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and one specific detail about frequency or type, using linking words (for example, often, sometimes). Correct singular/plural and expand slightly to show range of vocabulary.

예시: Yes, I often see advertisements on my phone and computer, usually as short video clips or pop-ups. For example, I frequently encounter 15–30 second ads before online videos, and sometimes they give me useful information about sales or apps.

× When I was a child, the advertisement of a family computer is very attractive because it looks very interesting and I really want to find the computer to enjoy these games.

✓ When I was a child, the advertisement for a family computer was very attractive because it looked very interesting and I really wanted to get the computer to enjoy those games.

Tense inconsistency: the sentence refers to childhood (past), so present-tense verbs 'is' and 'want' should be past ('was', 'wanted'). Use 'for' instead of 'of' for advertisements that promote something. Use 'get' or 'find' depending on meaning; 'get' fits desire to obtain. Use 'those games' to refer back to games mentioned.

× Yes, in Japan I can see a lot of advertising a train or buses.

✓ Yes, in Japan I can see a lot of advertising on trains or buses.

Missing preposition and article: use 'on' to indicate location ('on trains or buses'). Also 'a train or buses' mixes singular and plural; use plural 'trains or buses' or 'a train or a bus'. Replace 'advertising a' with 'advertising on'.

× I recently I can enjoy even a movie on the trains.

✓ Recently I could even enjoy a movie on the trains.

Tense and word order: 'recently' with past experience should use past tense 'could'. Remove duplicate 'I'. Use 'a movie' for a single film and 'on the trains' is acceptable if referring to train services; adjust to past tense for consistency.

× Or in Australia it is very rare in public transport like trains I can see no advertising.

✓ But in Australia it is very rare to see advertising on public transport like trains.

Awkward structure and word order: use 'to see advertising' (infinitive) and place 'on public transport' before example 'like trains'. 'I can see no advertising' is unidiomatic here; use 'it is very rare to see advertising'.

× The difference is interesting.

✓ The difference is interesting.

This sentence is grammatical; no correction needed. It is kept for clarity.

× Yes, I like advertisement because it's attractive and it also makes me enjoyable and some and sometimes I can get very useful information by advertisement, although sometimes they are disruptive, but basically I can enjoy them.

✓ Yes, I like advertisements because they are attractive and they also make me enjoy them, and sometimes I can get very useful information from advertisements; although sometimes they are disruptive, I basically enjoy them.

Pluralization and article use: use plural 'advertisements' when speaking generally. Pronoun agreement: 'they' for plural. 'Make me enjoyable' is incorrect; use 'make me enjoy them' or 'I enjoy them'. Use 'from advertisements' as the common preposition. Remove redundant conjunctions and fix punctuation for clarity.

× I really like movie advertisement.

✓ I really like movie advertisements.

Count noun and article/plural: 'movie advertisement' should be plural 'movie advertisements' when speaking generally, or 'a movie advertisement' for one. Use plural to match context.

× Uh, when I'm searching some information on the Internet, I can see these type of advertisement.

✓ Uh, when I'm searching for information on the Internet, I can see these types of advertisements.

Preposition and noun form: use 'searching for information' not 'searching information'. 'These type' should be plural 'these types' and 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to agree. Also use present continuous appropriately.

× It's very attractive.

✓ It's very attractive.

This sentence is correct; no change needed.

× And yeah, sometimes I can get a useful information from these type of advertisement.

✓ And yeah, sometimes I can get useful information from these types of advertisements.

'Information' is uncountable and should not use 'a'. Use 'useful information'. 'These type' should be 'these types' and 'advertisement' plural 'advertisements' to match.

× Yes, I often see advertisement when I use my smartphone or computer.

✓ Yes, I often see advertisements when I use my smartphone or computer.

Use plural 'advertisements' for general statements. Alternatively 'an advertisement' could be used for singular occurrences. Agreement between noun and general context is required.

× It's a very short movie.

✓ They are usually very short videos.

'A very short movie' is awkward for online ads; 'video' is more natural and plural 'they are' matches 'advertisements'. Adjust to plural to match previous sentence.

× Then sometimes I can get useful information from these advertisements.

✓ Sometimes I can get useful information from these advertisements.

The original sentence is acceptable; removing 'Then' improves flow. No tense change needed. Kept as present simple to state a general truth.