Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence naming one memorable ad, then give 1–2 concrete details about it (what was shown, why it impressed you). Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid filler words like "uh". Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

예시: A memorable advertisement from my childhood was a TV commercial for a colorful sneaker brand. The ad showed children running and dancing in bright shoes with catchy music, which made the shoes look fun and desirable. Because of the music and lively scenes, I wanted those shoes and remembered the ad for years.

제안: Answer directly and describe specific examples you see on transport (posters, wraps, digital screens). Use linking words like "for example" or "for instance" and add one reason why they are common. Avoid vague phrases and filler sounds.

예시: Yes, I often see many advertisements on trains and buses. For example, there are full-car wraps promoting mobile apps and posters for local restaurants on station platforms. These ads are common because public transport reaches many commuters every day.

제안: Give a clear opinion first (yes/no/depends) and then explain with a specific criterion (content, usefulness, creativity). Use a linking phrase like "because" and give a short personal reason or example. Keep sentences concise and natural.

예시: I sometimes like advertisements, but it depends on their content. I like creative ads for fashion because they show styling ideas and inspire me, but I dislike intrusive pop-up ads that interrupt my browsing.

제안: Be concise and precise: name the type you like and explain why with 1–2 specific points (e.g., visuals, ideas, inspiration). Avoid unclear phrases and repetition. Use linking words like "because" or "because of" and provide an example of an ad feature you enjoy.

예시: I prefer fashion advertising because it often uses strong visuals and styling ideas. For example, a fashion ad that shows different outfit combinations helps me imagine how to wear the clothes in real life.

제안: Give a direct answer and add one or two specific details about where and how you see ads online (social media, apps, video pre-roll). Mention whether they are memorable or annoying and why. Use linking words and avoid vague language.

예시: Yes, I often see advertisements on my phone and computer, especially on social media apps and streaming sites. For instance, short video ads before YouTube videos are memorable because of catchy music, but banner ads can be annoying when they cover the screen.

× When I was a child, I saw too much advertisers in TV shows, Billy boards and TV commercials.

✓ When I was a child, I saw too many advertisers in TV shows, billboards, and TV commercials.

Use 'too many' with countable nouns like 'advertisers' (plural). Also correct spelling 'billboards' and add commas for lists. Use parallel nouns for clarity.

× It was related, uh, in daily lives about uh, trendy fashion, etcetera.

✓ They were related to daily life and to trendy fashion, etc.

Original sentence lacks clear subject and uses incorrect preposition 'in' with 'related'. Use plural 'They' to refer to advertisements and 'related to' is the correct preposition. 'Daily life' is singular idiomatic phrase.

× Uh, the most attractive ad I remember.

✓ Uh, that was the most attractive ad I remember.

Original is a sentence fragment missing a verb. Adding 'that was' supplies a verb and completes the sentence.

× Advertisers can appear everywhere, especially on trains and transport.

✓ Advertisements can appear everywhere, especially on trains and other forms of transport.

Use 'advertisements' (more accurate) and 'on trains' but 'on transport' is unnatural; use 'other forms of transport' or 'other transport'. Also 'appear' is fine but 'advertisements' fits better.

× Nowadays it seems a lot in that occasion.

✓ Nowadays there seem to be a lot of them in those situations.

Original has unnatural structure and incorrect dummy subject. Use 'there seem to be' to indicate existence and 'them' to refer to advertisements; 'those situations' matches meaning.

× So in transport when I travel, it has a colorful and, uh, about.

✓ So when I travel on public transport, the ads are often colorful and eye-catching.

Original lacks clear subject and predicate and ends abruptly. Use 'ads are often' as subject-verb and provide appropriate adjective 'eye-catching' to complete thought.

× It depends on the advertisement and type.

✓ It depends on the advertisement and the type.

Definite article 'the' is needed before 'type' to refer to a specific category. Alternatively 'on the advertisement and its type' could be used.

× That is, for example, if the advertisers tend to advert for a product that is a best seller or for fashion.

✓ For example, if advertisers tend to advertise a product that is a bestseller or fashion items.

Use correct verb 'advertise' instead of 'advert' (verb). 'A bestseller' or 'bestseller' is one word; adjust noun phrase 'fashion items' for clarity. Remove unnecessary articles.

× I would say it's about fashion because due to the fact I am a person that I I have strengthened about this and advertisers that.

✓ I would say I like fashion advertising because I have developed a strong interest in fashion and in those ads.

Original has redundant pronouns and awkward phrasing 'strengthened about this'. Use clear pronoun references and proper verb 'developed a strong interest' to express idea. Remove duplicate 'I'.

× Nowadays they can be everywhere, in my, in our phone, in computer or even though TV commercial.

✓ Nowadays they can be everywhere: on my phone, on our computers, or even on TV commercials.

Use preposition 'on' for phones, computers, and TV commercials. 'In my' is incomplete and 'even though' is incorrect here; use 'even on'.

× So of course that I see in phone also there are more memorable.

✓ So of course I see them on my phone, and those ads are often more memorable.

Original mixes clauses incorrectly. Use clear subject 'I' with verb 'see' and refer to 'them' (ads). Rearrange to state that such ads are more memorable.