Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答结构不够清晰，句子含糊且有较多填充词（umm, so），信息不完整。建议先一句直接回答问题，然后用1-2句具体说明为什么印象深刻（如广告内容、画面、音乐或人物），并避免重复和多余停顿。可以在句子间使用连词（because, so, which）让表达更连贯。

예시: Yes. One childhood advertisement that stuck with me was for a supplement called Nor Baiji. It showed a kind elderly couple doing lively activities, and the cheerful jingle made the ad very memorable, so I remember it even now.

제안: 回答直接但不够精炼，存在重复和口头语。建议用一到两句明确描述广告的频率和位置，并用具体例子或对比说明（e.g. types of ads, reasons why they are common). 使用连词（for example, such as, because）提升条理性。

예시: Yes, I see a lot of advertising on public transport. For example, on the subway this morning I noticed a large poster for an insurance company, and there are usually many ads for banks, mobile phones and local services on trains and stations.

제안: 情感表达明确，但语言啰嗦且语法不完整。建议用一两句清楚表述观点并给出具体原因和例子，避免重复和多余停顿。可加入对比或替代方案（e.g. paid ad-free services）使回答更丰富。

예시: No, I generally dislike advertisements because they interrupt videos and movies. For instance, when I start a film online I often have to wait through a 30-second ad, which I find annoying and a waste of time.

제안: 回答有明确偏好但不够具体，句子未完成且用词重复。建议先肯定立场，再具体说明喜欢哪类广告并给出原因（例如视觉效果、拍摄手法或创意），最好提供一两个细节或例子。避免句子中断及填充词。

예시: Although I usually dislike ads, I prefer food commercials because they often use close-up shots and bright colors that make the dishes look appetizing. For example, a pizza ad that shows cheese stretching can make me want to try the product.

제안: 回答内容明确但重复多且句子不完整。建议简洁说明频率并列举具体类型的广告，同时可以解释为什么（targeted ads, apps, websites），用一两句总结影响或感受。去掉多余的感叹和填充词以提高流畅度。

예시: Yes, I see advertisements all the time on my phone and computer. They appear in apps and websites, and I often get ads for food, health products and mobile apps because online platforms target users based on their interests.

× Well, in fact when I was a child I didn't pay much attention to advertisements, but I think there is one that UMM is part of my core childhood memory.

✓ Well, in fact, when I was a child I didn't pay much attention to advertisements, but I think one of them is part of my core childhood memories.

句子结构不清晰：原句中“there is one that UMM is part of my core childhood memory”语序和搭配错误。应把“one of them”置于主语位置，并将“memory”改为复数“memories”以符合习惯表达。另外在“in fact”后加逗号使句子更流畅。建议：把从句重组为更自然的英语表达。

× So that advertisement was about a supplement for older people called nor Baiji.

✓ That advertisement was about a supplement for older people called Nor Baiji.

句子结构与专有名词书写：原句开头不需要“So”，直接陈述更简洁；广告名称作为专有名词应大写首字母并连贯写法。建议：直接用简单陈述句并正确书写专有名词。

× So the the literally the advertisement was saying not.

✓ Literally, the advertisement said nothing (or: the advertisement's message was unclear).

句子结构和用词混乱：原句重复“the the”且“was saying not”不符合英语表达。可改为“the advertisement said nothing”或更明确地说明信息不清。建议：避免重复词，使用正确的动词短语表达意思。

× I, I would say I dislike advertisement umm, I even find them to be very, very annoying, especially when I'm trying to uh watch the videos or watch the movies and there's always, there is always an advertisement before uh, the movie officially begins.

✓ I would say I dislike advertisements. I even find them very, very annoying, especially when I'm trying to watch videos or movies and there is always an advertisement before the movie officially begins.

冠词与单复数：在谈论广告的泛指时应使用复数“advertisements”。此外重复和赘述需删去；“watch the videos or watch the movies”可合并为“watch videos or movies”。建议：使用复数形式表示泛指，删去不必要重复。

× So I find that quite annoying and time and it's.

✓ So I find that quite annoying and a waste of time.

句子结构错误与不完整：原句末尾“and time and it's”碎片化，意义不完整。可用固定搭配“a waste of time”表达“浪费时间”的意思。建议：使用完整的短语替换残缺的成分。

× No, I, I would say I dislike advertisement umm, I even find them to be very, very annoying, especially when I'm trying to uh watch the videos or watch the movies and there's always, there is always an advertisement before uh, the movie officially begins.

✓ No, I would say I dislike advertisements.

冠词与单复数：在这里应使用复数“advertisements”来表达泛指，不需重复冗长表述。建议：简化句子并使用正确的数形式。

× Well I just said that I dislike advertisement but I mean if I have to choose one umm I love advertisement made by food companies because I mean they always make the food look so delicious umm well actually doing umm seeing those food displaying on my.

✓ Well, I just said that I dislike advertisements, but if I had to choose one type, I like advertisements made by food companies because they always make the food look so delicious. Actually, I enjoy seeing those food displays on my screen.

句子结构混乱、断句不当和单复数错误：原句有重复、未完结的分句以及“advertisement”应为复数，“doing umm seeing those food displaying on my”不完整且语法错误。改为清晰的几个句子，并将“food displays”替代不规范表达。建议：分句表达完整思想，使用复数，补全被截断的短语。

× especially when I'm trying to uh watch the videos or watch the movies and there's always, there is always an advertisement before uh, the movie officially begins.

✓ especially when I'm trying to watch videos or movies and there is always an advertisement before the movie officially begins.

动词形式与并列简化：原句中“trying to uh watch”可简化为“trying to watch”，不改变时态或意义；并列项使用动词不定式一致更好。建议：保持动词形式一致并删除多余填充词。

× Umm, I think I just saw the advertisement for the insurance company this morning when I took the subway.

✓ I think I saw an advertisement for an insurance company this morning when I took the subway.

句子结构与冠词：用“I think I saw”更自然；“the advertisement for the insurance company”改为“不特指”时用不定冠词“an”。建议：根据语境使用不定冠词并去掉多余语气词。

× Oh my God, always, I always see a lot of advertisement on my phone and on my computer.

✓ Oh my God, I always see a lot of advertisements on my phone and on my computer.

冠词与单复数：应使用“advertisements”复数形式来表示泛指的多个广告。建议：使用复数形式并删除不必要的重复“always, I always”。