Art— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and incorrect tense/grammar. Use linking words (for example, because, so, and) correctly and keep to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I love drawing. It is my main hobby because it helps me relax and forget about daily worries. For example, when I sketch landscapes I feel peaceful and completely absorbed in my imagination.

제안: Answer directly with a clear statement, then give a specific reason or example. Avoid vague or incorrect words (e.g., “admit the time”); choose precise vocabulary (e.g., appreciate, enjoy). Keep to 2–3 sentences and use a linking word such as because or so.

예시: Yes, I enjoy going to galleries when I have time. I like them because I can appreciate the quality of the artwork and the atmosphere, and I often get new ideas for my own drawings.

제안: Give a clear affirmative/negative response, then explain with specific, well-structured reasons. Avoid repetitive phrasing and improve grammar (e.g., “art appears in every era” not “as is appear”). Use linking words (because, since, therefore) and one concrete example or area you want to study.

예시: Yes, I would like to learn more about art because it appears in every era and reflects people's lives and values. For instance, I want to study modern art to understand how artists express social issues today.

제안: Start with a clear past-tense sentence and include specific details (ages, duration, reason). Correct grammar for past tense and avoid fillers like “like.” Use linking words (but, because) to show cause. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, my parents sent me to an art school when I was about eight. I studied drawing there for two years, but I stopped because I needed to focus on my school studies.

× I love drawing so much. Is this my hobby and is it because it's make me feel relaxed and peaceful and it's feel like I lost in my imaginary? So This is why I love drawing.

✓ I love drawing so much. It is my hobby because it makes me feel relaxed and peaceful and it feels like I am lost in my imagination. So this is why I love drawing.

Pronoun and verb form errors: 'Is this my hobby' is not needed as a question; use a statement 'It is my hobby'. 'it's make' and 'it's feel' are incorrect because 'it' requires third person singular verbs 'makes' and 'feels'. 'I lost' should be present progressive 'I am lost' to match the intended meaning. 'my imaginary' is incorrect noun; use 'my imagination'. Suggestion: use subject + correct third-person singular verb forms and the correct noun 'imagination', and use appropriate verb tense and sentence type (statement rather than a question).

× Yep, if I have like enough time to go or any opportunity, I will go to the gallery to admit the time, quality and the scenery.

✓ Yes, if I have enough time or the opportunity, I will go to the gallery to enjoy the time, the artworks and the scenery.

Incorrect verb choice: 'admit the time, quality and the scenery' is unnatural and likely a wrong verb. Use 'enjoy' to express experiencing time and scenery. Also 'Yep' is informal; 'Yes' is better. Remove filler 'like' and correct noun 'artworks' instead of 'quality' for meaning clarity. Suggestion: choose verbs that match meaning ('enjoy') and use more appropriate nouns ('artworks').

× Yep, because I think it's interesting because as is appear in every way in any era in the world, in every period. And I think as is connect everything with the people.

✓ Yes, because I think it is interesting since it appears in every era and connects people in many ways.

Redundancy and incorrect structure: repeated 'because' is redundant. 'as is appear' is ungrammatical; correct form is 'it appears'. 'in every way in any era in the world, in every period' is repetitive; simplify to 'in every era'. 'as is connect everything with the people' should be 'it connects people'. Suggestion: remove redundancy, use correct subject 'it' with verb 'appears/connects', and simplify phrases for clarity.

× Yep my my mom and my dad was sent me to like School of Art and I learn about two years and I quit it because I have to focus on study in school more.

✓ Yes, my mom and my dad sent me to a school of art. I studied there for about two years and I quit because I had to focus more on my school studies.

Past tense and subject-verb agreement errors: 'was sent me' is incorrect; use active past 'sent me'. 'I learn about two years' should be past 'I studied for about two years'. 'I quit it because I have to focus' mixes past and present; use past 'I had to focus'. Also article 'a school of art' and possessive 'my school studies' improve clarity. Suggestion: keep past tense consistently when describing past events, use correct verb forms and articles.