Art— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and directly answer the question first (e.g. "Not really"). Then give one or two clear, specific reasons using linking words. Avoid unclear phrases like "odd skills" and repetition about reading. Keep to 2–3 sentences and use varied vocabulary.

예시: Not really. I never practised drawing as a child, so I never developed the skills, and I prefer reading because it relaxes me and broadens my knowledge.

제안: Good direct answer and idea of guided tours. Improve by correcting grammar (e.g. "explains") and adding a brief reason why guided tours help. Use one linking word and avoid hedging phrases like "might" if you can be clearer.

예시: Not really. I find it difficult to appreciate galleries alone, but I enjoy guided tours because the guide explains the context and techniques behind each work.

제안: Begin with a direct personal response (e.g. "Yes, I do"). Remove unclear references like "He said too." Give one specific reason and an example of what you would learn. Keep to 2–3 sentences and avoid repeating "world" and "beauty."

예시: Yes, I do. Learning about art would broaden my perspective and help me understand different cultures; for example, studying paintings from other countries would teach me about their history and values.

제안: Answer directly first ("No, I didn't"). Avoid repeating earlier points and improve grammar ("lost interest in drawing"). Give one concise specific detail about what you did instead and how it affected you. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: No, I didn't. I lost interest in drawing and spent most of my free time reading books, which expanded my knowledge and helped me see things from different perspectives.

× Not really because I haven't developed any odd skills or techniques as a child, but instead of drawing I really enjoyed reading books because it always helps me feel relaxed and comfortable and teaches me a lot of knowledge which broaden my perspective.

✓ Not really, because I didn't develop any special skills or techniques as a child; instead of drawing, I really enjoyed reading books because they always helped me feel relaxed and comfortable and taught me a lot that broadened my perspective.

The original mixes present perfect ('I haven't developed') with reference to a finished past time ('as a child'), which is incorrect; use simple past ('I didn't develop'). 'Odd skills' is unnatural; 'special skills' is better. 'Instead of drawing I really enjoyed' needs past tense consistency and commas. 'Books' is plural so refer to them with 'they' and past verbs 'helped' and 'taught'. 'Which broaden my perspective' should be past 'broadened' to match timeframe. Suggestion: keep tense consistent within the sentence, choose natural collocations (special skills), and ensure pronoun-verb agreement for plural nouns.

× Not really, because I found it hard to appreciate galleries on my own, but I might enjoy the guided tour that explain the works of art.

✓ Not really, because I find it hard to appreciate galleries on my own, but I might enjoy a guided tour that explains the works of art.

The response mixes past ('I found') with a hypothetical present preference ('I might enjoy'). Use present 'I find' for a general statement. 'The guided tour' should be 'a guided tour' for non-specific reference. 'That explain' is incorrect because 'that' refers to 'tour' (singular), so use third person singular 'explains'. Suggestion: keep tense appropriate for current habits and ensure subject-verb agreement with relative clauses.

× He said too, because learning about art is really a great way to broaden your perspective on the world and deepen your appreciation of the beauty of art and the world.

✓ Yes, I do, because learning about art is a great way to broaden my perspective on the world and deepen my appreciation of the beauty of art.

'He said too' is wrong pronoun and unclear; the speaker should say 'Yes, I do' or 'I would' to answer the question. Also 'your perspective' should match the speaker: use 'my perspective'. Repeating 'the world' is redundant. Suggestion: use the correct subject pronoun for yourself, keep pronouns consistent, and avoid repetitive phrases.

× Not really because I lack background knowledge and lost interest on drawing, but instead reading.

✓ Not really, because I lacked background knowledge and lost interest in drawing; instead, I focused on reading.

The sentence mixes present 'I lack' with past 'lost'; use past 'lacked' to match 'lost'. Preposition 'interest on' is incorrect; use 'interest in'. 'Instead reading' is ungrammatical; use 'instead, I focused on reading' or 'I preferred reading'. Suggestion: maintain consistent tense, use correct prepositions ('interest in'), and provide a clear verb for the contrast.

× I really enjoyed and spent most of the time on reading because it gives me a lot of knowledge which help me broaden my perspective on the world.

✓ I really enjoyed it and spent most of my time reading because it gave me a lot of knowledge that helped me broaden my perspective on the world.

The original uses past 'enjoyed' and present 'gives'/'help' inconsistently. Use past 'gave' and 'helped' to match 'really enjoyed' and 'spent'. 'Spent most of the time on reading' is unnatural; use 'spent most of my time reading'. 'Which help me' should be 'that helped me' for past reference. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent, use natural collocations for time expressions, and match relative clause verbs to sentence tense.