Dreams— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 内容与结构：回答没有直接说明你是否记得梦，而且句子过长、内容混乱，最后也没有完成。应先直接回答，再补充一个具体的梦或解释。语法与表达：避免使用“the adults or they”“what's wrong dream about”等不清楚的表达；注意过去时，例如用“when I was a child”和“wanted”。建议使用2–3句短句，并用“but”“because”连接理由。

예시: Yes, I can remember a few dreams from my childhood. I once dreamed that I was teaching a class, probably because I wanted to become a teacher when I was young. I don’t remember many details, though.

제안: 内容与结构：你表达了会和朋友分享梦境，也提供了“回到学校”的例子，但前后有矛盾：前面说会分享，后面又说“I won't tell them”。应先明确立场，再给出原因和例子。语法：使用“share my dreams”而不是“share the dreams at heart”；“dream about being at school”比“dream about I still was still in the school”自然；“in those dreams”应使用复数。避免重复“especially”和“still”。

예시: I sometimes share my dreams with my close friends, especially when they are strange or funny. For example, I often dream that I am back at school, which may happen when I feel stressed. However, I usually keep very personal dreams to myself.

제안: 内容与结构：这段内容是对答案的评价，不是对考官问题的回答，因此没有表达你对梦境是否有特殊含义的观点。应直接回答“Yes”或“No”，然后用一个理由和例子补充。词汇和语法应围绕 dreams、memories、daily concerns 等相关表达，避免加入与问题无关的反馈语。

예시: I don’t think dreams have special meanings most of the time. They are usually a mixture of memories and daily concerns. For example, if I feel stressed before an exam, I might dream about failing it.

제안: 内容与结构：你直接回答了问题，并解释了梦想能够提供动力，逻辑基本清楚。建议减少重复“I think”和“dream”，并加入一个具体的个人例子，使回答更有针对性。词汇与表达：“realize my dream”可以使用，但“make my dreams come true”更自然；“internal energy”在这里不够地道，可以改为“motivation”或“driving force”。最后一句过长，应拆成两句。

예시: Yes, I definitely want to make my dreams come true. Having a clear goal gives me the motivation to work harder and improve myself. For example, I’m studying English regularly because I hope to achieve a good IELTS score and have more opportunities in the future.

× Wow, when I was a child I used to want to be a teacher but I don't know why because the adults or they always try to ask me what's wrong dream about the future I cannot think about one but I will pick one randomly because my grandfather is

✓ Wow, when I was a child, I wanted to be a teacher, but I don’t know why. Adults always asked me what I dreamed of doing in the future. I can’t think of one now, so I’ll pick one randomly.

原句包含多个意思，但没有用清晰的句号、连接词和从句结构进行组织，导致句子过长且难以理解。另外，最后的“because my grandfather is”没有完整谓语或补充信息，是不完整句子。建议把不同意思拆成几个完整句子，并确保每个句子都有清楚的主语和谓语。

× Adults always try to ask me what I dream about for the future.

✓ Adults always asked me what I dreamed of doing in the future.

这里描述的是“小时候”发生的事情，所以主句中的“try”应改为过去时“asked”。宾语从句中的“dream”也应与过去的语境保持一致，改为“dreamed”。

× I cannot think about one.

✓ I can’t think of one.

表示“想不起某个事物”时，固定搭配是“think of”，而不是“think about”。“think about”通常表示认真考虑或思考某件事。

× I often share the dreams at heart, especially with my friends.

✓ I often share my dreams with my friends.

“the dreams at heart”中的表达不自然。这里应使用物主代词“my”表示“我的梦想或梦境”。如果谈论自己做的梦，应直接说“my dreams”。

× I won’t tell them what I am dreaming about.

✓ I want to tell them what I am dreaming about.

“won’t”表示“不愿意”或“不会”，与前面的“share my dreams”意思矛盾。这里想表达“我想告诉他们”，应使用“want to”。

× Especially some strange things happened in the dream.

✓ Especially when strange things happen in my dreams.

这里描述的是经常发生的情况，应使用一般现在时“happen”，而不是过去时“happened”。同时，“dreams”是泛指多个梦境，因此使用复数形式更合适。

× Especially some strange things happened in the dream.

✓ Especially when strange things happen in my dreams.

“some strange things”描述的是一般情况下梦里的奇怪事情，通常应使用复数“dreams”，而不是单数“the dream”。

× Sometimes I will dream about I still was still in the school.

✓ Sometimes I dream that I am still at school.

“dream about”后面不能直接接“I still was...”这种完整从句。表达“梦见自己……”时，可以使用“dream that + 从句”。另外，句中重复使用了“still”，应删除一个。

× Sometimes I will dream about I still was still in the school.

✓ Sometimes I dream that I am still at school.

固定表达是“at school”，表示“在学校上学或处于学校场景中”。“in the school”通常强调人在学校建筑内部，这里不符合原意。

× Sometimes I will dream that I am still at school.

✓ Sometimes I dream that I am still at school.

这里描述的是一种经常发生的梦境，应使用一般现在时“dream”。“will dream”通常用于将来会发生的事情，不适合表达日常习惯。

× It’s kind of stressful when I in that dreams.

✓ It’s kind of stressful when I have that dream.

从句“when I in that dreams”缺少谓语动词，因此句子不完整。应加入“have”构成“when I have that dream”。同时，“that dream”表示某一个特定的梦，使用单数形式。

× It’s kind of stressful when I in that dreams.

✓ It’s kind of stressful when I have that dream.

“that”后面通常接单数名词，因此应使用“that dream”，而不是“that dreams”。如果想表达多个梦，应改为“those dreams”。

× I think most of the people want to realize their dreams.

✓ I think most people want to realize their dreams.

“most people”表示“大多数人”，是固定表达，通常不加“the”。“most of the people”只有在指特定的一群人时才使用。

× I think that’s one of the reasons people try to do something and that’s the motivation to encourage them to do better in the future because the dream has kind of internal energy that drives us.

✓ I think that’s one of the reasons why people try to achieve their goals. Dreams motivate them to do better in the future because they provide a kind of inner energy that drives us.

原句把多个意思连接在一个很长的句子中，造成结构混乱。“that’s the motivation to encourage them”表达不自然，可以改为“Dreams motivate them”。把长句拆成两个句子后，逻辑关系更加清楚。

× The dream has kind of internal energy that drives us.

✓ A dream has a kind of inner energy that drives us.

可数名词“kind”前需要冠词，因此应说“a kind of”。另外，泛指一个梦想时，单数可数名词“dream”前也需要冠词“a”。