Dreams— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は意味が伝わるが、文法と論理のつながりが不十分で冗長な語や繰り返しがある。まず冒頭で直接質問に答え（肯定または否定）、次に必要な詳細を1〜2文で具体的に述べること。接続詞（for example, sometimes, when）を適切に使い、不要な繰り返し（I dream when I dream, I I）を避ける。語順と時制も整理すると自然さが増す。

예시: Yes, I can remember some of my dreams. For example, I sometimes dream that I play golf with my friends or compete in a professional golf tournament.

제안: 回答は肯定しているが、内容のつながりが曖昧で文法ミスが多い。明確な主題文（Yes, I do.）の後、どのように誰に共有するかを具体的に1〜2文で述べる。接続詞を使って理由や頻度（often, sometimes）を示し、冠詞や代名詞の使い方を正すこと。

예시: Yes, I do. I often tell my friends about dreams that seem unusual, for example when I dream about meeting someone I will actually meet the next day.

제안: 意見は明確だが、文のつながりと時制の扱いが不自然。主張（Yes, I think dreams have meanings.）を述べ、その後で具体例を一つ挙げる際は過去と仮定の表現を整理する。接続詞（for example, however）を正しく配置し、冗長な語を減らすと説得力が増す。語彙はもう少し多様に。

예시: Yes, I think dreams can have special meanings. For example, I once hoped to become a professional golfer but couldn't; in my dreams I can still play in professional tournaments, which sometimes reflects my lingering ambition.

제안: 答えは明確だが、説明が未完成で文法の誤り（時制、語形）や語句の選択ミス（"I can hunt" は意味不明） がある。まず主題文で目標を述べ、その後で理由を2つくらい具体的に述べる。因果関係を示す接続詞（so, because, which）を正しく使い、意味の通る動詞を選ぶこと。

예시: Yes, of course. My dream is to become fluent in English because it will help my career and allow me to communicate easily with people from other countries. For example, I would like to work abroad and attend international conferences.

× Yes I can't remember a dream I had sometimes for example I I dream when I dream I sometimes play golf with my friend or participate in the professional golf

✓ Yes, I can remember dreams I have sometimes. For example, when I dream, I sometimes play golf with my friend or participate in a professional golf tournament.

The original sentence has multiple issues: run-on sentence, incorrect negation 'can't remember' conflicts with context, repetition 'I I dream', and missing article before 'professional golf'. Suggested correction splits into clear clauses, uses plural 'dreams' to match 'sometimes', fixes negation to 'can', removes repetition, and adds 'a' and 'tournament' for clarity. Improvements: break long ideas into shorter sentences, ensure subject and verb match intended meaning, and include necessary articles. Note: tense is present simple for habitual dreams ('I sometimes dream ...'), and article 'a' is required before 'professional golf tournament'.

× Yes I do. I sometimes share my dream with my friends for example So when I dream And I meet person who I am going to meet next day. I often tell them

✓ Yes, I do. I sometimes share my dreams with my friends. For example, when I dream and meet a person whom I am going to meet the next day, I often tell them.

Problems: singular 'dream' should be plural 'dreams' to match 'sometimes'; sentence fragments and incorrect article 'person' needs 'a person'; relative pronoun 'who' should be 'whom' because it is the object of 'meet'; awkward clause order. The correction combines fragments into complete sentences, uses plural 'dreams', inserts 'a', and uses 'whom' for correct object pronoun. Suggestions: ensure complete sentences, match singular/plural, and use correct object pronouns.

× Yes, I think so the dreams have special meanings. For example I once wanted to be a professional golfer but I couldn't. however, when I dream, I could play at the Professional Golf Tournament.

✓ Yes, I think dreams have special meanings. For example, I once wanted to be a professional golfer but I couldn't. However, in my dreams I could play at a professional golf tournament.

Issues: unnecessary definite article 'the dreams' when speaking generally; capitalization and punctuation errors; 'when I dream' is ambiguous so 'in my dreams' is clearer; 'could play at the Professional Golf Tournament' needs lowercase and 'a' before tournament. Corrections remove the definite article for general statements, fix capitalization and punctuation, and use 'in my dreams' plus 'a professional golf tournament'. Suggestions: use 'the' only for specific items, and keep consistent capitalization and articles.

× Yes, of course my dream is to become fluent in English. So it will help my career and allowed me to communicate with foreign people. So for example, I can hunt

✓ Yes, of course. My dream is to become fluent in English. It will help my career and allow me to communicate with people from other countries. For example, I can ...

Problems: tense/modal mismatch 'will help' is fine but 'allowed me' is past tense and incorrect; should be base verb 'allow' after 'will help' or parallel structure 'and allow me'; 'foreign people' is better 'people from other countries'; sentence 'So for example, I can hunt' is incomplete and unclear. The correction uses parallel verbs and clearer phrasing. Suggestions: keep verb forms parallel, use consistent tense, and avoid ambiguous or incomplete sentences; complete the example or remove it.