Dreams— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Уменьшите количество пауз и слов-паразитов (umm, uh). Даёте ответ прямо, затем добавьте одно конкретное пояснение. Следите за грамматикой (например, «when I was a child»), используйте связку для логичности и избегайте избыточности.

예시: Yes, I can usually remember my dreams. For example, when I was a child I often had frightening dreams, which stayed in my memory for a long time.

제안: Упростите структуру и используйте ясные слова — избегайте неуместных выражений («wonderful advantages»). Начните с прямого утверждения, затем объясните причину с примером, используя связку (because, but).

예시: I usually share ordinary or pleasant dreams with friends because they are entertaining, but I don't tell anyone about very strange or upsetting dreams because they feel too personal.

제안: Ответ ясен, но можно расширить мысль с логическим обоснованием и примером. Используйте связку «because» и добавьте конкретную причину или ссылка на науку, чтобы звучать убедительнее.

예시: No, I don't think dreams have a special meaning because they seem to be the brain processing emotions and memories during sleep, as scientists often suggest.

제안: Исправьте грамматику и выразите мысль короче. Начните с прямого ответа, затем кратко объясните причину с примером. Используйте правильные формы («I don't want my dreams to come true», «I still sometimes have them»).

예시: To be honest, I don't want my dreams to come true because as a child I had very bad nightmares, and I still experience them occasionally.

× Yes, I can remember the dreams, umm, I had.

✓ Yes, I can remember the dreams I had.

The sentence contains an unnecessary comma before the relative clause 'I had'. Remove the comma to correctly link the clause and maintain present tense reference to past dreams. Suggestion: Omit the comma before the relative clause and keep the main clause simple.

× Moreover, I remember all of them by the way, uh, when I was child, uh, I had terrible uh, dreams because uh, I was uh, impressive child.

✓ Moreover, I remember all of them; when I was a child I had terrible dreams because I was an impressionable child.

Multiple problems: missing article 'a' before 'child' and 'an' before 'impressionable' (article errors/word choice). 'Impressive' is incorrect adjective; 'impressionable' fits context. Extra filler words and commas disrupt sentence flow. Use semicolon or separate clauses. Suggestion: include appropriate articles ('a child', 'an impressionable child') and choose correct adjective 'impressionable'.

× Well, if it is normal, typical dreams or wonderful advantages, yes I share them with others.

✓ Well, if they are normal, typical dreams or pleasant ones, yes, I share them with others.

Pronoun reference and agreement: 'it is' should be 'they are' to agree with plural 'dreams' (subject-verb agreement). 'Wonderful advantages' is incorrect collocation; 'pleasant ones' or 'good dreams' is appropriate. Suggestion: match plural pronoun and verb and use correct noun phrase.

× But if it is something unique or terrible, no, I don't speak it.

✓ But if it is something unique or terrible, no, I don't talk about it.

Verb 'speak' is intransitive here and does not take a direct object meaning 'talk about'. Use 'talk about' or 'tell others about it'. Also keep 'it' as topic pronoun. Suggestion: use 'talk about' to express sharing content.

× No, I don't think so, because in my opinion dreams are biological processes and not special meanings.

✓ No, I don't think so, because in my opinion dreams are biological processes and do not have special meanings.

Noun phrase 'not special meanings' is ungrammatical. Use clause 'do not have special meanings' to express negation properly. Also adjust verb 'are' to 'do not have' for possession. Suggestion: use 'do not have' with plural 'meanings'.

× To tell the truth, I don't want that my dreams come true because when I was a child I had really terrible dreams and now I sometimes have it.

✓ To tell the truth, I don't want my dreams to come true because when I was a child I had really terrible dreams and now I sometimes have them.

Use infinitive 'to come true' after 'want' with object: 'want my dreams to come true' and not 'want that my dreams come true' (incorrect clause structure). Also pronoun agreement: 'dreams' is plural, so use 'them' not 'it'. Suggestion: use 'want + object + to + verb' construction and matching plural pronoun.